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by FrankDyer
31 Oct 2013, 21:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cyber World
Replies: 6
Views: 2949

Cyber World

I lost my IPS provider He got fed up with me savagely cutting the cord Our correspondence becoming increasingly discordant and meaningless A jumble of contractual misdemeanors and the tyranny of the multinational in free fall I missed this room this world different to reality Having a reality of it ...
by FrankDyer
31 Oct 2013, 20:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The poem I tried to write
Replies: 4
Views: 2460

Re: The poem I tried to write

I am enjoying your work more Billy. I like this transient moment, I think you expressed it well. Sometime I think these are what life is about when we enjoy the moment above all else and have the time to ponder.
by FrankDyer
30 Sep 2013, 16:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Study in Collapse
Replies: 6
Views: 3914

Re: A Study in Collapse

Its still a stinky poem Woetrame!
by FrankDyer
30 Sep 2013, 16:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Little Girl
Replies: 2
Views: 1991

Re: Little Girl

Yes, spot on Michael, although I did intend to post it as a completed poem. Looking at it I am disappointed and I feel it comes across as trite. I failed to elicit the emotion that I had meant and it is but a pale shadow of what I had intended.
by FrankDyer
25 Sep 2013, 14:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Little Girl
Replies: 2
Views: 1991

A Little Girl

A little girl ran hand in hand with her daddy She reminded me of shining ponds of ducks and fish and silly stories That pleased my child so The camera captured Her small arm hugging me across my vast shoulder Greeting her at the airport She instantly hopped to my knee like a sparrow I became her Opa...
by FrankDyer
23 Sep 2013, 03:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Stranger
Replies: 3
Views: 2135

Re: The Stranger

Over dramatical presentation about nothing we would wish to know.
by FrankDyer
23 Sep 2013, 03:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Blind In Autumn.
Replies: 3
Views: 2290

Re: Blind In Autumn.

Your words do not flow, it is a poem that is like coitus interuptus and we all know how painful that can be.
by FrankDyer
23 Sep 2013, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)
Replies: 4
Views: 2274

Re: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)

Well done, a nice little ditty , but more than that some lines have to be read again. The flow is good the thoughts expressed well, something most people can relate to. I would suggest stronger wording and deeper input. Do not be afraid to put down what you really mean, Is there a women in this, a g...
by FrankDyer
23 Sep 2013, 03:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The meaning of life
Replies: 8
Views: 3666

Re: The meaning of life

The meaning of life is a note or a tune; the unconscious tingle of hearts set to bloom. Your soul mate in life one body one soul; when life cannot part you even when old. Soaring in passions the zenith of self; glimpsing one's heaven to take back to earth. Aim higher still to transcend every feeling...
by FrankDyer
07 Sep 2013, 23:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Groningen
Replies: 12
Views: 5252

Re: Groningen

Thanks Michael One of the best critiques I have ever read let alone from you... well done. It has taken me years to convert from my traditional style and frankly has puzzled me for years. I wrote this poem in plain language years ago and it go not response whatsoever. I thank you for helping me to f...
by FrankDyer
02 Sep 2013, 14:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Groningen
Replies: 12
Views: 5252

Re: Groningen

I have added a third stanza to satisfy this insatiable demand for a story. At least, poets are reading and commenting.
by FrankDyer
21 Aug 2013, 22:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Groningen
Replies: 12
Views: 5252

Re: Groningen

Thanks Michael, good idea, this last line could be a reason?
by FrankDyer
20 Aug 2013, 02:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Human Evolution
Replies: 1
Views: 1565

Re: Human Evolution

Its not really poetry is it Snic? Its a long ponder on life, but you don't really express a coherent thought or provide us with new insights to muse over. The language is mundane and some of it is pretty banal. I suppose this is why no one has bothered to write a review.
by FrankDyer
20 Aug 2013, 02:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Groningen
Replies: 12
Views: 5252

Re: Groningen

I can mean whatever you think it means. Thanks for input, there is a story there and I can see why it may sound ironic, there is a reason for morosely ponders.
by FrankDyer
17 Aug 2013, 22:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: psalm: "swift of foot"
Replies: 5
Views: 2826

Re: "swift of foot"

Son To live it up, it's not DOA it's AOA - alive on arrival Our Father makes no mistakes My joy rhymes with my boy on earth as it is beyond home-free in The Humane Society untouchable as the angel yet forever touching down to keep contact with you always Mama A pot card poem from heaven, in particul...
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Groningen
Replies: 12
Views: 5252

Groningen

A dazzling sun strikes the shading awning a circle of wheels flow fast around our corner clattering bells and peddled steps cast white frivolities high for us to stare We stir sweet coffee grounds and scrape the cup morosely ponder such feminine delights barred by the native tongue Professor Ditmars...
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Guernica
Replies: 3
Views: 2536

Re: Guernica

Great response to modern art, although it does mean something very profound this painting.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  
Replies: 4
Views: 3298

Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit  

At last a proper poem from Michael (MV) something to get our teeth into, something to savour perhaps! Its deep as Michael is deep and will make us work I am sure. my youth is not lost Atlantis not bone-buried this is how I grieve full-bodied to heighten and even overwhelm the overcome the flesh stil...
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Yard in May
Replies: 5
Views: 3032

Re: The Yard in May

You focus on flowers, all types, I get that. Try saying a little more than just a whole collection of names of flowers, I can identify though, the garden on a warm day with the flies buzzing and the smells of the garden floating around.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Talking To Myself Without Praying
Replies: 6
Views: 4146

Re: Talking To Myself Without Praying

I think you are improving in your short strory approach Billy, its a style I like just would like more detail.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Reading Names in the Late Afternoon
Replies: 3
Views: 2402

Re: Reading Names in the Late Afternoon

You must be like me involved in genealogy.. wanderers of graveyards.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Last Call
Replies: 6
Views: 3378

Re: The Last Call

Too deep for me to comment on.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ocean
Replies: 2
Views: 2085

Re: Ocean

Rich in unnecessary metaphors that jangle like a cheap ride on a funfair. If you wish to be profound about the ocean and it power its ability to transform us into adoring worshipers of salt and sound, and waves that crash and break.. of depths beyond our ken may I suggest a simpler approach.
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Bouquet from Bingo
Replies: 3
Views: 2447

Re: The Bouquet from Bingo

It made me think of a time I cried, not outwardly but inside. The pain of the parting grazed my heart like a knife I watched her fade away from me slowly noting my helplessness. How puny are our cellophaned parcels of dead flowers a mocking of the true event of death when we lower her into the groun...
by FrankDyer
12 Aug 2013, 01:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dry Dock Road
Replies: 10
Views: 5638

Re: Dry Dock Road

Thanks Iap
I will look at your helpful comments, welcome to this poetry site hope you enjoy. Thanks for the effort put in on this tiny work.

Frank

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