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by SivaRamanathan
31 Jan 2020, 20:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Going Back to Amma’s House
Replies: 6
Views: 702

Re: Going Back to Amma’s House

Bob

I am happy with V3.Thanks for showing me how to work.

S
by SivaRamanathan
31 Jan 2020, 05:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Going Back to Amma’s House
Replies: 6
Views: 702

Re: Going Back to Amma’s House

Bob

Just seen this.Will get to work today.

S
by SivaRamanathan
29 Jan 2020, 21:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Going Back to Amma’s House
Replies: 6
Views: 702

Going Back to Amma’s House

V3 Going Back to Amma’s House A reversal of roles, I make coffee for Dad waiting at the dining table. He sips and says not quite like Somu’s ; steam rises, though not quite as it did a few days ago. I ask Somu , ‘’how do you manage? I too double boil the decoction, just like you.’’ The trick is to a...
by SivaRamanathan
29 Jan 2020, 10:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
Replies: 10
Views: 1142

Re: Sleeping on a Roof

Bob

And I will second the nomination.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
28 Jan 2020, 13:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Latent Heat of Milk
Replies: 2
Views: 618

Re: The Latent Heat of Milk

Bob

Thank you. Seen and will work on it.

S
by SivaRamanathan
27 Jan 2020, 22:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ten Ways of Making Chapathis
Replies: 2
Views: 624

Re: Ten Ways of Making Chapathis

Bob

That is why it has emained in my folder. Now I will be able to work on it. Thank you.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
26 Jan 2020, 22:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Latent Heat of Milk
Replies: 2
Views: 618

The Latent Heat of Milk

Latent Heat of Milk Dad insisted on drinking steaming coffee there was no surprise in it; like his mother. Grandamma ate half a dosai her husband the other half lest it turn cold. The same with omlette double fry, heat transferred from the pan into his mouth. ‘You never can make it like my son,' Dad...
by SivaRamanathan
26 Jan 2020, 22:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ten Ways of Making Chapathis
Replies: 2
Views: 624

Ten Ways of Making Chapathis

You have to feel the flour with your fingers for the texture or else you will have to seive it once more to hold back the coarse chaff remembering flour and flour will stick together. A dash of salt with the tip of the fingers, one half spoon sugar warm milk and water ,a spoon full of oil and all yo...
by SivaRamanathan
26 Jan 2020, 19:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
Replies: 10
Views: 1142

Re: Sleeping on a Roof

B
Sometime peers 'see' what the poet ' overlooks.' And the satisfactio of a finished poem is the reward.

S
by SivaRamanathan
25 Jan 2020, 22:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
Replies: 10
Views: 1142

Re: Sleeping on a Roof

B
Think about this


Sleeping on a Roof

She brought me home from a reading,
saying no poet should sleep so rough
then she trimmed my long hair,
her scissors striding expertly.

Immediate action,because there is no space,or gap after two lines.
by SivaRamanathan
25 Jan 2020, 10:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sleeping on a Roof
Replies: 10
Views: 1142

Re: Sleeping on a Roof

B

Seems perfect.

S
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 22:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Another New Year's Eve in Prison
Replies: 3
Views: 942

Re: In My Cell with Alicia on New Year's Eve

Bob
You have lost this line

Every night I sleep with you, Alyssa

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 22:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 982

Re: Paperfall

Bob

I wrote those lines in November.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
23 Jan 2020, 06:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 982

Re: Paperfall

Bob Absolutely thrilled that you wrote on the same theme. Sometimes I do not know if certain words are coined by poets and they cling to their copyright as their birthright,and it is at times like these I get reprimanded openly in forums. Actually seeing and reading your lines made me post this. The...
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 22:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 982

Re: Paperfall

B
Let me see if I can do something to the closing stanza.
S
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 21:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall
Replies: 6
Views: 982

Paperfall

V2 V2 Paperfall 1 The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. The Japanese girl is in the act of shredding A4 paper the same colour as her fluffy dress. 11 Lady! Looking so intense steadfast with scissors white cataract, that flows in a fall on the ground a thin trickle the eyes the path has ...
by SivaRamanathan
22 Jan 2020, 21:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Another New Year's Eve in Prison
Replies: 3
Views: 942

Re: Another New Year's Eve

Bob

Terrific opening line.

S
by SivaRamanathan
21 Jan 2020, 06:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 8
Views: 1541

Re: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.

Bob

Does chug-chugging fit,instead of' cognizing?' And also 'plied me with her recollections of the railways,' ;Plied 'is no right.Can you suggest the right word?

"iva
by SivaRamanathan
20 Jan 2020, 19:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Follow the Poem
Replies: 4
Views: 1146

Re: Follow the Poem

Perfect!
by SivaRamanathan
20 Jan 2020, 19:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 8
Views: 1541

Re: Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair.

V2 Black as the coal workers, the soot collects in her hair. Grandmother ran to pick up a fallen mango during her own wedding procession plied me with her recollections of the railways of engines that ran on coal fires and steam. At one time, a cycle was brought down from the train; a man went cycli...
by SivaRamanathan
19 Jan 2020, 20:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair.
Replies: 8
Views: 1541

Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair.

Black as the coal workers, soot collects in her hair. Grandmother ran to pick up a fallen mango during her own wedding procession. She plied me with her recollections of railways, of engines that ran on coal fires and steam. When a bike was brought down from the train, a man cycled in circles makin...
by SivaRamanathan
18 Jan 2020, 11:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Follow the Poem
Replies: 4
Views: 1146

Re: Follow the Poem

Bob

Read this.But I have to read a couple of more times,before I can say anything. I generally like it, but don't you think it is a little too long ? I am not saying something for the sake of saying,though. I will come back to it later.

Sivai
by SivaRamanathan
18 Jan 2020, 11:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 1635

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob,

It is Pongal season now. The15th was Pongal for the Sun God,The 16th Pongal for the cattle,17th the Sight-seeing Pongal.And thank you for your good heart.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
17 Jan 2020, 09:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, In Love
Replies: 8
Views: 1635

Re: Emily Dickinson, In Love

Bob
Nice imagery here.

as inevitable as pollen
or birdsong in mid-summer.


You need a full stop at the end of the poem, after 'loose.'

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