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by Billy
13 Nov 2020, 06:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Long Hair Named Desire
Replies: 6
Views: 896

Re: Long Hair Named Desire

I really like the title. I think you mean, "reached down to the knees" or "reached to the knees" Up makes sound as if the hair is growing from the ground up.
by Billy
13 Nov 2020, 06:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Red, Red Moment
Replies: 4
Views: 1291

Re: Red, Red Moment

Thanks Bob, Michael.

Michael, I changed work to labor. Thanks
by Billy
01 Nov 2020, 22:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: October still-life : "I am with you always"
Replies: 2
Views: 976

Re: triptych : Sunkin : "I am with you always"

The bare bones, yet, the space is always with us.
by Billy
01 Nov 2020, 22:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Antlers
Replies: 3
Views: 1007

Re: Antlers

Thanks Bob and Michael

Love Traffic, Michael
by Billy
31 Oct 2020, 08:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Antlers
Replies: 3
Views: 1007

Antlers

Antlers Crisp morning, sheets whipping in the wind, they follow the street jauntily. Everything dazzles, invading their heads as if they are antenna tuned to the slightest nuances in atmosphere. Clickety, click, like the taps we put on our shoes in junior high, to be cool-- the sound of ourselves--...
by Billy
31 Oct 2020, 07:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Floods Down The Road
Replies: 4
Views: 1064

Re: Floods Down The Road

Yes, I like this descriptive piece. I was immediately struck by "rains pour in composure"
by Billy
31 Oct 2020, 07:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Floods Down The Road
Replies: 4
Views: 1064

Re: Floods Down The Road

Yes, I like this descriptive piece. I was immediately struck by "rains pour in composure"
by Billy
31 Oct 2020, 07:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: String of Flowers
Replies: 4
Views: 1115

Re: String of Flowers

I like the line: "flowers being never partisan:

I think Bob has given you something to think about. I, too, don't use enough imagery. I'm working at it.
by Billy
27 Oct 2020, 04:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Red, Red Moment
Replies: 4
Views: 1291

Re: Red, Red Moment

Thanks Bob
by Billy
27 Oct 2020, 04:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Return of the fox revised
Replies: 10
Views: 2243

Re: Return of the fox revised

I changed it Bob
by Billy
23 Oct 2020, 04:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: To My Old Age
Replies: 9
Views: 1678

Re: Ode to My Old Age

Like this very much. I kind of want a different end, but maybe this one is enough.

Maybe:

as if old age
wanders over a hill

to pick a certain flower
and never returns


no, that's not it, oh well, it's your poem
by Billy
23 Oct 2020, 04:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Red, Red Moment
Replies: 4
Views: 1291

Red, Red Moment

Red, Red Moment It doesn't last; what does? My light fading. So much I missed while the stars blaze for centuries, millenniums. Somewhere at the center a star shines too faraway for it to know of existence. Darkness thick as ignorance surrounds it, would snuff it out like a candle between its callo...
by Billy
22 Oct 2020, 22:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: At The End Of Loss
Replies: 7
Views: 2259

Re: At The End Of Loss

Thanks Michael, I revised

Thanks Ken, Siva
by Billy
22 Oct 2020, 22:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Housekeeper’s lament
Replies: 6
Views: 2371

Re: Housekeeper’s lament

Thanks Ken, Michael
by Billy
22 Oct 2020, 22:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Heading To Freedom
Replies: 5
Views: 2231

Re: Heading To Freedom

Thanks Siva, Bob
by Billy
21 Oct 2020, 00:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Return of the fox revised
Replies: 10
Views: 2243

Re: Return of the fox

Thanks Bob, doesn’t work for me either.
by Billy
20 Oct 2020, 19:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Return of the fox revised
Replies: 10
Views: 2243

Re: Return of the fox

Thanks Ken, Meenas, Michael
by Billy
20 Oct 2020, 19:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beggar's Lice
Replies: 5
Views: 1677

Re: Beggar's Lice

Short but never-ending cycle of a poem, thanks.
by Billy
20 Oct 2020, 08:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: horizon of eyes
Replies: 0
Views: 786

horizon of eyes

horizon of eyes

dark dismal morning
20th of October
no one waking on their own

the candle struck
by the fire of exuberance
only the foolish can see

too early for others
the blight of dormancy
like a pandemic

that has stopped hearts
a breath away
from a flash of light
by Billy
19 Oct 2020, 01:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Return of the fox revised
Replies: 10
Views: 2243

Return of the fox revised

revision Return of the Fox I haven't seen him, but he's there. Crows caw at every turning leaf. A smell of apples rotting. White clouds like shadows folding in and out of themselves. It was not his intent to impart any trace of foreboding. He left home with no ill-will, hopes to return before snowfa...
by Billy
19 Oct 2020, 00:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Today is my birthday, I am turning 65
Replies: 7
Views: 1499

Re: Today is my birthday, I am turning 65

Happy Birthday, Siva!

But I think Bob and I are the seniors, at least, age wise.
I'm 70. Not sure how old Bob is. I don't thin Ken is even close, but I could be wrong.
by Billy
18 Oct 2020, 00:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sunflowers
Replies: 11
Views: 2556

Re: Sunflowers

Yeah, I agree with Ken. How about "sun splashed grave". Otherwise I like the poem; it's full of wonderful details.
by Billy
17 Oct 2020, 23:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Navaratri
Replies: 7
Views: 1861

Re: Navaratri

I like this, the mysterious start. I eliminated some stuff that was telly. The dolls from the attic come down in order, the young ones jump all over, the adults descend in style while the old stagger. Krishna shimmers in blue. Lakshmi graces in green. Meenakshi flanks both in red. The garden set wit...
by Billy
15 Oct 2020, 17:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Heavenly Blue
Replies: 6
Views: 1615

Re: Heavenly Blue

I decided that the last line had to be “heavenly blue/robes”. Royal blue is quite different from heavenly blue, and I think it works as the title is a little mysterious until later on.
by Billy
15 Oct 2020, 07:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Heavenly Blue
Replies: 6
Views: 1615

Re: Heavenly Blue

Thanks Bob, may try another one like this.

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