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I like how the poem turns as well. Moving from life struggling to be in a sidewalk crack to life struggling to be in war is effective.

I like this also but agree it could start at the point that's been pointed out. It's a full poem, though, one that packs a punch.

Hi Bob. I just registered here. I think this is good. I love the use of "bull" and for a second I saw flying bulls and it wasn't silly. Great characterization of the drone. Using drones and laborers here is brilliant imo.