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by Kenneth2816
28 Nov 2017, 22:02
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming December IBPC 2017:
Replies: 21
Views: 38296

Re: Upcoming December IBPC 2017:

I was unaware Billy removed his poem
by Kenneth2816
28 Nov 2017, 10:07
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming December IBPC 2017:
Replies: 21
Views: 38296

Re: Upcoming December IBPC 2017:

I second Braeburn Tree
Ditto on Summer Cruises

Billys Begonias and Glass
by Kenneth2816
25 Nov 2017, 17:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Popular Summer Cruises from $799.00
Replies: 14
Views: 22640

Re: Popular Summer Cruises from $799.00

Bernie. I think your use of imagery here, and the motion in the poem (birds turning, shiip umbering, rippling thinderheads, etc) bring the poem to life, like a painting.


I like sultry wives *and they slways are * no matter.

Same with green breezes..

I csn see this, feel it. Nicely done
by Kenneth2816
23 Nov 2017, 06:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sparrows Sing (revision)
Replies: 14
Views: 23703

Re: The Sparrows Sing (revision)

I felt like youd tweak this....fine job.
by Kenneth2816
23 Nov 2017, 06:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl
Replies: 8
Views: 16770

Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

Thank you, Bernie. My wife suffered severe PTSD from multiple traumas. She did all she could.
After four years, Im just now able to write about it.

Im fine. I've made my peace
by Kenneth2816
22 Nov 2017, 21:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl
Replies: 8
Views: 16770

Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

Siva...good comments. Thank you...
Lol at Aspirina
by Kenneth2816
22 Nov 2017, 17:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl
Replies: 8
Views: 16770

Re: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

Gracy. The ending could be anyone
But it was someone close to N who
committed suicide. N wishes to have been able to prevent it. Sorry to be so blunt.No other way to explain though.

Thank you for reading and commenting
by Kenneth2816
21 Nov 2017, 03:04
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Poems that placed for October IBPC 2017:
Replies: 1
Views: 7282

Re: Poems that placed for October IBPC 2017:

Have to say Im surprised.
by Kenneth2816
19 Nov 2017, 07:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Kanchipuram Saree. (Revised)
Replies: 18
Views: 34758

Re: The Kanchipuram Saree

I concur, this was some of your best ive read.
by Kenneth2816
19 Nov 2017, 03:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alien
Replies: 5
Views: 8281

Re: Alien

Eh. OK.
by Kenneth2816
18 Nov 2017, 19:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Notes From The Revolution
Replies: 4
Views: 8293

Notes From The Revolution

On the 100th Anniversary Eleven time zones in Russia, each with its own small sun. No one knows the hour of the day or recalls the time the last blood moon hung in the spires of St. Petersburg. To the east, washer women still rise up, set fire to kettle, boil their black babushkas, wring them to sti...
by Kenneth2816
18 Nov 2017, 19:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alien
Replies: 5
Views: 8281

Re: Alien

Bernie out of respect for you, I removed that line.
My memory " I am the oldest living person I know by first name." Its possible i picked it up unconsciously.
by Kenneth2816
17 Nov 2017, 23:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alien
Replies: 5
Views: 8281

Re: Alien

Its good to see you back Bernie. I do recall that stellar line.
by Kenneth2816
17 Nov 2017, 07:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hotel India
Replies: 15
Views: 22733

Re: Hotel India

I love poetry like this, exotic locales, bit of the vernacular and a mysterious woman.
by Kenneth2816
17 Nov 2017, 03:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Alien
Replies: 5
Views: 8281

Alien

A pump in his pocket keeps him alive, bilge of old sea water from a dying planet. He drops a quarter in the meter each hour. They opened his chest once. The doctor didn't like what he saw, so he removed what mattered: a silver coin, old pocket watch, and a portrait of the Queen. Each was examined, p...
by Kenneth2816
16 Nov 2017, 10:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sparrows Sing (revision)
Replies: 14
Views: 23703

Re: The Sparrows Sing

Clever but not gimmicky. I enjoy poems that dont give it all away in the beginning. We know our pets are part human and they know we are part animal, and thus we bond. You bring that to light in this piece. I dont see anything i would suggest by way or revision, from what ive come to know of you, th...
by Kenneth2816
16 Nov 2017, 09:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl
Replies: 8
Views: 16770

Revisionist Lullaby For The Mad Girl

In which Van Gogh painting with razors, gives his ear to poor Ludwig, coatless and mad in the cold Vienna rain. MC Escher's hand drawing a hand drawing, completes the scherzo of Schubert's "Unfinished Symphony" in triple meter time. The scissor-pincer hands of Dali's melting clock cuts off the tails...
by Kenneth2816
16 Nov 2017, 02:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nuns Hover
Replies: 11
Views: 16551

Re: The Nuns are Coming

Thank you. Its not competition material.Hopefullt the Block will pick up and we will have three good picks.

Me , im thinking of taking a break.
by Kenneth2816
15 Nov 2017, 21:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nuns Hover
Replies: 11
Views: 16551

Re: The Nuns are Coming

Frank this is quite a romp and extremely well written.

I nominate it for IBPC.
by Kenneth2816
15 Nov 2017, 10:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Reverie (tweaked slightly)
Replies: 10
Views: 21038

Re: Reverie

See? Its perfectly clear to Bernie.
by Kenneth2816
14 Nov 2017, 05:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Reverie (tweaked slightly)
Replies: 10
Views: 21038

Re: Reverie

Gracy I would never withdraw a poem on the basis of one critique. It's your poem.