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by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2021, 22:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Good Timings
Replies: 2
Views: 22

Re: Good Timings

Nice one, Meenas. One nit: why is "Majority" capitalized? Did you mean to put a period after "set"? Or maybe you should tweak the last line to read "the majority fall in line."? It's an enjoyable poem...it has a nice flow to it.
by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2021, 22:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mozart Dying
Replies: 3
Views: 244

Re: Mozart Dying

Thank you, guys
by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2021, 07:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hollyhocks
Replies: 3
Views: 66

Re: Hollyhocks

This is gorgeous, from beginning to end. I love it! The imagery is so imaginative, and the poem grows organically. A nom for sure. This poem makes my day!
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2021, 23:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
Replies: 2
Views: 35

Sipping Tea at the Fairmont

Sipping Tea at the Fairmont I tried too hard, like a bellman crazy for tips. I’d have carried her bags up ninety floors in sweltering heat if she’d asked. She sat me down at the Fairmont and over iced tea calmly informed me we had to break up so she could meet someone new. I could have been drinking...
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2021, 21:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Road I Never Cross
Replies: 4
Views: 115

Re: Road I Never Cross

I find rhyming extremely difficult. Few poets these days rhyme successfully. If they do, it's usually with half rhymes. I'm an utter failure when it comes to rhyming. It's a skill set that requires years of working regularly with it. It looks much easier than it is.
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2021, 08:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Road I Never Cross
Replies: 4
Views: 115

Re: Road I Never Cross

I like the subject but look to say things simply...don’t sacrifice your poem to rhyme. Speak normally. For example, these lines performing the same old in small or large dose turns killing. and here... the 3rd line is troubling ... we would say conversationally “she who had a golden heart”... a trou...
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2021, 08:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Kaliyuga
Replies: 5
Views: 192

Re: Kaliyuga

Working with rhyme is a difficult skill set. I give you credit for taking up the challenge. I especially liked the coupling of “eventually” and “tally”. One of the things about The Second Coming is its strong and unusual imagery. Look to strengthen that part of your game as well. We can all improve ...
by BobBradshaw
06 Jan 2021, 07:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mozart Dying
Replies: 3
Views: 244

Mozart Dying

Mozart Dying Six weeks before he died, his eyes rust-red, he whispered that he was dying. He was exhausted, overworked and I urged him to put aside the Requiem , to write a cheerful piece but at some point he turned back to it, premonitions visiting him as frequently as debtors. Within weeks he was ...
by BobBradshaw
04 Jan 2021, 09:09
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Replies: 14
Views: 610

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:

Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com The poem is my original and unpublished work and I don't have a poem committed to represent another board in the current IBPC. Women Astronauts Leave a Dying Planet There weren't women on the planet, and we weren't obliged to play mothers and lovers to a populace ...
by BobBradshaw
03 Jan 2021, 07:15
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Replies: 14
Views: 610

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:

Thx, Ken. Michael, you mentioned "Women Astronauts Leave a Dying Planet" on your short list. Let me know if I should post "Women Astronauts...or "Would I Want to Know the Date...". Best, Bob
by BobBradshaw
01 Jan 2021, 23:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Would I want to know the date
Replies: 2
Views: 405

Re: Would I want to know the date

Thanks, Billy. I look forward to reading it. I know that it will be good
by BobBradshaw
31 Dec 2020, 06:09
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Replies: 14
Views: 610

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:

I nominate Billy's "The Way of Coyote", Ken's "The Hag" and Siva's "What if we do not go to the forest...". Siva, you should put "I" before "cannot" in the last line if you go forward with posting your poem.
by BobBradshaw
30 Dec 2020, 06:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Would I want to know the date
Replies: 2
Views: 405

Would I want to know the date

Would I want to know the date of my death? No, I want to live as if death were a rumor planted by an unreliable source. Why count the moments as if they were a steady drip of a glucose bag? On the other hand I could plan my funeral: the casket, the music... " Jumpin' Jack Flash " revved up on the sp...
by BobBradshaw
24 Dec 2020, 21:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Father said,'Your New Family'.
Replies: 2
Views: 455

Re: Father said,'Your New Family'.

Well done. I like the tone throughout
by BobBradshaw
24 Dec 2020, 21:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Christmas Eve Story
Replies: 3
Views: 447

Re: A Christmas Eve Story

Michael, Ken — thank you for your comments. Much appreciated.
by BobBradshaw
24 Dec 2020, 21:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bareback
Replies: 4
Views: 641

Re: Bareback

Just superb. My favorite lines are the Samson image as well. Kudos.
by BobBradshaw
23 Dec 2020, 03:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wolfman
Replies: 7
Views: 962

Re: Wolfman

Michael, I have revised the poem to use your verb "scanning". Thx again
by BobBradshaw
22 Dec 2020, 23:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Christmas Eve Story
Replies: 3
Views: 447

A Christmas Eve Story

A Christmas Eve Story I slept in the attic under the clatter of rain. Whatever it was, something woke me and I eased myself quietly down the stairs. There was nothing at the bottom but a mess of shadows. Then I saw him, a large man snoring on the couch. There were no presents on the floor, but clear...
by BobBradshaw
22 Dec 2020, 07:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Hag
Replies: 6
Views: 672

Re: The Hag

Poignant. The appealing touch at the end. Very strong piece.

I love this:
Toothless in the front,
a gap the size of the gates to hell.

The serpent image is also well constructed.

It’s the compassionate tone that speaks volumes, and draws us in.
by BobBradshaw
20 Dec 2020, 22:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wolfman
Replies: 7
Views: 962

Re: Wolfman

Thx for the kind words, guys...
by BobBradshaw
20 Dec 2020, 02:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: What if we do not go to the Forest, the Forest will come to Usi
Replies: 3
Views: 818

Re: What if we do not go to the Forest, the Forest will come to Usi

A couple nits: you should place a period after maram and capitalize “who”.

Also at the end put an “I” before cannot.

A very pleasing poem.
by BobBradshaw
19 Dec 2020, 21:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Hag
Replies: 10
Views: 1150

Re: The Hag

Another revision? Go for it!
by BobBradshaw
19 Dec 2020, 02:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wolfman
Replies: 7
Views: 962

Re: Wolfman

Thanks, Ken
by BobBradshaw
19 Dec 2020, 02:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Hag
Replies: 10
Views: 1150

Re: The Hag

I like both versions. Both are so different in tone. Which do you prefer?