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by Michael (MV)
02 Nov 2013, 10:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nostalgia
Replies: 7
Views: 5457

Re: Nostalgia

Hi Siva, continuing w/ stanza 4: The tongue touches the taste of native candy, then Cadburys, country ghee and crooked green tamarind pods, and the buds salivate like the first time. Then the extra sensory oversees all these impressions into song, dance, painting, sculture: poetry with voice & visio...
by Michael (MV)
01 Nov 2013, 07:19
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC November 2013:
Replies: 4
Views: 4372

Thanks, Billy,

Thanks, Billy.

complete & confirmed.


Good Luck in the finals

:)

Michael (MV)

Billy wrote:i am not representing any other board

Billy Howell-Sinnard
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
31 Oct 2013, 19:14
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC November 2013:
Replies: 4
Views: 4372

Happy Halloween Update:

1/ Thanks Billy, still need one more detail: please post a brief statement here that you are not representing any other board this November IBPC. Thanks again, Billy 2/ I have recommended Siva's Nostalgia : http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=5749 3/ I have PM'd FrankDyer re H...
by Michael (MV)
30 Oct 2013, 18:47
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed for IBPC October 2013:
Replies: 0
Views: 2078

Poems that placed for IBPC October 2013:

Selected by Kelly Cherry

Read the October Winners & Kelly Cherry's Commentary:

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2013/10


Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets

:)

Michael (MV)

 
 
  
 
by Michael (MV)
30 Oct 2013, 08:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nostalgia
Replies: 7
Views: 5457

Re: Nostalgia

The eyes see again lotus beauty years from infancy, and then beauty was anything I looked upon, even the invisible. or maybe: was anything I looked upon, even the unseen. Ultrasonic hearing detects vibrations of the slithering snake and the padded paws; re: "images built up and with a little jugglin...
by Michael (MV)
30 Oct 2013, 01:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nostalgia
Replies: 7
Views: 5457

Re: Nostalgia

Hi Siva, for now: Nostalgia : a return to a paradise lost ("He leaves the fold for one") ^^ and thus, I find this poem appealing. How about we ready-it for the upcoming IBPC; that is, of course, if you don't already have a poem representing another board. I'll be returning to comment & workshop, mor...
by Michael (MV)
29 Oct 2013, 09:21
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC November 2013:
Replies: 4
Views: 4372

Upcoming IBPC November 2013:

any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
by Michael (MV)
24 Oct 2013, 17:28
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed for IBPC September 2013
Replies: 0
Views: 2150

Poems that placed for IBPC September 2013

Selected by Robert Sward

Read the September Winners & Sward's Commentary:

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2013/09


Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets

:)

Michael (MV)

 

 

 
by Michael (MV)
12 Oct 2013, 01:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He Races Up The Stairs
Replies: 10
Views: 7751

Re: He Races Up The Stairs

Billy,

re " I was enamored of "scoot" b/c it's a child's type of action word."

^^ what can I say

He scoots up the stairs


8)

Michael (MV)

 

 

 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
11 Oct 2013, 18:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He Races Up The Stairs
Replies: 10
Views: 7751

Re: He Races Up The Stairs

Billy,

I'm in accord w/ Judy's suggestions

8)

Michael (MV)
by Michael (MV)
10 Oct 2013, 23:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He Races Up The Stairs
Replies: 10
Views: 7751

Re: He Runs Up The Stairs Ahead Of Me

He Races Up The Stairs Ahead Of Me maybe "Ahead Of Me" not needed anyways, I like the energy of the new title. instead of the heavy "pondering," and add a moment of dialogue: . . . He asks, "read to me again that part about . . " and I can see his imaginings, I'm imagining "The Rime of the Ancient M...
by Michael (MV)
07 Oct 2013, 08:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He Races Up The Stairs
Replies: 10
Views: 7751

Re: To See With His Eyes

Hi Billy, for now, maybe more later: I like this poem. The title is incorporated in the textual. So, I'm workshop suggesting different words for the title space; and the words I hear are U2's "Stories for Boys." (provided below) Now, I don't think that constitutes plagiarism b/c there are works of a...
by Michael (MV)
03 Oct 2013, 06:29
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2013:
Replies: 5
Views: 5389

Update 10-3

Chan has accepted to represent.

I have PMed Billy for The shy child thought he should be a man.

For a 3rd, I'm PMing FrankDyer for Groningen.


