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Marvellous response Maria
I am sure you will enhance our forum.

I am 76
broke my clavicle 3 weeks ago
i thought maybe this is it.
But it seems you have to put up with me for one more year
maybe more.

Welcome to the Writer's Block.
Neat poem.

I think you could keep S1, but maybe dispence with Before picking up a hammer, Agree with Michael there are equally as good statues around from antiquity, nevertheless he was a genius (Michelangelo). Michelangelo actually bought a flawed slab of granite, it had a split from the centre up to the mid ...

We can learn a lot from the 3rd world Bob.

I understand Siva, it is your poem
and your preferences.

Some suggestions Meena if you want them: I hear bleating laden with fear from a nearby temple Sounds that rip at the heart Perceiving the ritual I stay where I am heart pounding. The bathed goat approaches the altar with a garland of roses A priest of Kali performs the puja, lights camphor, the anim...

Agree with Siva lovely to read.
Michael about sums it up.
Well done, you continue
on a roll Bob.

You could further refine the title should you wish to: Traditionally Newlywed Couples Start Married Life in the Groom's Parents House Disagree with Michael on this, sorry Michael: I think you mean bathroom, so suggest: The bride's family insisted on an attached bathroom not just a bath placed in a v...

I like the poem Michael seems to have summed up the intent well. I feel it could benefit with pruning extraneous words. For instance you don't need 'Indian' in indian village, Mayan children gives the clue, the definite article could be left out, its a Mayan village so only Mayan children live there...

62 isn't old Michael
76 isn't old either
82 is oldish
92 is getting on for old
The oldest British citizen died last week age 112
that is old.

If you don't mind me saying.

Neat Michael. There is a lot of doctrine in this poem for more than meets the eye at first. It has bothered many the though that Cain and his brothers had to take wives from their sisters, there are alternative theories not in the bible, but possible and there is the supernatural. I take pleasure in...

you're welcome bob

i didn't know such practices still went on in India.
it is informative and we are lead to search for terms such as
puja. this is your strength Meena, and Siva too, to write
of an alien culture, something we can only touch briefly.

you are welcome Siva

Changed the title, more apt I think.
Reads up to 1743, amazing.

Siva

some queries some suggestions for your perusal:

try groom for boy in title

storeroom was converted to a bathroom

hollow room?

many many, why not many many many, or just many

carries sea salted air or sprayed sea salted air

self sufficient kitchen?

how it looked like her mother's house

sweet romance bob,
some exciting scenarios.

'our moment' is a good close,

not sure you need 'near the airport'

Final Version.

i agree bob, i don't like most of the collage stuff the way i do it is to leave the original text in feint i can't do that here, the system does not allow. and it is very limiting, but for historical work it seems to work for me. i am only recently getting to grips with it and it is allowable to add...

hi bob, the daily mail is printing copies of it's new of D-day landings of 75 years ago. every day they print 4 pages of news from the invasion front. my three fold reasons 1. to commemorate the landings of the allied armies, usa, uk and Canada 2. to give American readers a taste of how the brits ha...

v4
It's amazing that over 1300 reads in one month.

version 2 Thurs. 6th June 2019

Bill Downs, Bayeux Dispatch, A Badge of Freedom for the Resistance Warriors, Daily Mail, p. 2, Saturday, 10th June 1944 Hour by hour The first complete picture of life in France since the time of Dunkirk emerges in cables from the invasion front. The story to date, told by the Allied team of war cor...

Never Forget This Man British Hero I’ll Never Forget Rex North, A British Hero I’ll Never Forget, War Correspondent, Daily Mail Friday, June 9. 1944 From Aboard Her Majesty's Ship Belfast This is a story about of the magnificent spirit and endurance of our men in France. We were off the French coas...