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by SivaRamanathan
22 May 2020, 10:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Her Heart was a Taxi Speeding Out of Town
Replies: 1
Views: 2081

Re: Overnight

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A well worked poem and there is a balance between the first half and the second half. Reads well. Lots of nice usages and the ending is perfect.Sorry I missed this .


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by SivaRamanathan
22 May 2020, 09:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: You Kissed Me
Replies: 4
Views: 3293

Re: You Kissed Me

This reads well now, because of the word arrangement in the line.
by SivaRamanathan
17 May 2020, 21:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: For Your Love
Replies: 11
Views: 7352

Re: For Your Love

The poem works well. Do you need the last line?

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by SivaRamanathan
13 May 2020, 22:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: You Kissed Me
Replies: 4
Views: 3293

Re: You Kissed Me

I suppose this is a Ghazal.It reads well, Bob. So...so...Simple.
by SivaRamanathan
13 May 2020, 21:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: What Does the Crown of the Temple Hold?
Replies: 0
Views: 2375

What Does the Crown of the Temple Hold?

V1 V1 In twelve years, another Kumbabishekam, the idols re-installed. rituals followed to the last unwritten word the Deity removed, immersed in grain Immersed in water one mandala each The pagodas filled with millets; One pagoda for each storey and that’s how the temple is built, copper sheets brou...
by SivaRamanathan
09 May 2020, 09:33
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
Replies: 4
Views: 4940

Re: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?

Thank you Michael and Bob,who made it possible with his initial editing.

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
08 May 2020, 09:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
Replies: 4
Views: 4841

Re: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?

A plateau is plain level ground.There is no depth where you can fall into.Sometimes I get a jolt in my sleep as if I am falling from the bed.That is why I have said falling from the plateau which is not possible,unless you fall while standing on the ground. From a distance it is impossible to guage ...
by SivaRamanathan
07 May 2020, 21:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
Replies: 4
Views: 4146

Re: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route

Bob
V1 is the edited version.Do I have to drop the drones?
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by SivaRamanathan
05 May 2020, 23:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
Replies: 4
Views: 4146

Insoiration is Taking The Other Route

V1 My son is with the batallion on Punjab border this side of Pakistan. Military jeeps roll on to the next northern state from Uttar Pradesh. The military are the potential buyers of drones. My son sends video on Whatapps., insect drones whizzing twenty kilometres into three different villages dropp...
by SivaRamanathan
05 May 2020, 23:29
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
Replies: 4
Views: 4940

Re: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?

'Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?' is my original,unpublished prose-poem,and I am not representing any other forum.My email id is sivakamivelliangriri@gmail.com. Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips? These past days my dreams have dropped me from the edge of Congress Maidaan. Know well that the Con...
by SivaRamanathan
05 May 2020, 22:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
Replies: 4
Views: 4841

Re: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?

An armchair traveller, owing to the Lockdown.
by SivaRamanathan
04 May 2020, 21:18
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
Replies: 4
Views: 4940

Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?

Michael

I am not representing any other group.

Siva Ramanathan
by SivaRamanathan
03 May 2020, 19:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
Replies: 4
Views: 4841

Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?

These past four days my dreams have dropped me from the edge of Congress Maidaan. Know well that the Congress Maidaan is a plateau. That lone tusker we saw once turns in a semicircle at the far end. My husband is bending down tying his shoe laces. My daughter yells, ’It is madness to get down from t...
by SivaRamanathan
23 Apr 2020, 22:39
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2020:
Replies: 2
Views: 3867

Re: Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2020:

Thank you Michael and Bob. You have been very patient and encouraged me by spending your time to edit and I am constantly learning.
by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 08:52
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 7
Views: 6470

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

I second Michael's nomination of Bob's 'Separation.'
by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 07:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Replies: 8
Views: 8080

Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.

Bob
Please read the version I have posted today in the IBPC thread.The 'Biking Cross-Country' poem.
Siva
by SivaRamanathan
01 Apr 2020, 07:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
Replies: 6
Views: 5530

Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti

I think you ccan add these two stanzas because they bring in the persona element and by so doing validate the last line.
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 21:42
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 7
Views: 6470

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

Biking Cross- Country, is my original unpublished poem and I am not representing any other forum. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com. "Biking Cross-Country" We rode past a rubber plantation where we couldn't breathe without inhaling the stench --worse than burning tyres emitting smoke pipes...
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 20:36
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Replies: 7
Views: 6470

Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:

I nominate Bob's 'Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti .'
by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 08:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 6988

Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)

I think the last stanza puts the poem onto a different level altogether.
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by SivaRamanathan
31 Mar 2020, 06:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 6988

Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)

Bob.thanks.I copy pasted from a web page instead of copy pasting from word.

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by SivaRamanathan
30 Mar 2020, 19:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
Replies: 6
Views: 5530

Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti

Ready enough to be nominated for March! (Or is it April?)

Siva
by SivaRamanathan
29 Mar 2020, 20:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Replies: 9
Views: 6988

Re: Paperfall (Reworked)

Paperfall- (plus an extended title) The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. Speechless, a Japanese girl sits outside the attic window shredding paper. Her performance of white cataract matches her fluffy gown. The sound of paper flows and forms a mound on the ground, as a tributary of pap...