Michael (MV)

 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
02 Oct 2013, 22:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The shy child thought he should be a man
Replies: 4
Views: 4485

Re: The shy child thought he should be a man

Hi Billy, still as a workshop suggestion: Where is the man to be found? or How is the man to be found? or Is the man to be found? And, maybe a more specific word, for example, "forefathers," for "men." 8) Michael (MV) Thanks, Michael, I will use your suggestions. I wrote this in the box, so it needs...
by Michael (MV)
02 Oct 2013, 19:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The shy child thought he should be a man
Replies: 4
Views: 4485

Re: The shy child thought he should be a man

Hi Billy, "The morning crawls out of the night leaving a trail of blood." ^^ strong "inside books" - not needed; implied by "in margins, between lines." The child draws army men on paper, walls, arms, legs, in margins, between lines. ^^ esp here, and given the title, too, I hear Pearl Jam's "Jeremy"...
by Michael (MV)
02 Oct 2013, 03:53
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2013:
Replies: 5
Views: 5389

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2013: I ACCEPT

Thanks, Chan, for accepting to represent the Block this October IBPC 2013; and for providing all the needed info, except for detail #6: "6/and the poem as you would like it forwarded to the finals." If you'll please post in this thread the poem as Chan would like it forwarded to the finals. Thanks, ...
by Michael (MV)
27 Sep 2013, 03:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: tanka
Replies: 9
Views: 7347

Re: tanka

Hi Billy, unless an entendre on "lying" is intended, I workshop suggest another. "going through its phases" - "going through" - a fresher phrasing "returning full once again" - redundancy w/in that line workshop illustrated below for your perusal & consideration 8) Michael (MV) every night curled al...
by Michael (MV)
27 Sep 2013, 02:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Little Girl
Replies: 2
Views: 3546

Re: Little Girl

Hi Frank, this reads at draft level I believe the intent is to structure on the rhythm of the ing s, but they are more trying than achieving. a fatherhood reading: I saw a little girl hand in hand with her daddy walking ^^ narrator observing a father & daughter [But] where is my little girl? sitting...
by Michael (MV)
26 Sep 2013, 20:49
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2013:
Replies: 5
Views: 5389

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2013:

ChanHurst, I would like to recommend your poem, "Proximity," to represent this upcoming IBPC. Please reply - accept or decline - in this thread. If accepting, then please provide all the info delineated. :) Michael (MV) any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the I...
by Michael (MV)
24 Sep 2013, 07:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)
Replies: 4
Views: 4136

Re: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)

ChanHurst,

I would like to recommend your poem, "Proximity," to represent this upcoming IBPC.


viewtopic.php?f=3&t=5739


:)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
24 Sep 2013, 07:37
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2013:
Replies: 5
Views: 5389

Upcoming October IBPC 2013:

any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
by Michael (MV)
23 Sep 2013, 08:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Blind In Autumn.
Replies: 3
Views: 4183

Re: Blind In Autumn.

Hi ichiozi1, Today 9/22 is the autumnal equinox of 2013; so apropos to read & comment your poem. She gave him two keys, in two minds he did wander, left him to sorts on the plains. She gave him a period of many joyous adventures.   or maybe a semicolon They rallied through rays and the rain, like a ...
by Michael (MV)
17 Sep 2013, 08:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: These Are The Things I Think About If Left Alone
Replies: 1
Views: 2526

Re: These Are The Things I Think About If Left Alone

Hi Billy, The title & first line verge on redundancy; perhaps merge   :) esp liked: "my fragile breath sinking before me." consider the next 2 lines as: The words I say, forget then say again The last stanza is Frankenstein: "while peering through the blinds into the eyes of the beast that lives whe...
by Michael (MV)
17 Sep 2013, 08:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)
Replies: 4
Views: 4136

Re: Proximity (First poem posted here; new tot he site)

Welcome ChanHurst! I like this first post of your: lyrical / anaphoral re "As close as close as we can be" ^^ I'm hearing: As close to close as we can be If a 3rd stanza perhaps the anaphora "next to"; or compose in a converse such as "not far from" or "never far away" But then, I'm not immediately ...
by Michael (MV)
16 Sep 2013, 20:34
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: IBPC Poems that placed for August 2013:
Replies: 0
Views: 2259

IBPC Poems that placed for August 2013:

The poems and Robert Sward's in-depth commentaries:

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2013/08


Congrats! to our fellow IBPC poets


Michael (MV)

 
 
 

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