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by Michael (MV)
22 May 2019, 17:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bukowski Speaks in Voices of the Dead
Replies: 2
Views: 159

Re: Bukowski Speaks with the Voices of the Dead

Hi Frank, Or perhaps The Buk would say If they have voice they ain't dead. Then MV says Amen Brothers & Sisters That's not to say your poem isn't alive - the poem is lively with voice & emotion, and is a visceral vision. The Buk's dante poem as written by Frank in the medium of persona-poem- perhaps...
by Michael (MV)
22 May 2019, 04:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Mother's Flashbacks
Replies: 5
Views: 240

Re: My Mother's Flashbacks

empathy in the flashback

the italicized infrastructure is seamless and emotionally fracturing

like a split (divorced) screen

technique effectively in service to the familia trauma



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Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
22 May 2019, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: La Brea Tar Pits
Replies: 4
Views: 269

Re: La Brea Tar Pits

Hi Bob, re "I wonder, how many more years will I live? Not nearly as long as these tar pits...." Actually, those tar pits have never been alive; never lived. You & all other humans will live forever. We are only here on earth temporarily. "I wonder, how many more years will I be here? Fortunately, n...
by Michael (MV)
22 May 2019, 00:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: haiku
Replies: 5
Views: 224

Re: haiku

  Hi Billy, kiss-ku haiku that pucker-up kiss-ku haiku with pucker power kiss-ku haiku with the power to pucker flitting flower to flower butterfly kisses I'm esp taken with: "i was young once it seemed an eternity one long kiss" Once upon a time I am young - the kiss forever lingering a sleeping to...
by Michael (MV)
21 May 2019, 23:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Moonlit Garden
Replies: 5
Views: 257

Re: Moonlit Garden

  Hi meenas, I lost a lengthy workshopping - I'm getting good at that   :lol: Eira has included some grammatical corrections in the last. A quick recap: This - midnight in the garden of good & evil poem - is an extended image of the moonlit garden; so utilize that title space with another word. phra...
by Michael (MV)
19 May 2019, 21:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: prelude without conclude
Replies: 2
Views: 237

prelude without conclude

every grave cenotaphic with the epitaph for all us rolling stones "Start me up I'll never stop never stop," Non stop able since I am created stopless - Thanks to the Savior of the sun & moon - Our Father kindly made Death drop dead for me, Not "only live once." Born once and living forever Once upo...
by Michael (MV)
19 May 2019, 18:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 337

Re: haiku

Hi Billy, reading again this morning, and sharing this variation that occurred to me: his buzzing chasuble, a temple - beekeeper in the field ^^ and I see an impressionistic canvas And to accompany your 2nd haiku, in which this Sunday sunrise, I'm reading "above the clouds" as "on earth as it is in ...
by Michael (MV)
19 May 2019, 08:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 337

Re: haiku

Hi Billy,

Good examples of haiku

not sure, but maybe another word for "carrying" - one even more specific


Of course, I like the 2nd the best - my personal favorite

the joyful sound

As Keats says - "a thing of beauty is a joy forever"

Laughter is a vital sign of Life

😎

Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
19 May 2019, 08:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Short Poem
Replies: 3
Views: 252

Re: Short Poem

1/ ,perhaps this is an image of empowerment

2/ or a haute couture fantasy fashion show
with the models upstaging the forest as they advance the runway


but then 1 would also be the statement of 2

the fashion statement

😎

Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
18 May 2019, 13:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: a micro-poem celebrating Virginia Ruth born 5/18/1929
Replies: 2
Views: 256

a micro-poem celebrating Virginia Ruth born 5/18/1929

                    How can son be ruthless             Mother was given             the middle name Ruth            
by Michael (MV)
18 May 2019, 12:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: untitled senryu
Replies: 10
Views: 406

Re: untitled senryu

  Hi Eira,   a 3-line micro-form; that 3rd line crowds the senryu - and, too, there is that abstraction "joy" if filtering for a senryu, consider starting along these lines: a mother's boundless joy from a test tube ^^ still there a need - in both the 3-line micro-poem & senryu - to show the abstrac...
by Michael (MV)
18 May 2019, 09:59
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Congrats Bob Bradshaw Eclectica
Replies: 4
Views: 179

Re: Congrats Bob Bradshaw Eclectica

  Congrats, Bob (Thanks Kenneth for providing the link.) Bob, I hope these links are enjoyed to celebrate your pub & recognition: http://www.garboforever.com/I_want_to_be_alone.htm https://youtu.be/RDLJZfNPWeg ^^ after that you might be ready for classic Rolling Stones, a live performance: https://w...
by Michael (MV)
17 May 2019, 04:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kid
Replies: 6
Views: 421

Re: The Kid

Hi Bob,

engaging story-telling poem

the figurative language is accessible
yet fresh

and simile is the figurative of choice here for the persona & voice here

the early years of Marlon Brando:

"I could have been a contender"

