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by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 08:52
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 6
Views: 174

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

I second Michael's nomination of Bob's 'Separation.'
by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 07:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 1059

Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

Bob
Please read the version I have posted today in the IBPC thread.The 'Biking Cross-Country' poem.
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 07:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
Replies: 6
Views: 280

Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti

I think you ccan add these two stanzas because they bring in the persona element and by so doing validate the last line.
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 21:42
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 6
Views: 174

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

Biking Cross- Country, is my original unpublished poem and I am not representing any other forum. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com. "Biking Cross-Country" We rode past a rubber plantation where we couldn't breathe without inhaling the stench --worse than burning tyres emitting smoke pipes...
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 20:36
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 6
Views: 174

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

I nominate Bob's 'Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti .'
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 08:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)

I think the last stanza puts the poem onto a different level altogether.
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by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 06:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)

Bob.thanks.I copy pasted from a web page instead of copy pasting from word.

S
by SivaRamanathan
30 Mar 2020, 19:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
Replies: 6
Views: 280

Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti

Ready enough to be nominated for March! (Or is it April?)

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
29 Mar 2020, 20:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Re: Paperfall (Reworked)

Paperfall- (plus an extended title) The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. Speechless, a Japanese girl sits outside the attic window shredding paper. Her performance of white cataract matches her fluffy gown. The sound of paper flows and forms a mound on the ground, as a tributary of pap...
by SivaRamanathan
28 Mar 2020, 14:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Re: Paperfall (Reworked)

Your editing helps, to start with. Did you click on the link and see? am thinking of taking away the personal and treating it like an Ekpharistic piece.

S
by SivaRamanathan
27 Mar 2020, 22:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Re: Paperfall (Reworked)

I am going to change this also.The shift in the focus,is not what I want.
by SivaRamanathan
27 Mar 2020, 22:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 401

Paperfall (plus an extended title)

Paperfall- (plus an extended title) The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. Speechless, a Japanese girl sits outside the attic window shredding paper. Her performance of white cataract matches her fluffy gown. The sound of paper flows and forms a mound on the ground, as a tributary of pap...
by SivaRamanathan
27 Mar 2020, 13:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alfred Sisley
Replies: 5
Views: 312

Re: Alfred Sisley

Bob
'thx for your help'
This is partaking.Not ' help' With my little understanding, and my Google Guru,I am able to get to appreciate your poem.Some poems however,I am at a loss.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
27 Mar 2020, 09:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alfred Sisley
Replies: 5
Views: 312

Re: Alfred Sisley

Thanks for this funda.
Please read my reworked version of Paperfall.
by SivaRamanathan
26 Mar 2020, 20:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alfred Sisley
Replies: 5
Views: 312

Re: Alfred Sisley

It definely needs one more triolet on a positive note that will bring out the passion of Alfred Sisely. And the last couplet also need one more line, a 'volte (something)
by SivaRamanathan
19 Mar 2020, 14:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lois Lane In Love
Replies: 6
Views: 1542

Re: Lois Lane In Love

I smiled. There are nice and stunningly new word combinations in this poem. One moment caught .

S
by SivaRamanathan
18 Mar 2020, 09:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lois Lane In Love
Replies: 6
Views: 1542

Re: Lois Lane In Love

Had to google Lois Lane,but still cannot relate to the nuances.
by SivaRamanathan
16 Mar 2020, 20:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 1059

Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

Bob.
I finished with the searching of the palm leaf oracle.
The last lines are prosaic,but I have never been able to write sheer poetry.
Thank you
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
15 Mar 2020, 20:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 1059

Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

Bob

Shall I end it with the 'unexpectedness?'

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
15 Mar 2020, 20:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 1059

Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

Bob

I was writing for that Eclectica four words prompt.Let me see if I can round it off.

S
by SivaRamanathan
14 Mar 2020, 22:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 1059

Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

V2 "Biking Cross-Country" We rode past a rubber plantation where we couldn't breathe without inhaling the stench --worse than burning tyres emitting smoke pipes. My brother said, be sure you know what it is. ''This light that comes past the rubber trees is fire.'' And so I recalled the many names of...
by SivaRamanathan
05 Mar 2020, 06:13
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2020:
Replies: 9
Views: 1698

Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2020:

Thanks to Michael, Bob and Eira

I was worried that I had done something grieviously wrong. Now I am glad to see 'Laika' marching forward.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
04 Mar 2020, 22:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 1
Views: 1114

The Athenaeum

V2 Outside the library of Alexandria gaping with a not- so-open mouth more wonderful than the pyramids, more shapely than the sphinx magnificent knowledge bank a dream in concrete, an architect's poetry. Zaharaa says ,''look, this great marvel will take us one half day just to go around the circumfe...

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