B
'not heavenly'
not
'that tempts the angels'
Use something pertaining to the earth.We do not know for sure if angels will prefer soup or that they would need to eat anything.
s
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- 28 Mar 2014, 05:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
- Replies: 8
- Views: 18773
- 27 Mar 2014, 13:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
- Replies: 8
- Views: 18773
Re: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
B
Frank is right.The 'heavenly' says nothing and sari is singular.The rest is okay.So it is the chairs that are white?
sit in freshly rinsed
plastic chairs white as the Ponticherry
train bringing Europeans to the sea.
tourist arriving on the Ponticherry train.
What are the last two lines?
S
Frank is right.The 'heavenly' says nothing and sari is singular.The rest is okay.So it is the chairs that are white?
sit in freshly rinsed
plastic chairs white as the Ponticherry
train bringing Europeans to the sea.
tourist arriving on the Ponticherry train.
What are the last two lines?
S
- 26 Mar 2014, 20:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Blue Whirled Out Of Each Printed Page
- Replies: 0
- Views: 4743
The Blue Whirled Out Of Each Printed Page
The Blue Whirled Out Of Each Printed Page Blue whirled out of each black printed page. Nobody knew the exact meaning. Everyone's blue became bold and tin soldiered. Churning as in the amritha. Only the snakes churned out each one's conception. As the drama enacted, even those who sat through did som...
- 25 Mar 2014, 17:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Editing
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12788
Re: Editing
I am posting three poems that were edited by my poet friend and mentor Donald Nigli their mind, fine tuned to the Dhivya Prasadam. Dieu culinaire (God’s culinary)/ Nourriture divine (Divine food) or Dhivya Prasadam All the men folk knew ( of) the thin bare shoulders. Vol. 25, November 2012 POETRY | ...
- 24 Mar 2014, 21:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Bringing Up Children
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12532
Re: Bringing Up Children
meenas
I find this poem quite preachy.I do hope you will change your style of writing and your topics are so 'didactic'.
Siva
I find this poem quite preachy.I do hope you will change your style of writing and your topics are so 'didactic'.
Siva
- 24 Mar 2014, 21:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Disappearance of Deficit
- Replies: 3
- Views: 10402
Re: Disappearance of Deficit
meenas Welcome to the group. I think your lines are archaic and you have a round about way to tell a simple thing. I am hoping this is the only poem you have in this style.I also find a lot of gerunds.And your attempt to painstakingly rhyme is quite laborious. The only one line that is a silver lini...
- 24 Mar 2014, 17:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Editing
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12788
Editing
You offered words like 'Dieu Culinaire,' 'Nourriture Divine,' I scooped up Diviyya Prasadam; Payash is the warm milk that filled our cups. ‘All the men folk knew the thin bare shoulders’ and you inserted connectors like,’of’ and a sea of meanings changed. We ate out of your casseroles, you showed me...
- 23 Mar 2014, 07:13
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Suggested Nomination For The April IBPC Poems
- Replies: 0
- Views: 5088
Suggested Nomination For The April IBPC Poems
Michael
Can you please nominate (request) Billy,'in an open field' and Mojave's "Entrepreneur In Tamilnadu.' for the March IBPC.
Siva
Can you please nominate (request) Billy,'in an open field' and Mojave's "Entrepreneur In Tamilnadu.' for the March IBPC.
Siva
- 23 Mar 2014, 07:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
- Replies: 6
- Views: 15625
Re: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
mojave
Thanks for the coaching.
Siva
Thanks for the coaching.
Siva
- 23 Mar 2014, 07:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
- Replies: 8
- Views: 18773
Re: Entrepreneur of Tamil Nadu
mojave Very picturesque.I will have to read this a few more times and I like reading it.This 'in my freshly rinsed plastic chairs' made me smile.From the pat declarative 'I've just opened my second restaurant.' these second hand chairs are realistic.So you have covered all the five senses.The 'sight...
- 22 Mar 2014, 07:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: in an open field
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12637
Re: in an open field
Billy
I have been reading this poem,almost every day.It is just right,nothing you can add or take away.
Siva
I have been reading this poem,almost every day.It is just right,nothing you can add or take away.
Siva
- 04 Mar 2014, 21:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
- Replies: 6
- Views: 15625
Re: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
frank
Meena Kandaswamy is a bold and noteworthy poet.
Thanks for the tuition.I agree with you.It is always that my poems have to be edited.
My father said: her spellings are ingenious and her grammar confounding and her writing
sadly passes off as good poetry.
