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by BobBradshaw
08 Mar 2021, 06:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: micropoem:
Replies: 1
Views: 44

Re: micropoem:

I like the sounds in this.
by BobBradshaw
08 Mar 2021, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to Legs
Replies: 3
Views: 131

Re: Ode to Legs

I have removed the 1st stanza.
by BobBradshaw
07 Mar 2021, 23:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Bundle of Joy
Replies: 1
Views: 30

Re: A Bundle of Joy

The first stanza is a nice opening...lose these 2 telling lines though... Fear and amazement place me in a piquancy. Trim these lines out as well, for the same reason He is a bundle of joy to behold His eyes sparkle with mischief. make impossibility impossible. I like these lines in the closing stan...
by BobBradshaw
07 Mar 2021, 23:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Caterpillar
Replies: 0
Views: 16

Caterpillar

Since you asked, Michael, this is the only one I have that is a concrete shaped visual.... Caterpillar As a teenager I was inexplicably optimistic-- and maybe the humble caterpillar instinctively too feels something special is meant for him-- that despite his tacky suit— yellow, black and white stri...
by BobBradshaw
07 Mar 2021, 22:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to Legs
Replies: 3
Views: 131

Re: Ode to Legs

Thanks, Michael. I like your suggestion about the first stanza. i'll change it
by BobBradshaw
06 Mar 2021, 21:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Twice- Twice
Replies: 4
Views: 99

Re: Twice Twice

Interesting character. I look forward to reading your revision.
by BobBradshaw
04 Mar 2021, 11:05
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:
Replies: 19
Views: 497

Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:

Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com My original, unpublished poem and not represented elsewhere. Ode to My Ears Could I hope for better silent partners than my ears? Skilled censors, they filter out excessive noise. Otherwise I'd be overwhelmed, like a man caught in an open field, the sky everywhere...
by BobBradshaw
03 Mar 2021, 22:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to Legs
Replies: 3
Views: 131

Ode to Legs

V2: Ode to Legs Without thanks or wages they carry me wherever I want, whenever I want. They never question my judgment --why I should want to stand outside my ex girlfriend's window at 3 a.m., for example. They're as loyal as peninsulas to their continent. And unlike feet they're never underfoot. I...
by BobBradshaw
03 Mar 2021, 06:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: When the Cows Come Home
Replies: 6
Views: 671

Re: When the Cows Come Home

I have cut more lines...
by BobBradshaw
02 Mar 2021, 09:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: On The Banks Of Ganges
Replies: 4
Views: 288

Re: On The Banks Of Ganges

Meenas, your poem has been nominated. If you want it to go forward, please post it asap in Writer's Block Palaver Upcoming March
by BobBradshaw
02 Mar 2021, 09:39
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:
Replies: 19
Views: 497

Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:

I also nominate Meenas' "On the Banks of Ganges".
by BobBradshaw
01 Mar 2021, 22:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: On The Banks Of Ganges
Replies: 4
Views: 288

Re: On The Banks Of Ganges

Thx for the explanation. Because of my ignorance, it throws confusion into an otherwise nice flow. Even knowing it, I don't think it is crucial to the poem. Maybe leave it in according to your audience? Anyway, I don't want to focus on this point, since my emphasis should be on how nice a poem this ...
by BobBradshaw
01 Mar 2021, 05:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: When the Cows Come Home
Replies: 6
Views: 671

Re: When the Cows Come Home

Revised, deleting a couple lines... & tweaking another
by BobBradshaw
28 Feb 2021, 21:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: On The Banks Of Ganges
Replies: 4
Views: 288

Re: On The Banks Of Ganges

Good poem. A pretty nice flow to your narrative as well. My one nit...I'm not sure how Shiva clearly fits in with the rest of the poem.
by BobBradshaw
27 Feb 2021, 02:19
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:
Replies: 19
Views: 497

Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2021:

I nominate Ken's poem "A Boy's Life" & Michael’s “the heart is not earthbound”.
by BobBradshaw
26 Feb 2021, 21:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: It Is Credibility
Replies: 2
Views: 289

Re: It Is Credibility

The contrasts between your culture and this one is interesting...both the pros and cons. This one being a thumb's up. I would look to strengthen the verbs, and to enhance on the actions...give us details, for example the spices, the type of rice, etc.
by BobBradshaw
26 Feb 2021, 09:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Evening In Jurassica
Replies: 4
Views: 334

Re: Evening In Jurassica

I really like the description in these opening lines....the screen door and a voice calling out to come inside recalls my childhood as well. I'd walk out to where our road ends or runs on under alias through thick green corn rows that come right up to the ditch, lie back on the edge of the asphalt, ...
by BobBradshaw
25 Feb 2021, 20:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Marvell
Replies: 3
Views: 347

Re: Marvell

Lol...thanks, Michael
by BobBradshaw
24 Feb 2021, 10:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Passing Through The Woods
Replies: 4
Views: 375

Re: Passing Through The Woods

Good theme. The subject of trees and their secret lives is intriguing. Documentaries and books have been written on the subject. A subject that holds much potential.
by BobBradshaw
24 Feb 2021, 10:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: When the Cows Come Home
Replies: 6
Views: 671

Re: When the Cows Come Home

Thx, Ken, for the comment.
by BobBradshaw
21 Feb 2021, 23:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Marvell
Replies: 3
Views: 347

Marvell

An hundred years should go to praise Thine eyes, and on thy forehead gaze; Two hundred to adore each breast, But thirty thousand to the rest; --Andrew Marvell, "To His Coy Mistress" Marvell Having just rolled over onto my back before I reached for a cigarette, my girlfriend Amy demanded to know who...
by BobBradshaw
21 Feb 2021, 21:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Input And Output
Replies: 2
Views: 293

Re: The Input And Output

Good metaphor. I like how you bring the outside in, as gardeners like to say. Well done
by BobBradshaw
20 Feb 2021, 21:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Boy's Life
Replies: 6
Views: 552

Re: A Boy's Life

Terrific poem, Ken. No nits...kudos
by BobBradshaw
19 Feb 2021, 21:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: When the Cows Come Home
Replies: 6
Views: 671

Re: When the Cows Come Home

It was posted at W a short while ago, and 3 years ago some of the lines were used in a poem that didn't work out that well.