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by BobBradshaw
21 May 2019, 23:45
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Congrats Bob Bradshaw Eclectica
Replies: 3
Views: 120

Re: Congrats Bob Bradshaw Eclectica

Thank you, guys... love the links! Long live the Stones
by BobBradshaw
21 May 2019, 21:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: La Brea Tar Pits
Replies: 3
Views: 139

Re: La Brea Tar Pits

Thanks, Frank
by BobBradshaw
21 May 2019, 20:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Mother's Flashbacks
Replies: 4
Views: 114

Re: My Mother's Flashbacks

Gorgeous writing....everything works ....great last 2 lines

unaware the broken butterfly would
not settle on her breast again.
by BobBradshaw
21 May 2019, 20:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Moonlit Garden
Replies: 5
Views: 152

Re: Moonlit Garden

Just lovely! I agree...one of your best...the humor is delicious
by BobBradshaw
19 May 2019, 20:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: La Brea Tar Pits
Replies: 3
Views: 139

La Brea Tar Pits

La Brea Tar Pits I came to Los Angeles for the Strip, the nightclubs, the famous restaurants where celebrities gather, picking at their salads, and sipping wines that would cost me a year’s rent. In the heart of the city I found something less common: tar pits bubbling, as if waiting for drunks to m...
by BobBradshaw
19 May 2019, 20:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Short Poem
Replies: 3
Views: 147

Re: Short Poem

I like it
by BobBradshaw
18 May 2019, 20:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Stakeholder
Replies: 2
Views: 161

Re: A Stakeholder

You build the tension nicely... enjoyed
The profuse line isn’t needed.
An alternative:
Cheeks slick with sweat,
I struggle to hold my breath.


This stanza is awkward;
Regaining the wits,
push my way through,
he mews.
by BobBradshaw
17 May 2019, 20:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Splinter In Your Palm
Replies: 5
Views: 888

Re: Splinter In Your Palm

Frank, Eira — thank you
by BobBradshaw
17 May 2019, 20:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: untitled senryu
Replies: 10
Views: 274

Re: untitled senryu

Nice
by BobBradshaw
17 May 2019, 19:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Path I Traverse
Replies: 3
Views: 300

Re: The Path I Traverse

Good one.... my only criticism is that the last line is a bit awkward
by BobBradshaw
17 May 2019, 06:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kid
Replies: 6
Views: 302

Re: The Kid

LOL.... love the Brando quote!
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 22:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kid
Replies: 6
Views: 302

Re: The Kid

Kenneth, Siva -- thank you. Glad you liked it.
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 21:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kid
Replies: 6
Views: 302

The Kid

The Kid I had a three year contract; I was like a piling driven deep into rock. I wasn’t going back to the minors: I had an arm like a Napoleon cannon. Still, the balls I was hitting weren't cratering the bleachers, and rumors of a phenom with a wisp of down on his upper lip were circulating. Some n...
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 00:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Vir Triumphalis (1944)
Replies: 4
Views: 313

Re: Vir Triumphalis - March of the Defeated – Moscow (1944)

One of your best.... the restraint of the N’s voice works well. The documentary feel is captured beautifully.... the rhythm of this piece professional.

Terrific
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 00:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa
Replies: 8
Views: 373

Re: Haiku - Bulimia Nervosa

Terrific closing line...
Do you mean “unstruck”?
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 00:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: déjà vu"   (so it must be true)
Replies: 3
Views: 298

Re: déjà vu"   (so it must be true)

I agree... the warmth and humor appeal greatly. A couple lines feel as if the N is trying too hard, especially the 2nd line: unknowingly out-phasing the moon With the breath of our relish for charmed hours: These lines have a totally different feel to them, and imho are awkward... I would remove the...
by BobBradshaw
16 May 2019, 00:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Eunuch
Replies: 2
Views: 227

Re: The Eunuch

Loved Starless night in Thebes, I caught him. A slave-boy , attempting to flee through the moon gate. I bound him with serpents, fed him Tuna and honey-garlic, washed his body with lime and pepper-water I am intrigued but a bit lost with the serpents..are they chains in the shape of serpents? Is the...
by BobBradshaw
14 May 2019, 21:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Missionary
Replies: 2
Views: 247

Re: The Missionary

Really like this....so well said in such a brief way....love those last 4 lines:

He could be anywhere,
but he's at your door, handful

of tracts. God"s postman just
stopping by with this month's bill.
by BobBradshaw
14 May 2019, 19:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: This Isn't a Poem About Easter
Replies: 5
Views: 1113

Re: This Isn't a Poem About Easter

I agree with Frank.... the simplicity and cleverness are appealing
by BobBradshaw
14 May 2019, 07:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: James Abbott McNeill Whistler
Replies: 3
Views: 310

Re: James Abbott McNeill Whistler

He was a great painter, and imho aside from the iconic Whistler’s Mother portrait, under appreciated
by BobBradshaw
12 May 2019, 21:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: James Abbott McNeill Whistler
Replies: 3
Views: 310

James Abbott McNeill Whistler

James Abbott McNeill Whistler He never lost his loathing for critics. Often he wore his monocle when seated across from them, studying them through his lens as if they were jewels, dismissing them as imitations. Dinner invitations disappeared, along with most of his disciples: followers with uneasy ...
by BobBradshaw
09 May 2019, 19:35
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Caressing Touch
Replies: 3
Views: 361

Re: The Caressing Touch

Your work gets better and better...overall a lovely piece. Some suggestions...."I jump in glee"...glee is one of those old words that don't work anymore. Maybe something like I race out to greet it. I like "small pebbles of ice"...I love these lines: The lawn looks like a lass in a green outfit wear...
by BobBradshaw
08 May 2019, 21:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hortense and Paul Cezanne
Replies: 2
Views: 313

Hortense and Paul Cezanne

Hortense and Paul Cezanne My husband once said I liked nothing but “Switzerland and lemonade”. That wasn’t true. I loved our son and fashions but Paul could think of nothing as we climbed among the meadows of wildflowers and weeping fjords but getting back to painting. Anytime away from his studio h...
by BobBradshaw
06 May 2019, 07:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Quasimodo
Replies: 17
Views: 2021

Re: Quasimodo

Thx for workshopping... you have some interesting suggestions....why am I not stone, the bells slowing, trimming some of the Esmeraldas... for now I am swapping one Esmeralda for gypsy girl....At a later time I might revisit your ideas.... regardless of how the poem fares at the IBPC. Again, thank you

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