Siva
Meena Kandaswamy is a bold and noteworthy poet.
Thanks for the tuition.I agree with you.It is always that my poems have to be edited.
My father said: her spellings are ingenious and her grammar confounding and her writing
sadly passes off as good poetry.
Siva
- 03 Mar 2014, 21:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 15323
Re: Introspection
frank Thank you for all the work you have put into this poem.You have definitely spent more time with it, reading and deliberating on it and I feel ashamed for abandoning it with a cursory edit. Michael Thanks as usual.You are a minimalist.And I am verbose.I am learning a lot in this group. better t...
- 03 Mar 2014, 21:02
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
- Replies: 3
- Views: 8664
Re: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
''Not A Natural Disorder'' is my original unpublished poem and I am not representing any other group. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com Not A Natural Disaster Lounging in a racing Lancer I see distant trees darken with night, a bracket of serial bulbs - coming closer - the outline of a lon...
- 03 Mar 2014, 05:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
- Replies: 6
- Views: 15625
Re: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
frank
This is not my poem.It is a poem by one of our youngsters,Meena Kandaswamy.I posted it only to show you that the English we use is our own,very Indian. It need not correspond with the English used elsewhere.
Siva
This is not my poem.It is a poem by one of our youngsters,Meena Kandaswamy.I posted it only to show you that the English we use is our own,very Indian. It need not correspond with the English used elsewhere.
Siva
- 02 Mar 2014, 20:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
- Replies: 6
- Views: 15625
A poem by Meena Kandaswamy for dyerfrank and Spizolli
MULLIGATAWNY DREAMS anaconda. candy. cash. catamaran. cheroot. coolie. corundum. curry. ginger. mango. mulligatawny. patchouli. poppadom. rice. tatty. teak. vetiver. i dream of an english full of the words of my language. an english in small letters an english that shall tire a white man’s tongue an...
- 01 Mar 2014, 19:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 15323
Re: Introspection
Michael
Thank you.I will keep this.I was just about to change the car to 'Lancer.'
Siva
Thank you.I will keep this.I was just about to change the car to 'Lancer.'
Siva
- 01 Mar 2014, 13:10
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
- Replies: 3
- Views: 8664
Re: Upcoming IBPC March 2014:
I recommend
Michael’s "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
abhrksht A death in the Family (as edited by Michael)
for the March 2014 IBPC
Siva
Michael’s "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
abhrksht A death in the Family (as edited by Michael)
for the March 2014 IBPC
Siva
- 01 Mar 2014, 05:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 15323
Re: Introspection
Dyerfrank
A big thanks.
Siva
A big thanks.
Siva
- 28 Feb 2014, 21:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Introspection
- Replies: 7
- Views: 15323
Introspection
Final Final Edit Not A Natural Disaster Lounging in a racing Lancer I see distant trees darken with night, a bracket of serial bulbs - coming closer - the outline of a long hooked nose; suddenly lights magnified on the mountain blazing a 'v' in the running hand, and I respond, "How breathtakingly be...
- 28 Feb 2014, 10:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10334
Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
Michael
I nominate Michael's "reacting to Hoffman's last scene" for March IBPC.
Siva
I nominate Michael's "reacting to Hoffman's last scene" for March IBPC.
Siva
- 28 Feb 2014, 06:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 15157
Re: A death in the Family (Poem: Need Reviews)
Michael
I nominate, 'A Death In The Family,' for the march IBPC.I like how you have worked on this poem.
Siva
I nominate, 'A Death In The Family,' for the march IBPC.I like how you have worked on this poem.
Siva
- 22 Feb 2014, 06:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10334
Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"
Michael
This has to be read several times and understood at all levels.I am doing just that.
Siva
This has to be read several times and understood at all levels.I am doing just that.
Siva
- 04 Feb 2014, 12:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: a floorshow on the kitchen table
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7571
Re: a floorshow on the kitchen table
Michael
Please send this poem for the February IBPC. I nominated,and since nobody has seconded the nomination, you will have to post.
Siva
Please send this poem for the February IBPC. I nominated,and since nobody has seconded the nomination, you will have to post.
Siva
- 03 Feb 2014, 20:40
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2014:
- Replies: 1
- Views: 6407
Re: Upcoming February IBPC 2014:
I would like to submit my unpublished poem,'Dear Mother-In-Law', for the February IBPC. I am not representing any other group.My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com Dear Mother-In-Law You certainly knew when death came near you. You spoke about the old dark woman who pulled your hand. You shooe...