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- 06 Dec 2015, 02:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Her Secret
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16048
Re: Her Secret
hi Siva--- me i cut this: I have only heard of her from my mother. '' Don't hoard your secrets they will rot open the lid, they will disperse this is the secret of preserving that secret.'' Anything closed and kept closed will rot, will rot this is just to closely reasoned, it does not carry my emot...
- 06 Dec 2015, 02:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cenotaph
- Replies: 6
- Views: 12722
Re: Cenotaph
Fred---
...would avoid,,,
We must become as little children
to understand the Kingdom of God.
the involved narrative is clear, but is tinged with advocacy. the challenge, to speak in religious terms while remaining poetic.
bernie
...would avoid,,,
We must become as little children
to understand the Kingdom of God.
the involved narrative is clear, but is tinged with advocacy. the challenge, to speak in religious terms while remaining poetic.
bernie
- 06 Dec 2015, 01:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wild yellow daisies
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10342
Re: Wild yellow daisies
B---
I like Siva's suggested version.
bernie
I like Siva's suggested version.
bernie
- 05 Dec 2015, 10:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wild yellow daisies
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10342
Re: Wild yellow daisies
Billy:
i like this....would see if the children can be more involved....coats flap open, caps blow sideways...
their voices tangle together....dreams...rise ....
but a very nice feel to this poem...a drowsy, dream like mood.
bernie
i like this....would see if the children can be more involved....coats flap open, caps blow sideways...
their voices tangle together....dreams...rise ....
but a very nice feel to this poem...a drowsy, dream like mood.
bernie
- 05 Dec 2015, 10:20
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: IBPC Poems of the Year: May 2014 - April 2015
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7558
Re: IBPC Poems of the Year: May 2014 - April 2015
Billy:
just fabulous. great recognition for a great poem.
bernie
just fabulous. great recognition for a great poem.
bernie
- 05 Dec 2015, 10:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wizz Jet Air
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9091
Re: Wizz Jet Air
alas---
these whimsical observations are too few to save the poem from a travel magazine like feeling...
can the poem turn a little of that journalism into more poetic observation?
bernie
these whimsical observations are too few to save the poem from a travel magazine like feeling...
can the poem turn a little of that journalism into more poetic observation?
bernie
- 05 Dec 2015, 10:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Outside Roosevelt Elementary
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11154
Re: Outside Roosevelt Elementary
hi---- for me, less nature, more interaction the children and the bees. here is what a novelist did: An excerpt from Dorian Gray by Oscar Wilde “The studio was filled with the rich odor of roses, and when the light summer wind stirred amidst the trees of the garden… The sullen murmur of the bees sho...
- 05 Dec 2015, 09:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: the blessings of providence
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12268
Re: the blessings of providence
Billy: i like the poem here: for the moon cannot go on without me ---- ...those motherless days with no name walking crowded streets invisible to the ones who had places to go i searched alone until i named myself would consider fewer verses, more focus. less telling. otherwise, an ambitious poem ch...
- 05 Dec 2015, 09:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Road
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5197
Re: The Road
hi Billy---- nicely developed, just enough show info to build a tension, a curiosity about the narrator. i wonder what happens if several specific locations are referenced, remarks about weather, old folks on rockers, kids waving. (got your note...thanks. health issues again, looking better now.) be...
- 08 Oct 2015, 07:04
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2015:
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11978
Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2015:
Violin and White Shoulders Birds of some kind circle on updrafts holding wings like ice skaters on a winter pond, there must be something wrong with them. They fluoresce, turn blue with cold. below a corn laden barge creeps on the flaxen river. God opens the robe of my sweetheart and ladles on colo...
- 05 Oct 2015, 20:02
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2015:
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11978
Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2015:
Michael---
i would love to represent our Forum in the current IBPC.
Bernard Henrie
mojave216bernard@aol.com
The poem is my original work and unpublished anywhere else.
I am not representing any other Forum.
bernie henrie
i would love to represent our Forum in the current IBPC.
Bernard Henrie
mojave216bernard@aol.com
The poem is my original work and unpublished anywhere else.
I am not representing any other Forum.
bernie henrie
- 04 Oct 2015, 10:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bare Shoulders and Violin
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11286
Re: Bare Shoulders and Violin
Billy and Frank---
good to have our club meeting here, for a change.
Birds of some kind
circle on updrafts
holding wings
like ice skaters
on a winter pond.
A corn laden barge
creeps the flaxen river.
a radio plays music
and offers the news.
will see what to do.
thanks all.
bernie
good to have our club meeting here, for a change.
Birds of some kind
circle on updrafts
holding wings
like ice skaters
on a winter pond.
