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- 25 Mar 2014, 19:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Poor Girl
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3648
Re: The Poor Girl
meenas17, 1st, please observe: "to keep up a reasonable ratio of number of substantive critiques of other poets' work when you post your own work for critique" http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=3040 Thanks, meenas17 This reads like prose in line breaks & stanzas, with some r...
- 25 Mar 2014, 07:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Mango and Guava
- Replies: 4
- Views: 5472
Re: Mango and Guava
Hi meenas17 w/out the last 2 lines; and workshop illustrated for your persusal & consideration 8) Michael (MV) The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden.. The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden. A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle vigorously heavily laden with produce. The fall o...
- 23 Mar 2014, 22:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: cinquain-poem
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6494
cinquain-poem
"Time share"
Share time
with, not spend cash
on children. Family
that shares together forever
fulfilled
- 23 Mar 2014, 22:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bringing Up Children
- Replies: 4
- Views: 5538
Re: Bringing Up Children
Welcome meenas17 in general, there is more telling here than showing. Poetry reveals, not tells. sensuous(imagery) not cerebral(idea) esp liked: "Spend time not money on them" ^^ that line has prompted my pen to its own cinquain-poem - haven't composed in cinquain form recently and I'll post it in i...
- 23 Mar 2014, 20:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7848
Re: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
mojave, welcome back - returned with the spring wonderful to see your presence I have missed the enrichment of your creativity to the Block. Your poem - something sinister simmering in the crock pot not just a picturesque picture but then poetry is never superficial. The Merchant of Tamil Nadu berni...
- 20 Mar 2014, 20:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: in an open field
- Replies: 4
- Views: 5461
Re: in an open field
Hi Billy, a gradual, inevitable resurrection that worms weave a space for souls the dead are convinced will come to them on a grey day as sparrows foraging in snowless patches of last winter's stubble Here @ the vernal equinox, I quote this miraculous trinity: Hope Springs Eternal and music-vide...
- 16 Mar 2014, 19:31
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: IBPC: Poems that placed for February 2014
- Replies: 0
- Views: 2327
IBPC: Poems that placed for February 2014
Read the February choices & Robert Lee Brewer's commentary:
http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2014/02
Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets
Michael (MV)
http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2014/02
Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets
Michael (MV)
- 03 Mar 2014, 19:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6561
Re: Introspection
Siva, I see now that dyerfrank is correct about "douse" is the more precise word. So I retract my workshop suggestion of "drown." However, re "Not a natural calamity" perhaps it would better serve as title or "Not a natural catastrophe" or simply: "calamity" or "catastrophe" wait, wait, this just in...
- 03 Mar 2014, 09:52
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3770
Re: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
Thanks, Siva for your recommendations. I have PM'd abhrksht; it's up to abhrksht to decide whether to use the suggested workshopping. Siva, if you are not representing any other board this current IBPC, would you allow Introspection to represent the Block. Please reply here in this thread; if accept...
- 01 Mar 2014, 18:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6561
Re: Introspection
Hi Siva, do you mean racing Lancer? and perhaps the opening as Lounging in a racing Lancer, I see distant trees darken with night, a bracket of serial bulbs. and stanza breaks / white space - below workshopped for your perusal & consideration :) Michael (MV) Lounging in a racing Lancer I see di...
- 27 Feb 2014, 23:01
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3770
Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
- 22 Feb 2014, 08:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6587
Re: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)
Welcome abhrksht, This reader(and perhaps others) would like to be introduced to the antecedents of the pronouns: "She is gone, he announces" and of the "I": "But I was the one, I pride myself" ^^ I'm assuming: Mother is gone, my brother announces or Mother is gone, the doctor announces and the 1st ...
- 21 Feb 2014, 19:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Road
- Replies: 6
- Views: 7427
Re: The Dry Dock Road
Hi Frank, You wrote a dry dock road poem last March - already another year sojourned by us all and now here you expand the perspective and the Universal then & now - lost/regain/lost You use punctuation, and then you don't here. Here in this narrative, I recommend punctuation consistent throughout. ...
- 20 Feb 2014, 20:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
- Replies: 4
- Views: 4219
"reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
1/ Each soul is stellar indeed a star is borne There is no pain in being born to be alive pre-sent - no audition required despairing from not really living the part you are gifted for like an actor out of a play existence out of breath 2/ Tragedy is a sympton not the source upstage that addiction ...
