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by FranktheFrank
13 Jul 2019, 14:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Our Parents
Replies: 3
Views: 111

Re: Our Parents

She was an office on a top floor,
and breathtaking views.
Perhaps: 'with breathtaking views'.

Suggest you promote her to full president:

Mom was too busy for us,
a furious presidential firefly.
by FranktheFrank
11 Jul 2019, 10:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 5
Views: 321

Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2

Thanks Siva, I have attempted to addressed Bob's concerns in S7 and shown progression. It really is about the constant hardships, fear of death and primeval conditions where a man finds comfort in the beauty of a woman's body and help in the most unlikeliest of places and thanks his maker for such a...
by FranktheFrank
09 Jul 2019, 00:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 5
Views: 321

Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859)

Point taken Bob, John studying is part of a larger story, shall dispense with it. 1831 refers to the Rebecca riots, problem is explaining vs telling, will have to think. The myriad details should all build up showing N's life and one glorious day in all that, quite wicked but nevertheless enthralling.
by FranktheFrank
08 Jul 2019, 01:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 5
Views: 321

Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2

Iron Ore Miner (1859) Before Pen y Garn, at Trallwn we slept in barns and watched our children grow large eyes. We gleaned oats spilled by the ponies, and scavenged from the turnip slicer set for winter fodder At Dowlais we walked miles after five underground, time to dwell on home and hearth. The r...
by FranktheFrank
02 Jul 2019, 19:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mahaaprasthaana
Replies: 3
Views: 422

Re: Mahaaprasthaana

Hinduism
by FranktheFrank
29 Jun 2019, 16:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 2290

Re: "Newlyweds Start Their Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

Siva
You could drop 'their' in the title
with no adverse effects.
by FranktheFrank
29 Jun 2019, 16:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mahaaprasthaana
Replies: 3
Views: 422

Mahaaprasthaana

Mahaaprasthaana -The Great Journey “Death is a most natural experience, not to be feared. It is a quick transition from the physical world to the astral plane..." Satguru S'ivaya Subramuniyaswami, p. 99. I fear not hell nor of Satan I fear a woeful birth even a devilish mind brought on by the negati...
by FranktheFrank
29 Jun 2019, 01:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Patches Revenge
Replies: 1
Views: 465

Re: Patches Revenge

Eria
I prefer this to all that have gone before.
A pal is constantly reminding me of the power of first drafts.
I think I'll nominate this.
by FranktheFrank
29 Jun 2019, 00:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 1662

Re: "getting antique"   (a diptych)

Old people are referred to by the young
as antiques Meena
cruel I know
but I don't care
I agree with Michael, priceless
by FranktheFrank
28 Jun 2019, 20:49
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:
Replies: 21
Views: 700

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2019:

My nominations:

1. Bob's: Traveling Mexico

2. Michael's: Getting Antique

3. Siva's: Newlyweds

If it is allowable to nominate more than three, then:

4. Meena's: Kali
5. Eira's: Patches Revenge

Pity Billy has pulled out.
Eira hasn't posted this month that I can see.
by FranktheFrank
25 Jun 2019, 15:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 1662

Re: "getting antique"

We suffered from drafts for years
since putting in central-heating
we don't suffer any more.
by FranktheFrank
24 Jun 2019, 23:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 2290

Re: "Newlyweds Start Their Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

Glad you like, you weave it the way you want,
just a few ideas.
by FranktheFrank
24 Jun 2019, 16:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
Replies: 25
Views: 2290

Re: "Newlyweds Start Their Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"

It's looking good, but you could cut again if you wished: The Madras Terrace house was just right for a family of three. But the bride's family insisted on an attached bathroom, so a store room was converted into a bathroom. the bride's family saw only the path leading to the house and copses of tre...
by FranktheFrank
24 Jun 2019, 13:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 1662

Re: "getting antique"

I don't know what you mean Siva,
If I want to keep a poem or comment
I use cut and past to Microsoft WORD
then cut and paste from WORD
to this forum if needed.
by FranktheFrank
24 Jun 2019, 01:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 1662

Re: "getting antique"

Are you familiar with 'cut' and 'paste' Siva?

I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.
I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.
If not I can explain it or you can YouTube it.
by FranktheFrank
23 Jun 2019, 20:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "getting antique"   (a diptych)
Replies: 20
Views: 1662

Re: "getting antique"

Your poems are unique Michael it's difficult to know how to analyse and contribute appropriate comments. I see the pun on bulb and lamp, also unique and antique as regards aging the humour in fleecing a patina the pun on sheep we are His sheep - He is the Lamb and I see the wistful longing when we w...
by FranktheFrank
23 Jun 2019, 20:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Turning of the Tide
Replies: 0
Views: 580

Turning of the Tide

We skirt Lauwersmeer in the DAF. Em cuddles up and hugs my arm. Rain clouds loom harbouring a storm. A westerly whips froth over the road and we swish through the water overflowing from the lake. Mama parks on the dike, a crowd lines the road to the sluices. Lunar pulls the tide and the Wadden conti...
by FranktheFrank
23 Jun 2019, 16:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Can Make You Grateful For A 1% Yearly Raise
Replies: 3
Views: 784

Re: I Can Make You Grateful For A 1% Yearly Raise

i get it, the abuse of power
ever so small
used to terrorise the weak.
well done bob.
by FranktheFrank
23 Jun 2019, 16:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lot’s Wife
Replies: 8
Views: 1300

Re: Lot’s Wife

billy, this is good.
by FranktheFrank
22 Jun 2019, 13:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: upon seeing "impossible" before "Love"
Replies: 2
Views: 767

Re: upon seeing "impossible" before "Love"

I suppose it is an oxymoron but it can be taken as unrequited love. Unrequited love is the worse kind and yet the best, another oxymoron. My own view is that we all carry unrequited love for the whole of our lives, a glimpse of a woman from passing train, the girl who moved away, the list goes on. B...
by FranktheFrank
22 Jun 2019, 13:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Michelangelo's David
Replies: 13
Views: 1391

Re: Michelangelo's David

This is a much stronger start

perhaps: dissected prison corpses
the rest of s1 is good.
by FranktheFrank
21 Jun 2019, 16:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Business As Usual
Replies: 3
Views: 661

Re: Business As Usual

This is funny Meena, we do spend too much
on our homes, hopefully we will
recoup our losses in time.

I take Siva's point, maybe 'partitioned racks' would be better.

Your choice.

L6 needs a space after the comma.
by FranktheFrank
21 Jun 2019, 12:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Traveling in Mexico
Replies: 12
Views: 1295

Re: Traveling in Mexico

I love travelling Bob
the images have stayed with me for years
sometimes it is the people sometimes the environment or the food
sometimes the culture or all those together.
Your poem brings your experience into our domain.
by FranktheFrank
21 Jun 2019, 12:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Impossible Love
Replies: 7
Views: 843

Re: Impossible Love

Marvellous response Maria
I am sure you will enhance our forum.

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