Search found 1710 matches
- 15 Jan 2021, 22:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Good Timings
- Replies: 2
- Views: 22
Re: Good Timings
Nice one, Meenas. One nit: why is "Majority" capitalized? Did you mean to put a period after "set"? Or maybe you should tweak the last line to read "the majority fall in line."? It's an enjoyable poem...it has a nice flow to it.
- 15 Jan 2021, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Mozart Dying
- Replies: 3
- Views: 244
Re: Mozart Dying
Thank you, guys
- 15 Jan 2021, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
- Replies: 2
- Views: 35
Re: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
Thanks, Billy
- 15 Jan 2021, 07:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Hollyhocks
- Replies: 3
- Views: 66
Re: Hollyhocks
This is gorgeous, from beginning to end. I love it! The imagery is so imaginative, and the poem grows organically. A nom for sure. This poem makes my day!
- 14 Jan 2021, 23:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
- Replies: 2
- Views: 35
Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
Sipping Tea at the Fairmont I tried too hard, like a bellman crazy for tips. I’d have carried her bags up ninety floors in sweltering heat if she’d asked. She sat me down at the Fairmont and over iced tea calmly informed me we had to break up so she could meet someone new. I could have been drinking...
- 14 Jan 2021, 21:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Road I Never Cross
- Replies: 4
- Views: 115
Re: Road I Never Cross
I find rhyming extremely difficult. Few poets these days rhyme successfully. If they do, it's usually with half rhymes. I'm an utter failure when it comes to rhyming. It's a skill set that requires years of working regularly with it. It looks much easier than it is.
- 14 Jan 2021, 08:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Road I Never Cross
- Replies: 4
- Views: 115
Re: Road I Never Cross
I like the subject but look to say things simply...don’t sacrifice your poem to rhyme. Speak normally. For example, these lines performing the same old in small or large dose turns killing. and here... the 3rd line is troubling ... we would say conversationally “she who had a golden heart”... a trou...
- 14 Jan 2021, 08:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kaliyuga
- Replies: 5
- Views: 192
Re: Kaliyuga
Working with rhyme is a difficult skill set. I give you credit for taking up the challenge. I especially liked the coupling of “eventually” and “tally”. One of the things about The Second Coming is its strong and unusual imagery. Look to strengthen that part of your game as well. We can all improve ...
- 06 Jan 2021, 07:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Mozart Dying
- Replies: 3
- Views: 244
Mozart Dying
Mozart Dying Six weeks before he died, his eyes rust-red, he whispered that he was dying. He was exhausted, overworked and I urged him to put aside the Requiem , to write a cheerful piece but at some point he turned back to it, premonitions visiting him as frequently as debtors. Within weeks he was ...
- 04 Jan 2021, 09:09
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 610
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com The poem is my original and unpublished work and I don't have a poem committed to represent another board in the current IBPC. Women Astronauts Leave a Dying Planet There weren't women on the planet, and we weren't obliged to play mothers and lovers to a populace ...
- 03 Jan 2021, 07:15
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 610
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Thx, Ken. Michael, you mentioned "Women Astronauts Leave a Dying Planet" on your short list. Let me know if I should post "Women Astronauts...or "Would I Want to Know the Date...". Best, Bob
- 01 Jan 2021, 23:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Would I want to know the date
- Replies: 2
- Views: 405
Re: Would I want to know the date
Thanks, Billy. I look forward to reading it. I know that it will be good
- 31 Dec 2020, 06:09
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 610
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
I nominate Billy's "The Way of Coyote", Ken's "The Hag" and Siva's "What if we do not go to the forest...". Siva, you should put "I" before "cannot" in the last line if you go forward with posting your poem.
- 30 Dec 2020, 06:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Would I want to know the date
- Replies: 2
- Views: 405
Would I want to know the date
Would I want to know the date of my death? No, I want to live as if death were a rumor planted by an unreliable source. Why count the moments as if they were a steady drip of a glucose bag? On the other hand I could plan my funeral: the casket, the music... " Jumpin' Jack Flash " revved up on the sp...
- 24 Dec 2020, 21:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Father said,'Your New Family'.
- Replies: 2
- Views: 455
Re: Father said,'Your New Family'.
Well done. I like the tone throughout
- 24 Dec 2020, 21:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Christmas Eve Story
- Replies: 3
- Views: 447
Re: A Christmas Eve Story
Michael, Ken — thank you for your comments. Much appreciated.
- 24 Dec 2020, 21:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bareback
- Replies: 4
- Views: 641
Re: Bareback
Just superb. My favorite lines are the Samson image as well. Kudos.
- 23 Dec 2020, 03:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wolfman
- Replies: 7
- Views: 962
Re: Wolfman
Michael, I have revised the poem to use your verb "scanning". Thx again
- 22 Dec 2020, 23:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Christmas Eve Story
- Replies: 3
- Views: 447
A Christmas Eve Story
A Christmas Eve Story I slept in the attic under the clatter of rain. Whatever it was, something woke me and I eased myself quietly down the stairs. There was nothing at the bottom but a mess of shadows. Then I saw him, a large man snoring on the couch. There were no presents on the floor, but clear...
- 22 Dec 2020, 07:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Hag
- Replies: 6
- Views: 672
Re: The Hag
Poignant. The appealing touch at the end. Very strong piece.
I love this:
Toothless in the front,
a gap the size of the gates to hell.
The serpent image is also well constructed.
It’s the compassionate tone that speaks volumes, and draws us in.
I love this:
Toothless in the front,
a gap the size of the gates to hell.
The serpent image is also well constructed.
It’s the compassionate tone that speaks volumes, and draws us in.
- 20 Dec 2020, 22:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wolfman
- Replies: 7
- Views: 962
Re: Wolfman
Thx for the kind words, guys...
- 20 Dec 2020, 02:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: What if we do not go to the Forest, the Forest will come to Usi
- Replies: 3
- Views: 818
Re: What if we do not go to the Forest, the Forest will come to Usi
A couple nits: you should place a period after maram and capitalize “who”.
Also at the end put an “I” before cannot.
A very pleasing poem.
Also at the end put an “I” before cannot.
A very pleasing poem.
- 19 Dec 2020, 21:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Hag
- Replies: 10
- Views: 1150
Re: The Hag
Another revision? Go for it!
- 19 Dec 2020, 02:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wolfman
- Replies: 7
- Views: 962
Re: Wolfman
Thanks, Ken
- 19 Dec 2020, 02:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Hag
- Replies: 10
- Views: 1150
Re: The Hag
I like both versions. Both are so different in tone. Which do you prefer?