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by SivaVelliangiri
24 Nov 2017, 19:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fagin
Replies: 5
Views: 12127

Re: Fagin

Frank
You have changed the tense. Let us wait and see if anyone else wishes to say something.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
24 Nov 2017, 08:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fagin
Replies: 5
Views: 12127

Fagin

1. A short man, not very ordinary looking, waited behind the East Fort arch every morning at 8.25 and followed me right up to the bus stop. He wore a dhothi , perhaps two meters wide and lifted the tip with one hand. I am in my convent blue uniform. He has betel stained teeth. Him following me to t...
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Nov 2017, 02:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hotel India
Replies: 15
Views: 22729

Re: Hotel India

B

Thanks for sharing. We live in hope. Poetry is the tattoo on our skin--accompanying us in our after-life.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Nov 2017, 01:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sparrows Sing (revision)
Replies: 14
Views: 23693

Re: The Sparrows Sing

Each stanza unravels slowly and here is a poem to be much liked.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
22 Nov 2017, 20:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl
Replies: 8
Views: 16770

Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

Kenneth I could get it. Names like Greek Gods. We used to sign our creative letter writing with names like Codopirina and Mr.Eldopar. Aspirina. Even our Auyurvedic names became feminine. That aside the artists are well accounted for. Einstein alone perplexes,maybe because of his theory. That it is s...
by SivaVelliangiri
22 Nov 2017, 02:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hotel India
Replies: 15
Views: 22729

Re: Hotel India

Bernie What a lovely poem,everything that Frank said and much more--thrilling like flash fiction.Will definitely return to it several times for a long time,better still store it in my favourite poems folder. Below, a corn laden barge creeps on the flaxen river. Rain again with both hands. I join han...
by SivaVelliangiri
10 Nov 2017, 13:48
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: September IBPC 2017 Poems (Congrats Bernie 2nd Place)
Replies: 11
Views: 24787

Re: September IBPC 2017 Poems (Congrats Bernie 2nd Place)

Congratulations Bernie and all those who were placed from other boards. Thank you Michael and Bernie and Frank. Frank you are always right when it comes to editing. Seeing so many commas in the last stanza --I wish I had removed all those commas, then there would not have been so many pauses and the...
by SivaVelliangiri
01 Nov 2017, 05:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nakulan's Colleague Prof.Carey
Replies: 2
Views: 7611

Re: Nakulan's Colleague Prof.Carey

B
Thanks for reading.And pointing out the 'space' which was missing.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
30 Oct 2017, 20:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nakulan's Colleague Prof.Carey
Replies: 2
Views: 7611

Nakulan's Colleague Prof.Carey

The verandah of Nakulan’s house had a parapet with an easy chair; of the two rooms, one was his and on the other his mother lay. Outside the verandah, on the muttam, a single tree could be seen; In the room inside gurgling noises could be heard where an old woman who had spent her life with a schizo...
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Oct 2017, 22:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey
Replies: 11
Views: 17967

Re: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey

Kenneth and Frank

If somebody helps me with the punctuation,then I accept the nom.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Oct 2017, 21:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey
Replies: 11
Views: 17967

Re: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey

Kenneth
I do not wish there were more people like you. Because then all three of you would become very ordinary.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Oct 2017, 21:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey
Replies: 11
Views: 17967

Re: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey

Frank
I know you will help me with the punctuation. I have learnt quite a lot from your editing.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Oct 2017, 21:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey
Replies: 11
Views: 17967

Re: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey

Hi All
I have achieved something. Just touch and go,no ugliness,poetic enough to be prose. I do not wish there were more people like you.I am not able to comment on the poems because sometimes I feel extremely stupid.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
23 Oct 2017, 21:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Friend’s Father Professor Carey
Replies: 11
Views: 17967

My Friend’s Father Professor Carey

My Friend’s Father Prof.Carey The verandah of Nakulan’s house had a parapet with an easy chair; of the two rooms, one was his and on the other his mother lay. Outside the verandah, on the muttam, a single tree could be seen; In the room inside gurgling noises could be heard where an old woman who h...
by SivaVelliangiri
22 Oct 2017, 20:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem
Replies: 11
Views: 20274

Re: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem

Bernie

Thank you for the information about the Writers' rooms.And the quotes from poems of Indian background.

Siva
by SivaVelliangiri
22 Oct 2017, 17:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem
Replies: 11
Views: 20274

Re: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem

Thanks Kenneth. I want to delete that Gay Professor poem.I am not able to do it.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
22 Oct 2017, 00:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem
Replies: 11
Views: 20274

Re: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem, Kodaikanal

Two normal rooms on the ground floor and one larger double room on the floor upstairs steps outside leading to the first floor on the left a black Sintex tank water overflowing, a pipe tickles in, a little lower a boiler heats up water and pipes take their angled diversion here. Dogs barking all of ...
by SivaVelliangiri
21 Oct 2017, 20:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem
Replies: 11
Views: 20274

Re: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem

Kenneth and Bernie

Now I know how I will be rewriting this.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
20 Oct 2017, 23:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love Story
Replies: 8
Views: 15778

Re: Love Story, The Bride of Frankenstein

I have read this and shall keep track of the comments.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
20 Oct 2017, 23:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Libernium
Replies: 9
Views: 16066

Re: Libernium

I like the last line.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
20 Oct 2017, 23:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Forest Bungalow, Berijem
Replies: 11
Views: 20274

The Forest Bungalow, Berijem

Two normal rooms on the ground floor and one larger double room on the floor upstairs steps outside leading to the first floor on the left a black Sintex tank water overflowing, a pipe tickles in, a little lower a boiler heats up water and pipes take their angled diversion here. Dogs barking all of ...
by SivaVelliangiri
20 Oct 2017, 06:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Boy's Confession As A Man
Replies: 6
Views: 14013

Re: The Boy's Confession As A Man

Billy

where I kept the Playboy(.) You need a full stop there.
Kenneth has said what I wanted to say.

S
by SivaVelliangiri
19 Oct 2017, 23:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lawsuit Against the World Settled In My Favor
Replies: 8
Views: 16232

Re: Lawsuit Against the World Settled In My Favor

B

Yes.Good one.I nominate this poem for IBPC.

S