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To me this is a good example of "show, don't tell " we learn a lot about this couple, their dynamic. N places himself in a subordinate role, never quite measuring up but willing to mollify, to run faster,try harder, and his fear he may lose her is ever present, despite his best effort . I love " rei...

We all live in a yellow submarine. Aeons of war and shipwreck have left our bones scattered across ocean floors the way a reckless child strews sticks. We rise from the tangle of spars and masts, reassemble ourselves like tinker toys, don skin and clothes, revisit the world of men just long enough f...

I get where you're going. I think the choice of descriptions don't carry the poem. I suggest better metaphors or if you need to keep them, add a stanza or two. As is, it's fairly sterile for such an emotional subject

I don't know what is worse. A mentally unfit president or those who cover for him

My ancestor was a tail gunner
He was awarded the Distinguished Flying Cross
During the Battle of LAX in 1775.

They had a pinup of Ivanka
painted on the plane.
Show some respect.

Good luck

I'm predicting a place in IBPC on this Bob. Bet money.

Im going to third your poem Michael. IBPC has been very generous to me. I appreciate your seconding behind your own poem. Very selfless.

Palaver

Siva. You have 3 nominations on this for IBPC

You got three if Siva accepts

Above my pay grade

Thank you Bob. Rarely do I annotate a poem .This was an assignment for a local magazine. They accepted it if I would remove " pissing". I decided not too. Appreciate your support

Frank, this is a finely crafted poem. I confess total lack
of familiarity with most of the terms and philosophies.

Thank you Bob. I accept for Escher

Sivas Newlyweds

Bobs Burn Unit

Undecided yet on 3rd

For we all love a wild girl keeping a hold on a dream she wants, singer, dancer, passionate lover.." Excerpt From "Gone" Carl Sandburg There's a turnstile where prize roses stood, and for two bucks I can stand where you stood pissing after a hard session of black coffee and rewrites. The lake where ...

Thanks Bob. I knew it was risky to post. Some topics aren't well suited for poetry,and some poems just aren't that appealing. You've been generous.

There is supposed to be walls, containment, a separation. I need medication to attain this. A sound or smell, a scenario in a book, something a friend shares, can trigger a tsunami of emotion unfortunate. It's too hard to tell a dream from a memory, memory from fantasy, fantasy from actuality. Memor...

Thank you Frank

Thanks Michael

Thanks Billy

No longer in that environment, but there are bosses I've had who are still breathing only because I have a fear of prison

Worthy subject for a poem. I always felt sorry for her. Nicely done

Thank you Frank and Michael for the suggestions. I revised.