Judy gives useful suggestions. Her edits are effective and render the verse enjoyable.
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- 05 Dec 2019, 14:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Moon Walk
- Replies: 11
- Views: 285
- 27 Nov 2019, 18:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Could Be For "Something"
- Replies: 1
- Views: 238
Could Be For "Something"
Being a day of tedium chasing through for requirements in the immigration for long time visas. Last renewal was not so tiring. The regulations have changed. The officials turn unfriendly, resent direct applicants, insist to come through agents. The application is simple, easy to fill, the conditions...
- 09 Nov 2019, 20:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One of A Rare Breed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 758
Re: One of A Rare Breed
Michael ( MV)
Very true.
Should be "One of A Common Breed"
Meena
Very true.
Should be "One of A Common Breed"
Meena
- 08 Nov 2019, 20:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One of A Rare Breed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 758
One of A Rare Breed
That one my cook had been with me for ten years,in an impulse calls quit.. Taken by surprise. I fail to seek the reason. He is temperamental goes off his head. turns quarrelsome finds fault with fellow workers. Fights with them. Screams and yells. He is an expert cook prepares dishes in no time and ...
- 08 Nov 2019, 20:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Walt Whitman, 1863
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1313
Re: Walt Whitman, 1863
A good poem, Bob.
Each stanza is relevant,
One leads to the other, yet they stand out.
That be the beauty of the poem.
Each stanza is relevant,
One leads to the other, yet they stand out.
That be the beauty of the poem.
- 08 Nov 2019, 09:41
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the October IBPC 2019 (Congrats again Ken)
- Replies: 3
- Views: 862
- 06 Nov 2019, 20:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Tryst
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1526
Re: A Tryst
Ken, thanks for the understanding.
I keep getting such dreams very often nowadays.
This being one of them.
I keep getting such dreams very often nowadays.
This being one of them.
- 06 Nov 2019, 20:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Tryst
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1526
Re: A Tryst
Judy, thanks for commenting.
I will look into the faults.
I state it is a dream.
Dreams do not have logic.
It is the subconscious that is working.
I will look into the faults.
I state it is a dream.
Dreams do not have logic.
It is the subconscious that is working.
- 03 Nov 2019, 20:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Tryst
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1526
A Tryst
Caught in between the traffic , I stand aghast. Wholly drenched, the clothes cling to the body. My feet trapped in the slush remains static. I attempt to pull them out, I slip and slope. Straighten myself stand all through unable to take a step. Rains turn torrential I go down slowly inch by inch. S...
- 03 Nov 2019, 19:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Across The River
- Replies: 10
- Views: 2070
Re: Across The River
Yes, Judy .
3 votes. thumbs up!
3 votes. thumbs up!
- 03 Nov 2019, 19:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Crossing Into South Carolina
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2678
Re: Crossing Into South Carolina
Quiet distracting .
- 29 Oct 2019, 06:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) - V2
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1650
Re: A Sparrow Found (1917)
An elaborate one. Never once I lost interest.
- 29 Oct 2019, 06:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Planters Moon
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1553
Re: Planters Moon
The last stanza is strong.
Man's inability to that of a worm's possibility.
Great imagery.
Man's inability to that of a worm's possibility.
Great imagery.
- 29 Oct 2019, 06:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Red Spider Lilies
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1249
Re: Red Spider Lilies
Flowers extend companionship.
Well written.
Well written.
- 25 Oct 2019, 15:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1431
Re: A Maze I Am In
Billy,
Your editing has unwound the maze I am in .
The version is an improvement of the first.
I go with it.
Thanks,
Your editing has unwound the maze I am in .
The version is an improvement of the first.
I go with it.
Thanks,
- 25 Oct 2019, 15:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1431
Re: A Maze I Am In
Judy, I do not know how to clear the obscurity.
I tried but failed.
I tried but failed.
- 25 Oct 2019, 15:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1431
Re: A Maze I Am In
Bob, I too feel the first one is better.
The revision is not at all good.
The revision is not at all good.
- 24 Oct 2019, 20:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1431
Re: A Maze I Am In
I have posted a revision, Hope it reads better.
- 24 Oct 2019, 07:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Maze I Am In
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1431
A Maze I Am In
The retinue around me keeps vigil for what I do not know, They watch every move and every deal with uncanny insight, I am neither extraordinary nor foolish, in between both a very ordinary one. Those eyes behind my back chases me wherever I go. I converse with very few, even that is monitored. with ...
- 24 Oct 2019, 07:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
- Replies: 10
- Views: 1433
Re: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
Think you have done the maximum.
- 24 Oct 2019, 07:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
- Replies: 13
- Views: 1783
Re: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
It is fine, Bob. Reached the level.
Needs no more.
Needs no more.
- 23 Oct 2019, 19:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Neighbors
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1314
Re: Neighbors
Judy, welcome to the board.
Your entry has brought a stream of poems.
The Board is bustling with activity.
I agree with you, Judy,
No poem is fictional.
The best of the poems bear at least a trace of personal info or experience.
Your entry has brought a stream of poems.
The Board is bustling with activity.
I agree with you, Judy,
No poem is fictional.
The best of the poems bear at least a trace of personal info or experience.
- 23 Oct 2019, 19:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Pay At Your End
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1031
Re: Pay At Your End
Judy, thanks for the edits.
I have inserted a dash and changed and to or.
I have inserted a dash and changed and to or.
- 23 Oct 2019, 19:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Pay At Your End
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1031
Re: Pay At Your End
Thanks Bob.
A reflection of my experience.
A reflection of my experience.
- 23 Oct 2019, 19:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Pay At Your End
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1031
Re: Pay At Your End
Very true! Ken.
Thanks for stopping by,
Thanks for stopping by,