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by BobBradshaw
26 Oct 2019, 08:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 13
Views: 2257

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Great details...I could quote from anywhere... one of your finest
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 23:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Planters Moon
Replies: 7
Views: 1743

Re: Planters Moon

What a wonderful bleak poem! Love the imagery, the topknot, the drunken sky, etc. Terrific close after setting it up with the farmer who has lost his wife and children....
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 23:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Joseph Haydn
Replies: 8
Views: 1363

Re: Joseph Haydn

No, either one is fine. Thank you, Ken....
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 20:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) - V2
Replies: 5
Views: 1871

Re: A Sparrow Found (1917)

Yes, quite good. I would cut the "divine sound...." line. A well developed mood piece....
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 08:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Joseph Haydn
Replies: 8
Views: 1363

Re: Joseph Haydn

Thanks, Billy....you're right.
Judy, thank you too. I've taken up one of your suggestions: "After all, one must eat."
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 08:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Could Only Write This Today
Replies: 10
Views: 2321

Re: I Could Only Write This Today

Terrific poem, Billy....kudos
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 04:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Across The River
Replies: 10
Views: 2300

Re: Across The River

Good one...what Ken said
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 00:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Smelling the Roses
Replies: 9
Views: 1363

Re: Smelling the Roses

It helps, and poetry is usually best when it’s a team effort
by BobBradshaw
25 Oct 2019, 00:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Joseph Haydn
Replies: 8
Views: 1363

Re: Haydn

Thanks, Ken.... I have change you to “he” instead of you and then I have Joseph and Haydn available as well.
by BobBradshaw
24 Oct 2019, 21:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Joseph Haydn
Replies: 8
Views: 1363

Joseph Haydn

Joseph Haydn School thrashings were regular, expected, like prayers on Sunday. Hunger was a constant, like the quivering stars. Joseph took singing jobs on off days, because food was proffered to the musicians, but when his voice, like old paint, began to crack, he was kicked out of Choir School— si...
by BobBradshaw
24 Oct 2019, 21:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Maze I Am In
Replies: 9
Views: 1591

Re: A Maze I Am In

I like the 1st version better...
by BobBradshaw
24 Oct 2019, 20:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Smelling the Roses
Replies: 9
Views: 1363

Re: Smelling the Roses

I don't think it's a cliche...it starts with a cliche and finds a new way of expressing its idea...I like the humor and the voice in this
by BobBradshaw
24 Oct 2019, 07:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
Replies: 10
Views: 1590

Re: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(

I like the tow rope image....I would stick "Somewhere" before "someone else's...."....
by BobBradshaw
23 Oct 2019, 23:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 1978

Re: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store

Thx, Ken...and thanks Poetema
by BobBradshaw
23 Oct 2019, 22:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 1978

Re: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store

I have made some changes and cuts, suggested by Poetema....I agree with her that cutting would help get through the poem faster, to maintain a fast pace...any idea on what you would cut? Ideas are appreciated...thx, Bob
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 22:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 1978

Re: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store

Thanks, appreciate it
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 20:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Neighbors
Replies: 9
Views: 1487

Re: Neighbors

Oh this is sweet, its warmth enveloping me....I love this...my favorite of yours so far.
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 20:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Pay At Your End
Replies: 6
Views: 1136

Re: Pay At Your End

I like the flow of this one, meenas....nice one
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 20:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 1978

Re: Goldfish in a Pet Store

Thanks, Ken. Meenas, too...where would you tighten, meenas? I would appreciate your suggestions. Best
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 09:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store
Replies: 13
Views: 1978

Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store

V2: Poet as Goldfish in a Pet Store All day I make my rounds, sweeping the water into eddies as kids and their mothers bounce in from the sidewalk, the kids as eager as finches on the first warm day of spring, chatting and nodding their little heads. The shop is as colorful as a birthday: canaries, ...
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 09:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Someone's Hallelujah (revised(
Replies: 10
Views: 1590

Re: Someone's Hallelujah

Beautiful....your deft touch is at play again in this poem.
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 04:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Armageddon Day
Replies: 6
Views: 1209

Re: Armageddon Day

A third stanza making the close more personal would help.
by BobBradshaw
22 Oct 2019, 04:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: How Far The River
Replies: 6
Views: 1508

Re: How Far The River

Did you mean conscience instead of conscious? If not the line is confusing. Really like the last image of banks lifted high as skirts.

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