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by Bernie01
11 Jun 2017, 08:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: True
Replies: 6
Views: 2566

Re: Love Story

Frank---


just for fun, here's Getting Drunk On a Plane....


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QrM39m22jH4



a narrative story....

bernie
by Bernie01
11 Jun 2017, 03:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Married Life
Replies: 7
Views: 2898

The Married Life

The Married Life All the sex and beauty I want. Hot shot. Wise Guy. Lucky duck, you could say. Strawberries in sun. The wife pins me with awards, ribbons like generals in Panama. I'm president in my own little burg. She draws me naked, her feet sweet as paid nights with a geisha. Heavy birds fly-in...
by Bernie01
10 Jun 2017, 04:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: True
Replies: 6
Views: 2566

Re: Love Story

L--- california greetings. a clear, fast moving narrative with a heart tug at the end. I think of Hemingway's short story, My Old Man. a boy (Joe) tells us about the father he idolized. on the final page, the father (Butler) is killed when his race horse falls on him. a friend named Gardner takes Jo...
by Bernie01
08 Jun 2017, 19:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The silk burns and with that
Replies: 5
Views: 2227

Re: The silk burns and with that

M--- this last comment and then i will shut up. how to make the fire real for the reader, i want to smell the smoke, feel the heat. details, perhaps: a homeless cat with his fur singed up to look like a wire brush. a wire frame used to model silks, now melted and heaped in the ashes. ancient storage...
by Bernie01
08 Jun 2017, 19:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bharata Advent
Replies: 5
Views: 2303

Re: Bharata Advent

Leuan--- mighty big thanks for your vote here. especially since you affirm the new verse---yeah that and should go the way of high button shoes. i champion rewriting for others here and especially for me. one great value of our Forum is the opportunity to compose for fellow writers as we journey eac...
by Bernie01
08 Jun 2017, 03:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bharata Advent
Replies: 5
Views: 2303

Re: Bharata Advent

S--- sorry, i posted an old IBPC poem with a new last verse: Ramadan by Bernard Henrie The Waters First Place, July 2015 Judged by C. Wade Bentley They shot a naked man howling in a barricaded house. He clipped his lawn into the night skilled as a doctor on graveyard shift putting in stitches. But I...
by Bernie01
07 Jun 2017, 07:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The silk burns and with that
Replies: 5
Views: 2227

Re: The silk burns and with that

M--- you bet. but a burned down shop? a threat to a local environment? let me know that in the pom...yes? follow a patron narrowly escaping... or follow a rising column of smoke... something, some detail or series of details to make this concrete, real. here is an old pom of mine, a tragedy i think....
by Bernie01
06 Jun 2017, 08:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The silk burns and with that
Replies: 5
Views: 2227

Re: The Silk Burns And With That

M--- not following the pom. plenty of word play, but to what end? suggest focus, compression. I suggest opening shock, arresting statement. Naked under my new silk saree, waiting to burn for a husband. The crimson red hot eyes watch, wait with hunger for a bridal night. Breaks out bright before dawn...
by Bernie01
04 Jun 2017, 23:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bharata Advent
Replies: 5
Views: 2303

Bharata Advent

Bharata Advent


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by Bernie01
04 Jun 2017, 23:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fay Wray
Replies: 8
Views: 3241

Re: Fay Wray

wrong post
by Bernie01
04 Jun 2017, 23:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fay Wray
Replies: 8
Views: 3241

delete

error please disregard
by Bernie01
03 Jun 2017, 06:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Biography
Replies: 10
Views: 4225

Re: Biography

Bob---

will experiment and remove that line about grammar---in my mind it related to the remarke about a villanelle.



M---only one line you didn't like? i got off lightly.


thanks to you both for your time and comments.


bernie
by Bernie01
03 Jun 2017, 06:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cowboy Novel in Japanese
Replies: 6
Views: 3111

Re: Cowboy Novel in Japanese

H---


good idea, i'll develop that POV.

thanks for your time and comment.


bernie
by Bernie01
03 Jun 2017, 06:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fay Wray
Replies: 8
Views: 3241

Re: Fay Wray

Bob: 5 stars for finding playful and wistful new subject matter for a poem. the poem helped me reconvene my drifting memories of the lady i remember as being King Kong's best friend. and in her voice, just great. First person added to the immediacy and intimacy. and this favorite line: in a dress th...
by Bernie01
03 Jun 2017, 05:20
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2017
Replies: 14
Views: 6609

Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2017

I nominate Frank's Frosted Garden for the June IBPC, 2017.


