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Thanks Billy
There is a slight change in voice as you say after the Sunday stanza.
N is one person and meandering through the past in his mind
or maybe telling a friend, or even justifying his actions
and his fears for the future.

She was an office on a top floor,
and breathtaking views.

Perhaps: 'with breathtaking views'.

Suggest you promote her to full president:

Mom was too busy for us,
a furious presidential firefly.

Thanks Siva, I have attempted to addressed Bob's concerns in S7 and shown progression. It really is about the constant hardships, fear of death and primeval conditions where a man finds comfort in the beauty of a woman's body and help in the most unlikeliest of places and thanks his maker for such a...

Point taken Bob, John studying is part of a larger story, shall dispense with it. 1831 refers to the Rebecca riots, problem is explaining vs telling, will have to think. The myriad details should all build up showing N's life and one glorious day in all that, quite wicked but nevertheless enthralling.

Iron Ore Miner (1859) Before Pen y Garn, at Trallwn we slept in barns and watched our children grow large eyes. We gleaned oats spilled by the ponies, and scavenged from the turnip slicer set for winter fodder At Dowlais we walked miles after five underground, time to dwell on home and hearth. The r...

Hinduism

Siva
You could drop 'their' in the title
with no adverse effects.

Mahaaprasthaana -The Great Journey “Death is a most natural experience, not to be feared. It is a quick transition from the physical world to the astral plane..." Satguru S'ivaya Subramuniyaswami, p. 99. I fear not hell nor of Satan I fear a woeful birth even a devilish mind brought on by the negati...

Eria
I prefer this to all that have gone before.
A pal is constantly reminding me of the power of first drafts.
I think I'll nominate this.

Old people are referred to by the young
as antiques Meena
cruel I know
but I don't care
I agree with Michael, priceless

My nominations:

1. Bob's: Traveling Mexico

2. Michael's: Getting Antique

3. Siva's: Newlyweds

If it is allowable to nominate more than three, then:

4. Meena's: Kali
5. Eira's: Patches Revenge

Pity Billy has pulled out.
Eira hasn't posted this month that I can see.

We suffered from drafts for years
since putting in central-heating
we don't suffer any more.

Glad you like, you weave it the way you want,
just a few ideas.

It's looking good, but you could cut again if you wished: The Madras Terrace house was just right for a family of three. But the bride's family insisted on an attached bathroom, so a store room was converted into a bathroom. the bride's family saw only the path leading to the house and copses of tre...

I don't know what you mean Siva,
If I want to keep a poem or comment
I use cut and past to Microsoft WORD
then cut and paste from WORD
to this forum if needed.

Are you familiar with 'cut' and 'paste' Siva?

I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.

I saved a draft.Now I don't know how to post it.

If not I can explain it or you can YouTube it.

Your poems are unique Michael it's difficult to know how to analyse and contribute appropriate comments. I see the pun on bulb and lamp, also unique and antique as regards aging the humour in fleecing a patina the pun on sheep we are His sheep - He is the Lamb and I see the wistful longing when we w...

We skirt Lauwersmeer in the DAF. Em cuddles up and hugs my arm. Rain clouds loom harbouring a storm. A westerly whips froth over the road and we swish through the water overflowing from the lake. Mama parks on the dike, a crowd lines the road to the sluices. Lunar pulls the tide and the Wadden conti...

i get it, the abuse of power
ever so small
used to terrorise the weak.
well done bob.

billy, this is good.

I suppose it is an oxymoron but it can be taken as unrequited love. Unrequited love is the worse kind and yet the best, another oxymoron. My own view is that we all carry unrequited love for the whole of our lives, a glimpse of a woman from passing train, the girl who moved away, the list goes on. B...

This is a much stronger start

perhaps: dissected prison corpses
the rest of s1 is good.

Oh dear.

This is funny Meena, we do spend too much
on our homes, hopefully we will
recoup our losses in time.

I take Siva's point, maybe 'partitioned racks' would be better.

Your choice.

L6 needs a space after the comma.

I love travelling Bob
the images have stayed with me for years
sometimes it is the people sometimes the environment or the food
sometimes the culture or all those together.
Your poem brings your experience into our domain.