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by SivaRamanathan
10 Jun 2019, 11:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Big Band Theory
Replies: 7
Views: 356

Re: Big Band Theory

When I look into your eyes,
new worlds collide, we glide
effortlessly across the floor.

Before us, there was nothing
but woodwinds and bassoons.
by SivaRamanathan
10 Jun 2019, 05:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.
Replies: 5
Views: 288

Re: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.

Thanks Kenneth and Bob for reading this.It has to be edited. I will edit it, but the incentive to edit comes only when I post it here.
by SivaRamanathan
09 Jun 2019, 14:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.
Replies: 5
Views: 288

Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.

The partitioned Madras Terrace house with no concept of attached bathrooms was alright for a family of three, but when the boy was to get married,the house received a face lift; a store room was transformed to the bath room adjacent to the bedroom. The girl’s family had insisted on an attached bath ...
by SivaRamanathan
08 Jun 2019, 05:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Big Band Theory
Replies: 7
Views: 356

Re: Big Band Theory

I read this but I am afraid I have to wait for a couple of more comments to get the hang of it.
by SivaRamanathan
01 Jun 2019, 19:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Grandfather Clock
Replies: 7
Views: 725

Re: Grandfather Clock

I like the last stanza very much.And also the penultimate stanza.
by SivaRamanathan
19 May 2019, 20:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 935

Re: haiku

Honestly, I will have to look it up.
by SivaRamanathan
19 May 2019, 12:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 935

Re: haiku

Billy, I read both poems.Can connect with the. 'temple in a field.'
by SivaRamanathan
17 May 2019, 18:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: untitled senryu
Replies: 10
Views: 1147

Re: untitled senryu

Love this!
by SivaRamanathan
16 May 2019, 22:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kid
Replies: 6
Views: 660

Re: The Kid

Manages to hold the interest till the very end.
by SivaRamanathan
21 Apr 2019, 19:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My First Book of Poems has been published.
Replies: 5
Views: 1272

Re: My First Book of Poems has been published.

Some of the poems were workshopped here. Thank you,my writing friends.
by SivaRamanathan
21 Apr 2019, 19:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My First Book of Poems has been published.
Replies: 5
Views: 1272

My First Book of Poems has been published.

Some of the poems were workshopped here. Thank you,my writing friends.

Siva Ramanathan
by SivaRamanathan
28 Mar 2019, 06:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Innocence Lost
Replies: 24
Views: 3990

Re: No Voice

Frank
I did not quite get the Citizen Kane;the last couplet makes the poem. After all that violence,there is tenderness.

S
by SivaRamanathan
21 Mar 2019, 20:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Harbinger
Replies: 12
Views: 2340

Re: Harbinger

Bob

The last line is good,but there are some lines you can do without.I mean the poem can do without.Like those introverted questions that need no answers. It is too colloquial as it is,more like a first draft.Try tightening it,like a taut body.

S
by SivaRamanathan
16 Mar 2019, 06:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Salmon Run - revised
Replies: 12
Views: 2175

Re: Salmon Run - revised

Bob
Read a good poem first read of the morning. I did not quite get the girls,only got it after Frank's 'females. I also love the sound of those sibilant words which are quite new to me.

S
by SivaRamanathan
15 Mar 2019, 11:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Salmon Run - revised
Replies: 12
Views: 2175

Re: Salmon Run

I too found that line a bit odd, especially the negative 'but'.
by SivaRamanathan
28 Feb 2019, 20:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story
Replies: 3
Views: 1481

A Former Captain Speaks His Love Story

To be alone on a ship at sea to look at sunrise and sunset the fauna and flora of the sea to sail fifty miles towards the land and wish to go the same fifty into the sea the power of being captain challenging nature the sea receding, the ship squatting on land thirteen at a table with gin and tonic ...
by SivaRamanathan
28 Feb 2019, 20:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Only Slept There
Replies: 5
Views: 1869

Re: In My Room As Little As Possible

Lovely last line.
Is this a prose poem,Billy? It works as it is.

S
by SivaRamanathan
30 Jan 2019, 20:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 11
Views: 2267

Re: The Athenaeum

I am not able to work on this immediately. Maybe I will let it be for a week or so.Thank you all for your edits and ideas to edit.
by SivaRamanathan
28 Jan 2019, 13:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 11
Views: 2267

Re: The Athenaeum

Thank you Frank.
by SivaRamanathan
28 Jan 2019, 05:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 11
Views: 2267

Re: The Athenaeum

Kenneth and Bob

Thank you. I will start working.

Sivakami
by SivaRamanathan
27 Jan 2019, 20:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 11
Views: 2267

Re: The Athenaeum

Please critique Frank. It is very cumbersome. Tighten,tighten and edit. Please.
by SivaRamanathan
27 Jan 2019, 08:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Athenaeum
Replies: 11
Views: 2267

The Athenaeum

Never in my wildest dreams had I pictured myself outside the library of Alexandria daping with an open mouth. More wonderful than the pyramids, more shapely than the sphinx I stand in awe of such magnificent knowledge bank a dream in concrete, an architect's poetry. Zaharaa the tour guide says,''loo...
by SivaRamanathan
17 Jan 2019, 22:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Survival
Replies: 5
Views: 1586

Re: Survival

Some lines are too dramatic.

S
by SivaRamanathan
05 Jan 2019, 14:08
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 4011

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2019:

Michael
I have made a few small changes.Yesterday I did not know how to edit from this page. If you have not already forwarded the poems,please consider sending this version. Sorry for the inconvenience.
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
05 Jan 2019, 14:01
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 4011

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2019:

Thank you team for asking me. 'Appa Took Me to a Village Nearby Called Agaram to Pay Homage to Agaram Swamiji and a Sanyasini ' is my original,unpublished poem and I am willing for it to represent the IBPC. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@ gmail.com Appa Took Me to a Village Nearby Called Agaram t...

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