Bernie Henrie
by Bernie01
02 Jun 2017, 21:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Frosted Garden
Replies: 3
Views: 2074

Re: Frosted Garden

FRANK--- Palme d'Or----i'm crazy hot for this pom of yours. Frost has struck and the garden rests in a white dust, the lily frond has withstood the worst and the cotoneaster has dropped its leaves. A robin pecks at blackened berries. frost has struck- --i enjoy the action of those opening words. and...
by Bernie01
01 Jun 2017, 04:44
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2017
Replies: 14
Views: 6609

Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2017

Bernard Henrie mojave216bernard@aol.com Original poem and unpublished Not representing any other Forum. Autobiography Trace of Macchiato carelessly strung over the cherry lip of my wife's mouth. To fool me, you need more than a milk moustache. Hot shower water steeps in blank circling puddles, the t...
by Bernie01
31 May 2017, 05:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Biography
Replies: 10
Views: 4225

Re: Biography

Frank:

my goodness, thanks for that high praise.


Siva:

and a IBPC nod, i'm in an earthly heaven.


Michael:

will continue to review the close, for now, big thanks and yes to the IBPC nom.



bernie
by Bernie01
30 May 2017, 04:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Biography
Replies: 10
Views: 4225

Biography

Autobiography Trace of Macchiato carelessly strung over the cherry lip of my wife's mouth. To fool me, you need more than a milk moustache. Shower water circles the tub, a glazed spell colors her ballerina foot, naked buttocks drape like grammar in a poem. I forget the rhyme scheme of my villanelle...
by Bernie01
29 May 2017, 06:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Country
Replies: 3
Views: 1815

Re: My Country

hey Frank... pretty heavy, the hym. https://video.search.yahoo.com/yhs/search?fr=yhs-avast-001&hsimp=yhs-001&hspart=avast&p=o+thou+who+hast+redeemed+of+old#id=1&vid=160e8d23ef11a2c5afd7e7592824c091&action=click felt the need for compression and focus in this otherwise ambitious and exciting poem. Se...
by Bernie01
29 May 2017, 05:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Great Solar Eclipse
Replies: 7
Views: 2952

Re: The Great Solar Eclipse

S... Madras. yup. i think of Samina Ali's novel, Madras on Rainy Days. feeling, emotional tone just for asking....you see what i mean. she uses Hyderabad---your choice, but I'm just saying such references help ground a creative work.... i hope i'm clear, you have a very creative poem flowing here, i...
by Bernie01
25 May 2017, 09:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Great Solar Eclipse
Replies: 7
Views: 2952

Re: The Great Solar Eclipse

S--- love the subject, the free base roll, the imagination... like bob, not crazy about "waterfall." maybe the word "skein"? as a thin layer of skin forms a skein / waterfall over the eyes of the babe in the womb and I am born with a cataract, but none suspects till….. maybe, and i am born eyeless i...
by Bernie01
20 May 2017, 08:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Have Not Held Vishnu In My Arms.
Replies: 1
Views: 1309

Re: I Have Not Held Vishnu In My Arms.

Siva---


wonderful movement, literal images and culminating in wonder. great job.


bernie
by Bernie01
20 May 2017, 08:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lounging in a Garden
Replies: 4
Views: 2186

Re: Lounging in a Garden

bob....

so nice, just wonderful. no monkey editing from me.

bernie
by Bernie01
20 May 2017, 08:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Chestnut-backed Chickadees
Replies: 5
Views: 2190

Re: Chestnut-backed Chickadees

Bob... do i feel a need for a little roughness? the opening---avoiding that "like" word. They chase each other like kids on a playground, Chasing friendly and bravely at whir. this is enough chip for me: chip-chip- chip dripping from branches where they momentarily rest, banging branches, they rest ...

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