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- 23 Apr 2024, 21:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 4
- Views: 140
Re: Homecoming
Mocked is better. Your poems, like this one, are better when you employ one of your best strengths, your humor.
- 22 Apr 2024, 23:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Homecoming
- Replies: 4
- Views: 140
Re: Homecoming
I like everything about this. Clever, polished. This has probably been workshopped before. There’s a nice flow to it.
- 21 Apr 2024, 21:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 357
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
I think the first close is better. Sometimes it’s best to put a poem aside for awhile and come back with fresher eyes. Work on something else in the meantime. Speaking from experience… I’m tied up in an April National Poetry month’s 30/30…30 drafts of new poems in 30 days. After April I will post ag...
- 21 Apr 2024, 04:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 357
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
Interesting perspective. Different. Didn’t expect this change in direction. I may not agree with such a perception(it seems pretty heartless), but I think it works for the poem.
- 10 Apr 2024, 22:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 357
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 2)
S2 and S3 work well. Maybe S1 is as you say too prosaic. The quicker you get to S2, the better. Just my take. Run it by some others.
- 04 Apr 2024, 01:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius (version 4 - changed ending)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 357
Re: Fahrenheit, Not Celsius
I like how you convey restlessness in this. And, yes, the bare legs is an especially nice detail. I like the last stanza best. Nice poem.
- 03 Apr 2024, 21:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: When I Recall This Day
- Replies: 2
- Views: 200
Re: When I Recall This Day
Thanks, Caleb, for commenting. Many others would agree about the last line. IMO it makes it slightly better. But at some point I may change it. That’s why we workshop, for constructive criticism we can consider.
- 01 Apr 2024, 21:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: When I Recall This Day
- Replies: 2
- Views: 200
When I Recall This Day
When I Recall This Day These headlands may be dusted with snow, but my heart will fill with summer when I recall this day. Barns, then store fronts will have replaced these wildflowers with their red and blonde heads. A prankster wind today competes with me to muss your hair. Its honeyed scent will ...
- 01 Apr 2024, 21:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Virtuous Life
- Replies: 3
- Views: 256
Re: A Virtuous Life
I’m a bit fascinated by this mantra-like verse. The last stanza of this sestina works best for me. Overall I’m not sure how to tackle it from our normal critique perspective because this poem follows another tradition than that of American verse(usually imagistic). The imagery is more general and I ...
- 21 Mar 2024, 03:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Swing
- Replies: 3
- Views: 344
Re: Swing
Thank you, guys.
- 21 Mar 2024, 03:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Niight in Jail
- Replies: 4
- Views: 497
Re: Haibun
Yes. I like the daffodils!
- 20 Mar 2024, 22:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Swing
- Replies: 3
- Views: 344
Swing
Swing Wednesday off is as foreign to me as the coast of Chile. The boys whoop on the monkey bars. The girls twist headfirst like eels down slides. The mothers eye me, a stranger. I bask on a bench in the sun's warm hands, trying to relearn to relax. I'm a workaholic, disoriented by a day off. A smal...
- 20 Mar 2024, 21:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Niight in Jail
- Replies: 4
- Views: 497
Re: Haibun
Good one. I could also see this one with shorter line lengths, to suggest the N’s speech rhythm, like in many of your poems.
- 20 Mar 2024, 20:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Resisting Arrest in Warren, RI
- Replies: 3
- Views: 382
Re: Resisting Arrest in Warren, RI
Hilarious
- 20 Mar 2024, 00:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth
- Replies: 8
- Views: 794
Re: Unwrapping the Truth
Thanks, Caleb. It looks like a good magazine. I liked seeing a Steve Klepetar poem there.
- 19 Mar 2024, 21:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Blue Prayer Beads
- Replies: 8
- Views: 671
Re: Blue Prayer Beads
You’re more than welcomed.
- 19 Mar 2024, 21:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth
- Replies: 8
- Views: 794
Re: Unwrapping the Truth
Ms. Stallings is an excellent poet. I just googled One Sentence Poems, and couldn’t find it. Could you share the url? Thanks
- 19 Mar 2024, 08:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Unwrapping the Truth
- Replies: 8
- Views: 794
Re: Unwrapping the Truth
I like the efficiency in this. And the idea of starting with something as simple and as common as a thumb print endeared me to this poem.
- 17 Mar 2024, 21:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Blue Prayer Beads
- Replies: 8
- Views: 671
Re: Blue Prayer Beads
Terrific poem. A GREAT close. This poem should be a model enjoyed in writing classes. It should be in an anthology. Where are you sending it? It's been some time since I last sat upright, beads in hand like a rope to pull me from the abyss. Facing the east, eyes closed, feeling my way bead by bead a...
- 17 Mar 2024, 07:53
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Birds of Florida published
- Replies: 2
- Views: 273
Re: Birds of Florida published
Sorry about that… I have the same problem.
- 15 Mar 2024, 07:45
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Ieuan Published in Terence Culleton's Winter Newsletter: Hyra Brook - March 2024
- Replies: 2
- Views: 199
Re: Ieuan Published in Terence Culleton's Winter Newsletter: Hyra Brook - March 2024
Congratulations, Ieuan, on your poem and its publication!
Bob
Bob
- 14 Mar 2024, 22:07
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Birds of Florida published
- Replies: 2
- Views: 273
Birds of Florida published
My poem “Birds of Florida” is at Open Arts Forum…see link below. The link may look weird but it works.
https://openartsforum.com/birds-of-florida/
https://openartsforum.com/birds-of-florida/
- 12 Mar 2024, 22:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Narrow Fellow
- Replies: 8
- Views: 783
Re: A Narrow Fellow
Nice one.
- 12 Mar 2024, 22:24
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Ieuan Published - Tribute from a Wooden Huut - thewiseowl.art Falcon Ed. Jan 2024
- Replies: 2
- Views: 234
Re: Ieuan Published - Tribute from a Wooden Huut - thewiseowl.art Falcon Ed. Jan 2024
Good to see this poem continue to be rewarded, and deservingly so.
- 12 Mar 2024, 22:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Today I Was Her Dad Though Tonight She Asks Me Where The Man Is Who Raked Leaves
- Replies: 5
- Views: 947
Re: Today I Was Her Dad Though Tonight She Asks Me Where The Man Is Who Raked Leaves
Excellent poem, Billy. I have read it a number of times, and it gets better with each read. No nits. A poignant piece. The ending is just right.