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The last stanza need to be removed. This is the majority's opinion as yours in the other board.
I will do so in the revision and pay attention to the punctuation.
Thanks for your help, Bob.

my chef, proficient in cooking, rude in behaviour. He prepares delicious food in no time. An expert, no doubt. Every Sunday, Algi has to go to the market, in rain or sun to buy vegetables, if disallowed mumbles. Not minding his weak legs, he walks briskly during the buying spree Limping he returns w...

A new decade that of 2020 dawns. Should be one of great promises. Should be one of fine texture. Should be one of great achievements , Should be crowded ' with happiness and joy. Should nurture peace and considerations worldwide, Let in the new decade Writers Block receive glorious poems and win lau...

Bob,
You have given a new look to the poem.
let me read again and then engage in refurbishing the whole.

Thanks.

as i make way to school. I see through the glass find my mom sitting pretty. Neatly dressed in ironed sari glancing through the newspaper. It is I who has to go to school while she spends her time happy. It is lunch time. Return home for lunch. Mom is busy playing Veena, Melody flows. I finish meals...

Tried to make the poem sharp.
Tell me how you find reading the version, Bob.

Thanks

Very good suggestions, Bob.
I will work and post a revision soon.
Thanks.

I go for a walk every evening a ploy to keep my legs active. Mine being a strange case, able to walk in ease for half an hour. Peculiar, being unable to stand for more than quarter an hour. I look at myself with a keenness nowhere did I examine myself so close. Neither obese, being for sure, nor sle...

Judy gives useful suggestions. Her edits are effective and render the verse enjoyable.
Great!

Being a day of tedium chasing through for requirements in the immigration for long time visas. Last renewal was not so tiring. The regulations have changed. The officials turn unfriendly, resent direct applicants, insist to come through agents. The application is simple, easy to fill, the conditions...

Michael ( MV)
Very true.
Should be "One of A Common Breed"

Meena

That one my cook had been with me for ten years,in an impulse calls quit.. Taken by surprise. I fail to seek the reason. He is temperamental goes off his head. turns quarrelsome finds fault with fellow workers. Fights with them. Screams and yells. He is an expert cook prepares dishes in no time and ...

A good poem, Bob.
Each stanza is relevant,
One leads to the other, yet they stand out.
That be the beauty of the poem.

Congrats! Ken

Ken, thanks for the understanding.
I keep getting such dreams very often nowadays.
This being one of them.

Judy, thanks for commenting.
I will look into the faults.
I state it is a dream.
Dreams do not have logic.
It is the subconscious that is working.

Caught in between the traffic , I stand aghast. Wholly drenched, the clothes cling to the body. My feet trapped in the slush remains static. I attempt to pull them out, I slip and slope. Straighten myself stand all through unable to take a step. Rains turn torrential I go down slowly inch by inch. S...

Yes, Judy .
3 votes. thumbs up!

Quiet distracting .

An elaborate one. Never once I lost interest.

The last stanza is strong.
Man's inability to that of a worm's possibility.
Great imagery.

Flowers extend companionship.
Well written.

Billy,

Your editing has unwound the maze I am in .
The version is an improvement of the first.
I go with it.
Thanks,

Judy, I do not know how to clear the obscurity.
I tried but failed.

Bob, I too feel the first one is better.
The revision is not at all good.