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by Billy
31 Oct 2019, 22:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2037

Re: I Could Only Write This Today

Oh I see that, but yes I’m with other board
by Billy
31 Oct 2019, 19:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2037

Re: I Could Only Write This Today

Thanks Michael, I will consider your suggestion.
I am representing another board. I haven't been nominated here anyway.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 22:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) - V2
Replies: 5
Views: 1562

Re: A Sparrow Found (1917)

Very well-written piece. I echo Judy and Bob’s suggestions.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 22:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Red Spider Lilies
Replies: 4
Views: 1207

Re: Red Spider Lilies

Wow! No nits.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 22:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Planters Moon
Replies: 7
Views: 1497

Re: Planters Moon

Yes, great imagination and well-written. Stanza’s 1,4,5,6, 7 are my favorites, but all good.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 21:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: How Far The River
Replies: 6
Views: 1375

Re: How Far The River

Thanks Judy, sometimes I write with punctuation just because and realize later the poem doesn’t call for it.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 21:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2037

Re: I Could Only Write This Today

Another site has nominated it for IBPC. Thanks for commenting Bob andJudy.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 21:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Wild Palms
Replies: 7
Views: 1488

Re: The Wild Palms

thanks Judy, i’ll Use your suggestion.

Bob, I’ve put two ideas together from Bible. God knows the number of feathers on a sparrow and little ones refers to Jesus talking about children.
by Billy
28 Oct 2019, 21:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: removed
Replies: 2
Views: 774

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by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 07:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2037

Re: I Could Only Write This Today

Thanks Kenneth. Oh, you are so right, Judy, I wrote this directly into the post without rewrite, so it needs some touch-up. I just like to get stuff out, sometimes it doesn't need anything. I'll delete the "Seems". I've been trying to avoid a lot of nonessential words like: but, just, seems, etc., e...
by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 06:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Joseph Haydn
Replies: 8
Views: 1203

Re: Joseph Haydn

I love so many of the images in this poem. The poem is better without all the pronouns.
by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 06:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Maze I Am In
Replies: 9
Views: 1379

Re: A Maze I Am In

Just my editing, take or leave, it's your poem. I would like a more personal title. The retinue around me keeps vigil for what I don't know, They watch every move, every deal with uncanny insight, I am neither extraordinary nor foolish, in between both a very ordinary one. Those eyes behind my back ...
by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 06:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Across The River
Replies: 10
Views: 1978

Re: Across The River

That final line is perfect. Whole poem good. There's a lot of repetition but it seems to work.
by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 06:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2037

I Could Only Write This Today

I Could Only Write This Today I lie down next to my father we're looking up into the sky a few drifting clouds and the blue of forgetfulness. I feel him thinking like when I was a kid. He'd be planning some new venture, the one to make us rich. Different this time in a way I'd never felt. He's grey...
by Billy
25 Oct 2019, 01:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Smelling the Roses
Replies: 9
Views: 1177

Re: Smelling the Roses

A senyru I wrote:

twilight
a skunk stops
to smell the roses
by Billy
23 Oct 2019, 18:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Wild Palms
Replies: 7
Views: 1488

Re: The Wild Palms

Sorry, double post
by Billy
23 Oct 2019, 18:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Wild Palms
Replies: 7
Views: 1488

Re: The Wild Palms

The poem is playing with one of the ideas in the novel.
Hopefully the reader doesn’t have to know what that is.
Thanks Kenneth
by Billy
23 Oct 2019, 18:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Wild Palms
Replies: 7
Views: 1488

Re: The Wild Palms

The poem is playing with one of the ideas in the novel.

Thanks Kenneth
by Billy
23 Oct 2019, 18:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: How Far The River
Replies: 6
Views: 1375

Re: How Far The River

Thanks Kenneth
by Billy
23 Oct 2019, 08:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
Replies: 10
Views: 1404

Re: Someone's Hallelujah

I was thinking this is about abortion, but what do I know. Then the first 2 stanzas make sense to me.
by Billy
22 Oct 2019, 05:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Wild Palms
Replies: 7
Views: 1488

The Wild Palms

The Wild Palms* Yes, yes, the wind, the wind! Blow me down again, again. The water's rising, the banks are overflowing. Hallelujah! I say it as a sinner, God, it's the best I can do. How many times. Too many to count. You've numbered them all like feathers of the least little ones. I miss the sword...
by Billy
22 Oct 2019, 04:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: How Far The River
Replies: 6
Views: 1375

Re: How Far The River

Hey, thanks Bob that was a slip of the unconscious. I'll change it.
by Billy
22 Oct 2019, 03:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: How Far The River
Replies: 6
Views: 1375

How Far The River

How Far The River

I hear it. A blues
song for all the leaving
anyone can stand.

The current a stubborn
child. No conscience
to hold it back. Driven

to arrive. Bumping into
fear, fish in the depths
never see the light.

The water muddy.
A whirlpool of illusions.
Banks lifted high as skirts.
by Billy
22 Oct 2019, 03:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Crossing Into South Carolina
Replies: 8
Views: 2586

Re: Crossing Into South Carolina

Good poem, reminds of my younger days. And brought to mind Faulkner's novel, "The Wild Palms" for some reason.
by Billy
22 Oct 2019, 03:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: You Can't Rid a Room of an Elephant
Replies: 8
Views: 2042

Re: You Can't Rid a Room of an Elephant

Hi, Bob, good poem about alcoholism and families often tip-toeing around it. I like the punch part, it is very clear to me.

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