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by FranktheFrank
20 Oct 2019, 02:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: fugitive
Replies: 9
Views: 1430

Re: fugitive

I read it that he was jail bait
returning to see what goes.
But as you say it's too late.
I suggest a full stop after slowly,
and start new line after a gap of one line.
Feeling colder, she went inside
careful to latch the door
when . . .
Interesting plot.
by FranktheFrank
17 Oct 2019, 11:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Up on the Zambesi Copper Belt Escarpment
Replies: 4
Views: 1690

Re: Up on the Zambesi Copper Belt Escarpment

Thanks Bob and Judy
Appreciation always welcome Bob.

Judy a valued critique from you, thank you.
I will take your comments seriously and ponder
it does needs some tweaks. Yes, looking back Judy.
by FranktheFrank
16 Oct 2019, 18:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Neighbor
Replies: 10
Views: 1837

Re: The Neighbor

Hi Judy You've been here many years as a member I remember a post on some negative feedback on a poem of mine by someone else, you were very supportive. The person who wrote that negative comment (not that it's bad to give negative feedback) recently wrote via e-mail congratulating me for staying th...
by FranktheFrank
16 Oct 2019, 18:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Diary Conceit - Trump in the Papers Again
Replies: 0
Views: 1012

Diary Conceit - Trump in the Papers Again

“The American suspect in a crash that killed a British teenager no longer has diplomatic immunity after returning home, the British Foreign Office has said.” BBC News 13 October 2019 The parents of the late Harry Dunn meet Mr Trump, the newscaster reads out the information mournfully as if a crime h...
by FranktheFrank
11 Oct 2019, 14:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Up on the Zambesi Copper Belt Escarpment
Replies: 4
Views: 1690

Up on the Zambesi Copper Belt Escarpment

Our baby sons asleep in their cots dreaming of picnic bears. I listen to the shower run like rain on a corrugated roof, wait for her to join me, the mother of our children. Avocados drop and fruit bats flop, wood smoke wafts through the window grills in the purple of evening, charcoal fires pepper t...
by FranktheFrank
26 Sep 2019, 18:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Courtyard of the Big House, Mambalam
Replies: 11
Views: 2192

Re: The Courtyard of the Big House, Mambalam

This reads as a rich tapestry of Indian village life.
by FranktheFrank
20 Sep 2019, 00:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Haibun on the Bonny River (1966) - V2
Replies: 1
Views: 1094

Haibun on the Bonny River (1966) - V2

I write home to ‘s-Hertogenbosch on blue airmail paper a finger print of Old Spice. The river flows in flood, dismembered bodies float by; I can’t include that in my love letter. Grey river flowing Tarnished with the pall of death Tribal enmity Her cotton dresses hang in the wardrobe; I take one out...
by FranktheFrank
17 Sep 2019, 13:27
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Invasion
Replies: 2
Views: 1241

Invasion

“Having an appetite for knowledge and wanting to develop Is important, but I believe empowering people and giving them ownership and responsibility.” Warren Gatland The hot weather has dispersed in Kitakyūshū like the mountain mists the heat has drifted away warm days remain, mellow, yellow days. H...
by FranktheFrank
11 Sep 2019, 13:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Venus to Mars Stopover - At Shinsho-ji-Temple
Replies: 2
Views: 1640

Venus to Mars Stopover - At Shinsho-ji-Temple

“Rain falls on the city and runs down the gutters to empty into the sea without soaking the ground” ― Haruki Murakami Narita Spaceport Arrivals shines - miles of glass, moulded synthetic materials - vast areas of moving walkways, elevators, stairways, toilets, and concourses. Four hundred Space-Air...
by FranktheFrank
28 Aug 2019, 13:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: O Let us see Another Day
Replies: 2
Views: 987

O Let us see Another Day

O let us see another day! Bless us all this night, I pray, As to the sun we all shall bow and say good-bye – just for now Dylan Thomas, Eli Jenkins’ Prayer My darling waters her garden, the lawn parched with patches of grey, she’d dug down earlier to find no moisture there. We have never known it so...
by FranktheFrank
18 Aug 2019, 20:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Colour of Empire
Replies: 6
Views: 2408

Re: Colour of Empire

Siva is desperate to post a poem for this month,
She can't log in.
by FranktheFrank
18 Aug 2019, 11:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Colour of Empire
Replies: 6
Views: 2408

Re: Colour of Empire

Thank you for your input.
I agree about too borrowed.
by FranktheFrank
15 Aug 2019, 20:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Black Crow
Replies: 5
Views: 1372

Re: Black Crow

Excellent work Meena
by FranktheFrank
12 Aug 2019, 20:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Legality Whence?
Replies: 6
Views: 1617

Re: Legality Whence?

My apology, Meena.
by FranktheFrank
11 Aug 2019, 16:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings
Replies: 5
Views: 1630

Re: The Sudden Flapping Of Wings

Crows believe themselves to be superior to man. :)
by FranktheFrank
11 Aug 2019, 16:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Legality Whence?
Replies: 6
Views: 1617

Re: Legality Whence?

You make a valid point Siva the law condemns because none can keep it, faith gives hope. In the Christian sense, and I'm pleased you mention it, we are no longer under law, but grace. I think it is better to say: more valid than legal entities in the last s. You need that before 'go with the wind' f...
by FranktheFrank
11 Aug 2019, 09:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Two Matches
Replies: 2
Views: 1381

Re: Two Matches

You were honoured Billy
a special experience.
by FranktheFrank
10 Aug 2019, 19:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Two Matches
Replies: 2
Views: 1381

Two Matches

That’s what we were given. Some placed a pile of wood, lit the two matches and stood back awaiting a blaze as if a miracle was about to happen. Others carefully cut tinder, but if it was damp in any way, failure. The clever ones on a grey wet day hunted recesses: spider’s webs, fluff, dust, wood chi...
by FranktheFrank
06 Aug 2019, 01:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Living At The End Of The Road
Replies: 7
Views: 1868

Re: Living At The End Of The Road

Billy this is top drawer
I know you have been concerned at your muse lately
I think state tree has been said before but I still like it,
Van Gogh overused imo
Short and sweet, you could add a little more but very good.
by FranktheFrank
24 Jul 2019, 19:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Window Into the Mind
Replies: 1
Views: 1210

Window Into the Mind

After they'd moved overseas Sitske spent time drawing windows, month after month; each pane carefully drawn, one row of three 12 high by 8 wide, split into 4 panes 6 by 4. The lower rank the same as the top, set in rows. ‘Windows, Sitske pronounced emphatically, these are the windows’ ‘What about th...
by FranktheFrank
22 Jul 2019, 15:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Owl and the Blackbird
Replies: 10
Views: 2951

Re: The Owl and the Blackbird

Haha funny
enjoyed.
by FranktheFrank
16 Jul 2019, 23:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2
Replies: 6
Views: 2186

Re: Iron Ore Miner (1859) -V2

Thanks Billy
There is a slight change in voice as you say after the Sunday stanza.
N is one person and meandering through the past in his mind
or maybe telling a friend, or even justifying his actions
and his fears for the future.
by FranktheFrank
13 Jul 2019, 14:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Our Parents
Replies: 3
Views: 1226

Re: Our Parents

She was an office on a top floor,
and breathtaking views.
Perhaps: 'with breathtaking views'.

Suggest you promote her to full president:

Mom was too busy for us,
a furious presidential firefly.

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