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- 31 Oct 2019, 22:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2037
Re: I Could Only Write This Today
Oh I see that, but yes I’m with other board
- 31 Oct 2019, 19:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2037
Re: I Could Only Write This Today
Thanks Michael, I will consider your suggestion.
I am representing another board. I haven't been nominated here anyway.
I am representing another board. I haven't been nominated here anyway.
- 28 Oct 2019, 22:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) - V2
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1562
Re: A Sparrow Found (1917)
Very well-written piece. I echo Judy and Bob’s suggestions.
- 28 Oct 2019, 22:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Red Spider Lilies
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1207
Re: Red Spider Lilies
Wow! No nits.
- 28 Oct 2019, 22:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Planters Moon
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1497
Re: Planters Moon
Yes, great imagination and well-written. Stanza’s 1,4,5,6, 7 are my favorites, but all good.
- 28 Oct 2019, 21:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: How Far The River
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1375
Re: How Far The River
Thanks Judy, sometimes I write with punctuation just because and realize later the poem doesn’t call for it.
- 28 Oct 2019, 21:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2037
Re: I Could Only Write This Today
Another site has nominated it for IBPC. Thanks for commenting Bob andJudy.
- 28 Oct 2019, 21:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Wild Palms
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1488
Re: The Wild Palms
thanks Judy, i’ll Use your suggestion.
Bob, I’ve put two ideas together from Bible. God knows the number of feathers on a sparrow and little ones refers to Jesus talking about children.
Bob, I’ve put two ideas together from Bible. God knows the number of feathers on a sparrow and little ones refers to Jesus talking about children.
- 28 Oct 2019, 21:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: removed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 774
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- 25 Oct 2019, 07:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2037
Re: I Could Only Write This Today
Thanks Kenneth. Oh, you are so right, Judy, I wrote this directly into the post without rewrite, so it needs some touch-up. I just like to get stuff out, sometimes it doesn't need anything. I'll delete the "Seems". I've been trying to avoid a lot of nonessential words like: but, just, seems, etc., e...
- 25 Oct 2019, 06:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Joseph Haydn
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1203
Re: Joseph Haydn
I love so many of the images in this poem. The poem is better without all the pronouns.
- 25 Oct 2019, 06:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1379
Re: A Maze I Am In
Just my editing, take or leave, it's your poem. I would like a more personal title. The retinue around me keeps vigil for what I don't know, They watch every move, every deal with uncanny insight, I am neither extraordinary nor foolish, in between both a very ordinary one. Those eyes behind my back ...
- 25 Oct 2019, 06:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Across The River
- Replies: 10
- Views: 1978
Re: Across The River
That final line is perfect. Whole poem good. There's a lot of repetition but it seems to work.
- 25 Oct 2019, 06:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2037
I Could Only Write This Today
I Could Only Write This Today I lie down next to my father we're looking up into the sky a few drifting clouds and the blue of forgetfulness. I feel him thinking like when I was a kid. He'd be planning some new venture, the one to make us rich. Different this time in a way I'd never felt. He's grey...
- 25 Oct 2019, 01:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Smelling the Roses
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1177
Re: Smelling the Roses
A senyru I wrote:
twilight
a skunk stops
to smell the roses
twilight
a skunk stops
to smell the roses
- 23 Oct 2019, 18:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Wild Palms
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1488
Re: The Wild Palms
Sorry, double post
- 23 Oct 2019, 18:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Wild Palms
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1488
Re: The Wild Palms
The poem is playing with one of the ideas in the novel.
Hopefully the reader doesn’t have to know what that is.
Thanks Kenneth
Hopefully the reader doesn’t have to know what that is.
Thanks Kenneth
- 23 Oct 2019, 18:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Wild Palms
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1488
Re: The Wild Palms
The poem is playing with one of the ideas in the novel.
Thanks Kenneth
Thanks Kenneth
- 23 Oct 2019, 18:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: How Far The River
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1375
Re: How Far The River
Thanks Kenneth
- 23 Oct 2019, 08:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
- Replies: 10
- Views: 1404
Re: Someone's Hallelujah
I was thinking this is about abortion, but what do I know. Then the first 2 stanzas make sense to me.
- 22 Oct 2019, 05:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Wild Palms
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1488
The Wild Palms
The Wild Palms* Yes, yes, the wind, the wind! Blow me down again, again. The water's rising, the banks are overflowing. Hallelujah! I say it as a sinner, God, it's the best I can do. How many times. Too many to count. You've numbered them all like feathers of the least little ones. I miss the sword...
- 22 Oct 2019, 04:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: How Far The River
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1375
Re: How Far The River
Hey, thanks Bob that was a slip of the unconscious. I'll change it.
- 22 Oct 2019, 03:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: How Far The River
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1375
How Far The River
How Far The River
I hear it. A blues
song for all the leaving
anyone can stand.
The current a stubborn
child. No conscience
to hold it back. Driven
to arrive. Bumping into
fear, fish in the depths
never see the light.
The water muddy.
A whirlpool of illusions.
Banks lifted high as skirts.
I hear it. A blues
song for all the leaving
anyone can stand.
The current a stubborn
child. No conscience
to hold it back. Driven
to arrive. Bumping into
fear, fish in the depths
never see the light.
The water muddy.
A whirlpool of illusions.
Banks lifted high as skirts.
- 22 Oct 2019, 03:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Crossing Into South Carolina
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2586
Re: Crossing Into South Carolina
Good poem, reminds of my younger days. And brought to mind Faulkner's novel, "The Wild Palms" for some reason.
- 22 Oct 2019, 03:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: You Can't Rid a Room of an Elephant
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2042
Re: You Can't Rid a Room of an Elephant
Hi, Bob, good poem about alcoholism and families often tip-toeing around it. I like the punch part, it is very clear to me.