😎

Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
17 May 2019, 00:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa
Replies: 8
Views: 505

Re: Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa

  Hi Kenneth, not all 3-line micro-poems are haiku-poems: It's not the fulfillment & distribution of of a 5/7/5 syllabic count that makes a haiku, esp in English. Besides, the poem is not the form; the form is not the poem: the form is in service to the poem. Haiku is one breath. This example by Nic...
by Michael (MV)
16 May 2019, 22:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Vir Triumphalis (1944)
Replies: 5
Views: 444

Re: Vir Triumphalis - March of the Defeated (1944)

  Hi Frank,   Allow me to echo Bob's observations & praise. On the short-list for the upcoming June IBPC. And allow me to bring to your attention that it seems to me(it reads to me) that the pronoun to "lies," "they," is missing: This is the last waltz of the National Socialism, the lies of their Fü...
by Michael (MV)
15 May 2019, 05:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: déjà vu"   (so it must be true)
Replies: 3
Views: 400

déjà vu"   (so it must be true)

  “She looks a lot like Lana Turner,” they say about the strawberry blonde - a post-Depression 40's teen also working the fountain in a drug store not far from the high school. May's double feature: The Sunday following Mother’s Day celebrates her birthday. I play the earlybird, offer to carry her t...
by Michael (MV)
06 May 2019, 04:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Quasimodo
Replies: 17
Views: 2113

Re: Quasimodo

  Hi Bob, got too busy unexpectedly, but here below are some additional Unconditional workshop-shares. If you elect to do any edit/revise, do so on your copy posted at Palaver: http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=7483#p34985 I'll be sending in the finals Monday afternoon May 6...
by Michael (MV)
03 May 2019, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Innocence Lost
Replies: 24
Views: 3522

Re: Innocence Lost

an unconditional workshop suggestion -- "Innocence Lost" - not needed - too much abstraction -the image & voice of the allusion imply that. Consider: "Rosebud" -- Citizen Kane utters the name of his sled, given to him by his mother, before his death. The boy was playing with it when taken from her. ...
by Michael (MV)
03 May 2019, 02:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poem For a Mad Son
Replies: 6
Views: 635

Re: Poem For a Mad Son

Consider leaving "poem" out of the title

To a Mad Son

or

For a Mad Son


Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
03 May 2019, 02:15
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming May IBPC 2019:
Replies: 16
Views: 744

Update 5/2 re Upcoming May IBPC 2019:

As I read what is here: Quasimodo (I'm 3rding) ^^ Thanks, Bob, for providing those essentials. I hope to further workshop this evening(been unavailable sooner) - unconditional workshop suggestions - but if you choose to edit, there is still time in the short window. Poem to a Mad Son (I'm 2nding) ^^...
by Michael (MV)
01 May 2019, 16:32
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Re: May 2, 2019 Yom HaShoah (Holocaust Remembrance Day) 21st annual poetry issue:
Replies: 3
Views: 276

Re: May 2, 2019 Yom HaShoah (Holocaust Remembrance Day) 21st annual poetry issue:

http://poetrysuperhighway.com/psh/ It is an honor and a healthy sense of community involvement - via my creative writing - to be a contributor in poetry (#31) to this global anthology, and to share the publication with other creatives, like here @ WB. in the spirit creativity, Michael (MV) http://po...
by Michael (MV)
29 Apr 2019, 09:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Quasimodo
Replies: 17
Views: 2113

Re: Quasimodo

Bob, I find the the opening of VI, esp the 1st stanza, has been forfeited to streamlining: "Taunts are hurled like stones by boys and drunks. I duck many because I'm stone deaf--from ringing bells. People think that I'm dumb when I don't respond, but I have always known where to find peace." ^^ Ther...
by Michael (MV)
29 Apr 2019, 07:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poem For a Mad Son
Replies: 6
Views: 635

Re: Poem For a Mad Son

Hi Kenneth, I don't find the son to be mad; however, I do understand that his mother nevertheless is concerned he might be. A minor workshop share re the syntax of the finale: I'm secretly grateful to all the pretty girls who will never crush your heart; and the machinations of this world that won't...
by Michael (MV)
29 Apr 2019, 07:35
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming May IBPC 2019:
Replies: 16
Views: 744

Upcoming May IBPC 2019:

Voice your recommendation(s) here, and Please let us know ASAP if you are not going to be available to represent the Writer's Block - then we will know not to consider your poems further for this month's IBPC. I/we will be looking for consensus - in keeping with a communal workshop environment Which...
by Michael (MV)
28 Apr 2019, 20:23
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2019 (Congrats Frank - 2nd place)
Replies: 2
Views: 271

Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2019 (Congrats Frank - 2nd place)

Thanks, Frank(Ieuan ap Hywel), for bringing another IBPC honor to the Writer's Block: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/poems/daunted Congrats to the Writer's Block - a wonderful finale to National Poetry Month 2019 and Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets whose poems placed, esp Bob Bradshaw, author of the 1s...

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