- 15 Feb 2014, 18:14
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: IBPC: Poems that placed for January 2014
- Replies: 0
- Views: 2408
IBPC: Poems that placed for January 2014
selected by Robert Lee Brewer
Read the January choices & Robert Lee Brewer's commentary:
http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/2014/01
Congrats to our fellow IBPC poets
Michael (MV)
- 03 Feb 2014, 20:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dear Mother-In-law
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5477
Re: Dear Mother-In-law
Hi Siva, I don't find it too prose, albeit I do consider it a prose-Poem; specifically, as indicated by the title: Epistolary - the letter-poem. Some minor workshop edits in the text, including another variation on the close. :) Michael (MV) You certainly knew when death came near you. You spoke ...
- 03 Feb 2014, 19:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dear Mother-In-law
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5477
Re: Dear Mother-In-law
Hi Siva, a minor workshop consideration re the last 4 lines to 3: We searched everywhere, only to find your spectacles. You were fighting for your life. Your dentures, your only weapon: No wonder we could not find them. Siva, if you are not already representing another board this current IBPC, and i...
- 29 Jan 2014, 02:55
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2014:
- Replies: 1
- Views: 2981
Upcoming February IBPC 2014:
any newcomers or returnees this month, Welcome! and here is a home link to the IBPC rules: http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/rules Poems recommended to represent the Block are posted here in this thread, along with all IBPC required info. When the 1-3 are decided upon, and permission granted by each author ...
- 19 Jan 2014, 21:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Published in the "Wandering Minstrels'
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3671
Re: Published in the The Wondering Minstrels
Hi Siva, and Congrats on the presentation of your poem in The Wondering Minstrels. Providing the Link for convenience: http://wonderingminstrels.blogspot.com/2003/05/love-poem-sivakami-velliangiri.html and adding a link to a love lyric from the Red Hot Chili Peppers :) to celebrate. Cheers 8) ...
- 08 Jan 2014, 06:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: a floorshow on the kitchen table
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3405
a floorshow on the kitchen table
Epiphany from "the boy bred with Ginger" :) with nothing on him gingerbread boy stands on his hands and turns about face into a frosted reindeer mask with antlers the length of the legs then within a heartbeat somersaults the animal side to sonny side up his arms in a V
- 06 Jan 2014, 21:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "The One / law of averages"
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5948
Re: "The One / law of averages"
Thanks Siva, Thanks Billy serendipity : poetic coincidence Last evening the Muse prompted me to select it to be a part of our triumvirate for the 1st IBPC of 2014. and here on The 12th Night : Epiphany Lest You Become Like These Little Ones https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:ChristwithChildren_CarlB...
- 05 Jan 2014, 01:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: shall we listen to every bird
- Replies: 1
- Views: 3163
Re: shall we listen to every bird
Hi Billy, Siva has recommended shall we listen to every bird here : http://www.the-writers-block.net/forum/viewtopic.php?f=2&t=5763 If you are not representing any other board this IBPC, etc., then Please accept or decline in the designated thread at Palaver: Upcoming IBPC January 2014: http://www.t...
- 02 Jan 2014, 06:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: TGITG (an after-byte)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5612
Re: TGITG (an after-byte)
Hi Siva,
Thank God it's Thanksgiving - a take on TGIF: Thank God it's Friday
a byte-poem is 8 syllables, any lineage
As far as I know, length is not a prerequisite; for example, from March 2006:
http://poetry.about.com/library/bl0306ibpchm.htm
Michael (MV)
Thank God it's Thanksgiving - a take on TGIF: Thank God it's Friday
a byte-poem is 8 syllables, any lineage
As far as I know, length is not a prerequisite; for example, from March 2006:
http://poetry.about.com/library/bl0306ibpchm.htm

Michael (MV)
- 01 Jan 2014, 18:44
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC January 2014:
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4131
Re: Upcoming IBPC January 2014:
Thanks, Siva, 1/ Please also add a brief statement that you aren't representing any other board this current IBPC. Thanks. 2/ Do you want Guru Purnima in italics Guru Purnima Happy New Year 8) Michael (MV) I would like my unpublished poem 'Absence' to be forwarded to the IBPC to represent The Write...
- 01 Jan 2014, 06:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Absence
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6484
Re: Absence
Hi Siva, I lost a longer crit/commentary. I saw this as a conflict of Heart & head. The head remembers; the Heart recalls. The head recycles; the Heart revives The last 6 lines are the best. twigs in the beak; Heart in the voice Below, I have reformatted, etc., for your perusal: Siva, would Absence ...