A corn laden barge
creeps the flaxen river.
a radio plays music
and offers the news.
will see what to do.
thanks all.
bernie
- 29 Sep 2015, 21:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: at the back of our minds
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5219
Re: at the back of our minds
Billy---
a poem that takes no prisoners, that offers no false shelter in sentimentality---i like the poem just fine.
especially the chances taken by that string of long words in the final verse, as though the poem defies us not to like it and find melody in the unwashed dents and gaps.
bernie
a poem that takes no prisoners, that offers no false shelter in sentimentality---i like the poem just fine.
especially the chances taken by that string of long words in the final verse, as though the poem defies us not to like it and find melody in the unwashed dents and gaps.
bernie
- 19 Sep 2015, 08:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bare Shoulders and Violin
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11286
Bare Shoulders and Violin
Revised Version: (Michael, if you like this poem feel free to edit or otherwise amend. I trust your judgment. the former poem of yours i remember and liked very much at the time.....bernie) Birds of some kind circle on updrafts holding wings like ice skaters on a winter pond, there must be something...
- 02 Sep 2015, 21:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Noises in the Background
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7272
Re: Noises in the Background
Siva---
loved your comment.
bernie
loved your comment.
bernie
- 02 Sep 2015, 21:02
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming September IBPC 2015:
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11523
Re: Upcoming September IBPC 2015:
Michael----
very sorry, The Waters is using another poem of mine i had forgotten about.
that poem you mentioned, Thought Rhymes with Caught is terrific.
bernie
very sorry, The Waters is using another poem of mine i had forgotten about.
that poem you mentioned, Thought Rhymes with Caught is terrific.
bernie
- 02 Sep 2015, 20:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Still Life with Husband and Wife
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10839
Re: Still Life with Husband and Wife
S---
made that change. thanks for the edit and for reading this poem.
J---
conversation among friends sounds like a poem in itself.
thanks for stopping to converse with me, a stranger, but i hope now a friend.
bernie
made that change. thanks for the edit and for reading this poem.
J---
conversation among friends sounds like a poem in itself.
thanks for stopping to converse with me, a stranger, but i hope now a friend.
bernie
- 02 Sep 2015, 06:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Still Life with Husband and Wife
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10839
Still Life with Husband and Wife
New owners claim our room, nail tankards over the fireplace like killed mallards. Toss the moss green davenport, say goodbye to the linoleum curled along the corner. Au revoir to the wrinkled lunch sack carried to the empty football stands. Box the pinafore and windup clock, close cans of half-used ...
- 02 Sep 2015, 06:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Noises in the Background
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7272
Re: Noises in the Background
Siva---
i especially like the title.
the narrative flow is smooth, yet inventive.
good poem.
bernie
i especially like the title.
the narrative flow is smooth, yet inventive.
good poem.
bernie
- 02 Sep 2015, 05:56
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming September IBPC 2015:
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11523
Re: Upcoming September IBPC 2015:
hi---sorry, just saw this note.
the poem is my original work and i am not representing any other board.
Beach Closure has not been printed in any magazine.
mojave216bernard@aol.com
the poem is my original work and i am not representing any other board.
Beach Closure has not been printed in any magazine.
mojave216bernard@aol.com
- 10 Aug 2015, 20:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Beach Closure
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6926
Beach Closure
I saw you in yellow, Doris Day walking shorts, beach umbrellas scattered on the sand colorful as students lined-up for first day of school. My mind was empty. I forgot the rhyme scheme for a villanelle, or how I found a photo of you leaning from a second floor window, a gypsum patched frame the whit...
- 07 Aug 2015, 21:20
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming August IBPC 2015:
- Replies: 8
- Views: 12943
Re: Upcoming August IBPC 2015:
yes, if not too late.... Private Life For fun and fully clothed she throws herself like a suicide into the sea, a foaming surf slaps her chest, knocks against her hips. In the dining room she moves table to table greeting strangers; avian beauty, silver lip gloss, long fold of brunette hair over one...
- 04 Aug 2015, 10:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Private Life
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7542
Re: A Private Life
M---
yes it's me, Bernie....alias Mojave.
adopted your edit, great stuff. thanks so much.
bernie
yes it's me, Bernie....alias Mojave.
adopted your edit, great stuff. thanks so much.
bernie
- 30 Jul 2015, 13:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Private Life
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7542
A Private Life
A Private Life For fun and fully clothed she throws herself like a suicide into the sea, a foaming surf slaps her chest, knocks against her hips. In the dining room she moves table to table greeting strangers; avian beauty, silver lip gloss, long fold of brunette hair over one shoulder. She gathers...
- 30 Jul 2015, 11:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "whelmed, over with remembering" - a haibun found . . .
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8987
Re: "over with remembering" - a haibun found . . .
wonderful collaboration...you picked a great partner.
bernie
bernie