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by SivaRamanathan
03 Nov 2019, 19:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "old man above the autumn"
Replies: 2
Views: 287

Re: "old man above the autumn"

M

In your minimalistic writing, much depends on what is not said. The last stanza makes sense as if pulled out of a capsule. A summing up of the previous two stanzas.

S
by SivaRamanathan
03 Nov 2019, 13:39
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:
Replies: 18
Views: 1175

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:

Yes, Kenneth.
by SivaRamanathan
03 Nov 2019, 09:40
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:
Replies: 18
Views: 1175

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:

Kenneth

I have further edited the "Big House' poem.Please take a look before posting the last edited version.

Siva Ramanathan
by SivaRamanathan
31 Oct 2019, 22:11
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:
Replies: 18
Views: 1175

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:

The 'Big House at Mambalam',is my own original poem;I am not representing any other Board and it has not been published elsewhere. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com The Big House At Mambalam I The cattle left Pondicherry in four wheelers and came to T-Nagar in Mambalam, straight to their s...
by SivaRamanathan
31 Oct 2019, 15:48
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:
Replies: 18
Views: 1175

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2019:

I second BobBradshaw's Red Spider Lilies.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
28 Oct 2019, 17:45
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:
Replies: 17
Views: 2599

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:

The 'Big House at Mambalam',is my own original poem;I am not representing any other Board and it has not been published elsewhere. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com The Big House at Mambalam The cattle left in four wheelers from Pondicherry, and came to T-Nagar in Mambalam straight to thei...
by SivaRamanathan
28 Oct 2019, 14:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 945

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

"The Big House at Mambalam' is finished and ready, in case you intend sending it to the IBPC; if not this month then maybe next month.

Thanks to all who deep read this poem.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
28 Oct 2019, 13:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 945

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Frank and Kenneth I corrected the spelling from 'plane' to plain. --I cannot drop 'thick', because 'thick' denotes the rich quality of the buttermilk. (this would be diluted and sold outside on the street--remember the long queue--it was not a short queue--all for thick buttermilk ) ----I like 'full...
by SivaRamanathan
27 Oct 2019, 06:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 945

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Kenneth
We will Keep the nomination for November.I thought it was ready,but Frank has shown me there is much more work to be done.
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
27 Oct 2019, 06:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 945

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Frank
You have done a lot of work. It will take me two days Tuesday ,Wednesday to set right all your edits. I thank you for partaking in the writing of this poem.
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
26 Oct 2019, 05:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 945

The Big House at Mambalam

Edit 2 The Big House At Mambalam I The cattle left Pondicherry in four wheelers and came to T-Nagar in Mambalam, straight to their sheds behind the house where partitions were made for cows and buffaloes. They settled down, they wagged off flies. The dung used to make gobar gas reached the kitchen t...
by SivaRamanathan
24 Oct 2019, 18:04
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:
Replies: 17
Views: 2599

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:

Michael

Maybe next month, 'The Big House ' can go. I have finished working on it. If you have any workshop options,you may suggest.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
22 Oct 2019, 21:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 913

Re: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store

Bob
I read the poem.Let me think about it overnight.
S
by SivaRamanathan
22 Oct 2019, 20:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Neighbors
Replies: 9
Views: 701

Re: Neighbors

Judy
These poems seem to be gathering in a sequence. There were a couple of poems earlier which also sounded like this one. Maybe you could do a Chap Book of poems with some mystery in it. Fictional.

S
by SivaRamanathan
20 Oct 2019, 13:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: fugitive
Replies: 9
Views: 1272

Re: fugitive

Nicely written, Judy, but you don't need me to tell you that.

S
by SivaRamanathan
20 Oct 2019, 11:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beethoven's Rage Over a Lost Penny
Replies: 10
Views: 1220

Re: Beethoven's Rage Over a Lost Penny

K
The poem contains itself.The last stanza makes the poem.
What I think are nits:
in the floor or on the floor?Two questions,read like statements.Do they need question marks?Broke a hole',is that how you say it?
S
by SivaRamanathan
17 Oct 2019, 08:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wild Ponies
Replies: 10
Views: 1599

Re: Wild Ponies

Judy
I am learning from these comments.

S
by SivaRamanathan
16 Oct 2019, 13:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wild Ponies
Replies: 10
Views: 1599

Re: Wild Ponies

Ken
The images have come out well.We have ponies only in the hills.
I thought 'latest lover',instead of 'new lover' I like the last line The last four lines make the poem.

S
by SivaRamanathan
16 Oct 2019, 08:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 5
Views: 1689

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Dear co-travellers, If the poem has been tidied up to this level of structure it is only because a certain vanguard(who wishes to remain anonymous) from this group, has been coaching and making me work on this poem. Now the poem is finished and if the offer to send it to the IBPC is still open, then...
by SivaRamanathan
11 Oct 2019, 17:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 5
Views: 1689

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

The Big House at Mambalam     The cattle left in four wheelers from Pondicherry, and came to T-Nagar in Mambalam   straight to their sheds behind the house where partitions were made for cows and buffaloes They settled down, their tails wagged off  flies.   The clay pot soon filled up with kitchen w...
by SivaRamanathan
10 Oct 2019, 10:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 5
Views: 1689

The Big House at Mambalam

When the cattle left in four wheelers from Pondicherry, they came to T-Nagar in Mambalam straight to their sheds at the back of the house where partitions were made for cows and buffaloes that settled as they wagged off the flies. The clay pot soon filled with kitchen waste, edible, uncooked, peel ...
by SivaRamanathan
07 Oct 2019, 06:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Known As Chettys
Replies: 9
Views: 2494

Re: Known As Chettys

I fully agree with what Bob suggests.
by SivaRamanathan
04 Oct 2019, 17:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dante's Outer Circles
Replies: 12
Views: 3242

Re: Dante's Outer Circles

I second Michael's nomination.

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