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by Kenneth2816
16 Jul 2019, 13:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kite Flying
Replies: 2
Views: 60

Re: Kite Flying

To me this is a good example of "show, don't tell " we learn a lot about this couple, their dynamic. N places himself in a subordinate role, never quite measuring up but willing to mollify, to run faster,try harder, and his fear he may lose her is ever present, despite his best effort . I love " rei...
by Kenneth2816
14 Jul 2019, 08:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Song of the Drowned
Replies: 2
Views: 86

Song of the Drowned

We all live in a yellow submarine. Aeons of war and shipwreck have left our bones scattered across ocean floors the way a reckless child strews sticks. We rise from the tangle of spars and masts, reassemble ourselves like tinker toys, don skin and clothes, revisit the world of men just long enough f...
by Kenneth2816
14 Jul 2019, 08:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Our Parents
Replies: 3
Views: 109

Re: Our Parents

I get where you're going. I think the choice of descriptions don't carry the poem. I suggest better metaphors or if you need to keep them, add a stanza or two. As is, it's fairly sterile for such an emotional subject
by Kenneth2816
08 Jul 2019, 11:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: #revolutionarywarstory
Replies: 4
Views: 328

Re: #revolutionarywarstory

I don't know what is worse. A mentally unfit president or those who cover for him
by Kenneth2816
07 Jul 2019, 14:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: #revolutionarywarstory
Replies: 4
Views: 328

#revolutionarywarstory

My ancestor was a tail gunner
He was awarded the Distinguished Flying Cross
During the Battle of LAX in 1775.

They had a pinup of Ivanka
painted on the plane.
Show some respect.
by Kenneth2816
04 Jul 2019, 21:14
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

Good luck
by Kenneth2816
03 Jul 2019, 13:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
Replies: 7
Views: 1105

Re: Children from a Burn Ward Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium

I'm predicting a place in IBPC on this Bob. Bet money.
by Kenneth2816
03 Jul 2019, 09:55
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

Im going to third your poem Michael. IBPC has been very generous to me. I appreciate your seconding behind your own poem. Very selfless.
by Kenneth2816
03 Jul 2019, 00:10
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

You got three if Siva accepts
by Kenneth2816
02 Jul 2019, 19:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mahaaprasthaana
Replies: 3
Views: 422

Re: Mahaaprasthaana

Above my pay grade
by Kenneth2816
02 Jul 2019, 18:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace
Replies: 2
Views: 526

Re: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace

Thank you Bob. Rarely do I annotate a poem .This was an assignment for a local magazine. They accepted it if I would remove " pissing". I decided not too. Appreciate your support
by Kenneth2816
02 Jul 2019, 18:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mahaaprasthaana
Replies: 3
Views: 422

Re: Mahaaprasthaana

Frank, this is a finely crafted poem. I confess total lack
of familiarity with most of the terms and philosophies.
by Kenneth2816
30 Jun 2019, 04:31
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

Thank you Bob. I accept for Escher
by Kenneth2816
29 Jun 2019, 21:35
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

Sivas Newlyweds

Bobs Burn Unit

Undecided yet on 3rd
by Kenneth2816
27 Jun 2019, 18:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace
Replies: 2
Views: 526

Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace

For we all love a wild girl keeping a hold on a dream she wants, singer, dancer, passionate lover.." Excerpt From "Gone" Carl Sandburg There's a turnstile where prize roses stood, and for two bucks I can stand where you stood pissing after a hard session of black coffee and rewrites. The lake where ...
by Kenneth2816
27 Jun 2019, 11:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: What It's Really Like
Replies: 2
Views: 607

Re: What It's Really Like

Thanks Bob. I knew it was risky to post. Some topics aren't well suited for poetry,and some poems just aren't that appealing. You've been generous.
by Kenneth2816
25 Jun 2019, 12:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: What It's Really Like
Replies: 2
Views: 607

What It's Really Like

There is supposed to be walls, containment, a separation. I need medication to attain this. A sound or smell, a scenario in a book, something a friend shares, can trigger a tsunami of emotion unfortunate. It's too hard to tell a dream from a memory, memory from fantasy, fantasy from actuality. Memor...
by Kenneth2816
25 Jun 2019, 05:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Michelangelo's David
Replies: 13
Views: 1389

Re: Michelangelo's David

Thank you Frank
by Kenneth2816
23 Jun 2019, 17:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Can Make You Grateful For A 1% Yearly Raise
Replies: 3
Views: 783

Re: I Can Make You Grateful For A 1% Yearly Raise

No longer in that environment, but there are bosses I've had who are still breathing only because I have a fear of prison
by Kenneth2816
23 Jun 2019, 17:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lot’s Wife
Replies: 8
Views: 1300

Re: Lot’s Wife

Worthy subject for a poem. I always felt sorry for her. Nicely done
by Kenneth2816
22 Jun 2019, 12:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Michelangelo's David
Replies: 13
Views: 1389

Re: After a Documentary on Michelangelo's David

Thank you Frank and Michael for the suggestions. I revised.

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