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by Michael (MV)
25 Mar 2014, 19:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Poor Girl
Replies: 2
Views: 3648

Re: The Poor Girl

meenas17, 1st, please observe: "to keep up a reasonable ratio of number of substantive critiques of other poets' work when you post your own work for critique" http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=3040 Thanks, meenas17 This reads like prose in line breaks & stanzas, with some r...
by Michael (MV)
25 Mar 2014, 07:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mango and Guava
Replies: 4
Views: 5472

Re: Mango and Guava

Hi meenas17 w/out the last 2 lines; and workshop illustrated for your persusal & consideration   8)   Michael (MV) The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden.. The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden. A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle vigorously heavily laden with produce. The fall o...
by Michael (MV)
23 Mar 2014, 22:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: cinquain-poem
Replies: 6
Views: 6494

cinquain-poem

 
"Time share"


Share time
with, not spend cash
on children. Family
that shares together forever
fulfilled


 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
23 Mar 2014, 22:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bringing Up Children
Replies: 4
Views: 5538

Re: Bringing Up Children

Welcome meenas17 in general, there is more telling here than showing. Poetry reveals, not tells. sensuous(imagery) not cerebral(idea) esp liked: "Spend time not money on them" ^^ that line has prompted my pen to its own cinquain-poem - haven't composed in cinquain form recently and I'll post it in i...
by Michael (MV)
23 Mar 2014, 20:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
Replies: 8
Views: 7848

Re: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu

mojave, welcome back - returned with the spring wonderful to see your presence I have missed the enrichment of your creativity to the Block. Your poem - something sinister simmering in the crock pot not just a picturesque picture but then poetry is never superficial. The Merchant of Tamil Nadu berni...
by Michael (MV)
20 Mar 2014, 20:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: in an open field
Replies: 4
Views: 5461

Re: in an open field

Hi Billy, a gradual, inevitable resurrection that worms weave a space for souls the dead are convinced will come to them on a grey day as sparrows foraging in snowless patches of last winter's stubble Here @ the vernal equinox, I quote this miraculous trinity: Hope   Springs   Eternal and music-vide...
by Michael (MV)
16 Mar 2014, 19:31
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: IBPC: Poems that placed for February 2014
Replies: 0
Views: 2327

IBPC: Poems that placed for February 2014

Read the February choices & Robert Lee Brewer's commentary:

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2014/02


Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets


Michael (MV)




 
 
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
03 Mar 2014, 19:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Introspection
Replies: 7
Views: 6561

Re: Introspection

Siva, I see now that dyerfrank is correct about "douse" is the more precise word. So I retract my workshop suggestion of "drown." However, re "Not a natural calamity" perhaps it would better serve as title or "Not a natural catastrophe" or simply: "calamity" or "catastrophe" wait, wait, this just in...
by Michael (MV)
03 Mar 2014, 09:52
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
Replies: 3
Views: 3770

Re: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:

Thanks, Siva for your recommendations. I have PM'd abhrksht; it's up to abhrksht to decide whether to use the suggested workshopping. Siva, if you are not representing any other board this current IBPC, would you allow Introspection to represent the Block. Please reply here in this thread; if accept...
by Michael (MV)
01 Mar 2014, 18:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Introspection
Replies: 7
Views: 6561

Re: Introspection

Hi Siva, do you mean racing Lancer? and perhaps the opening as Lounging in a racing Lancer, I see distant trees darken with night, a bracket of serial bulbs. and stanza breaks / white space - below workshopped for your perusal & consideration    :)   Michael (MV) Lounging in a racing Lancer I see di...
by Michael (MV)
27 Feb 2014, 23:01
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
Replies: 3
Views: 3770

Upcoming IBPC March 2014:

any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
by Michael (MV)
22 Feb 2014, 08:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)
Replies: 6
Views: 6587

Re: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)

Welcome abhrksht, This reader(and perhaps others) would like to be introduced to the antecedents of the pronouns: "She is gone, he announces" and of the "I": "But I was the one, I pride myself" ^^ I'm assuming: Mother is gone, my brother announces or Mother is gone, the doctor announces and the 1st ...
by Michael (MV)
21 Feb 2014, 19:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Road
Replies: 6
Views: 7427

Re: The Dry Dock Road

Hi Frank, You wrote a dry dock road poem last March - already another year sojourned by us all and now here you expand the perspective and the Universal then & now - lost/regain/lost You use punctuation, and then you don't here. Here in this narrative, I recommend punctuation consistent throughout. ...
by Michael (MV)
20 Feb 2014, 20:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
Replies: 4
Views: 4219

"reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

  1/ Each soul is stellar indeed a star is borne There is no pain in being born to be alive pre-sent - no audition required despairing from not really living the part you are gifted for like an actor out of a play existence out of breath 2/ Tragedy is a sympton not the source upstage that addiction ...
by Michael (MV)
15 Feb 2014, 18:14
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: IBPC: Poems that placed for January 2014
Replies: 0
Views: 2408

IBPC: Poems that placed for January 2014

 
selected by Robert Lee Brewer


Read the January choices & Robert Lee Brewer's commentary:

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2014/01


Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets


Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
03 Feb 2014, 20:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dear Mother-In-law
Replies: 5
Views: 5477

Re: Dear Mother-In-law

Hi Siva, I don't find it too prose, albeit I do consider it a prose-Poem; specifically, as indicated by the title: Epistolary - the letter-poem. Some minor workshop edits in the text, including another variation on the close.   :)  Michael (MV) You certainly knew when death came near you. You spoke ...
by Michael (MV)
03 Feb 2014, 19:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dear Mother-In-law
Replies: 5
Views: 5477

Re: Dear Mother-In-law

Hi Siva, a minor workshop consideration re the last 4 lines to 3: We searched everywhere, only to find your spectacles. You were fighting for your life. Your dentures, your only weapon: No wonder we could not find them. Siva, if you are not already representing another board this current IBPC, and i...
by Michael (MV)
29 Jan 2014, 02:55
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2014:
Replies: 1
Views: 2981

Upcoming February IBPC 2014:

any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
by Michael (MV)
19 Jan 2014, 21:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Published in the "Wandering Minstrels'
Replies: 2
Views: 3671

Re: Published in the The Wondering Minstrels

Hi Siva, and Congrats on the presentation of your poem in The Wondering Minstrels. Providing the Link for convenience: http://wonderingminstrels.blogspot.com/2003/05/love-poem-sivakami-velliangiri.html and adding a link to a love lyric from the Red Hot Chili Peppers   :)   to celebrate. Cheers   8) ...
by Michael (MV)
08 Jan 2014, 06:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: a floorshow on the kitchen table
Replies: 2
Views: 3405

a floorshow on the kitchen table

  Epiphany from "the boy bred with Ginger"   :) with nothing on him gingerbread boy stands on his hands and turns about face into a frosted reindeer mask with antlers the length of the legs then within a heartbeat somersaults the animal side to sonny side up his arms in a V           
by Michael (MV)
06 Jan 2014, 21:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "The One / law of averages"
Replies: 5
Views: 5948

Re: "The One / law of averages"

Thanks Siva, Thanks Billy serendipity : poetic coincidence Last evening the Muse prompted me to select it to be a part of our triumvirate for the 1st IBPC of 2014. and here on The 12th Night : Epiphany Lest You Become Like These Little Ones https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:ChristwithChildren_CarlB...
by Michael (MV)
05 Jan 2014, 01:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: shall we listen to every bird
Replies: 1
Views: 3163

Re: shall we listen to every bird

Hi Billy, Siva has recommended shall we listen to every bird here : http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=5763 If you are not representing any other board this IBPC, etc., then Please accept or decline in the designated thread at Palaver: Upcoming IBPC January 2014: http://www.t...
by Michael (MV)
02 Jan 2014, 06:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: TGITG   (an after-byte)
Replies: 5
Views: 5612

Re: TGITG   (an after-byte)

Hi Siva,

Thank God it's Thanksgiving - a take on TGIF: Thank God it's Friday


a byte-poem is 8 syllables, any lineage


As far as I know, length is not a prerequisite; for example, from March 2006:

http://poetry.about.com/library/bl0306ibpchm.htm


8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 
by Michael (MV)
01 Jan 2014, 18:44
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming IBPC January 2014:
Replies: 3
Views: 4131

Re: Upcoming IBPC January 2014:

Thanks, Siva, 1/ Please also add a brief statement that you aren't representing any other board this current IBPC. Thanks. 2/ Do you want Guru Purnima in italics Guru Purnima Happy New Year 8) Michael (MV)  I would like my unpublished poem 'Absence' to be forwarded to the IBPC to represent The Write...
by Michael (MV)
01 Jan 2014, 06:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Absence
Replies: 7
Views: 6484

Re: Absence

Hi Siva, I lost a longer crit/commentary. I saw this as a conflict of Heart & head. The head remembers; the Heart recalls. The head recycles; the Heart revives The last 6 lines are the best. twigs in the beak; Heart in the voice Below, I have reformatted, etc., for your perusal: Siva, would Absence ...