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- 04 Mar 2018, 05:22
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 29
- Views: 56115
Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
Good Luck Eira
- 03 Mar 2018, 22:03
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 29
- Views: 56115
Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
I second Eiras poem as she has written it
- 27 Feb 2018, 22:34
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 29
- Views: 56115
Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
I second Lagos
- 27 Feb 2018, 19:31
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Congratulations Bob-Swallows of Capistrano Published
- Replies: 1
- Views: 8291
Re: Congratulations Bob-Swallows of Capistrano Published
Well deserved Bob, Congrats
- 27 Feb 2018, 00:47
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 29
- Views: 56115
Re: Upcoming March IBPC 2018:
Heart With No Permanent Address
Bernie
Bernie
- 16 Feb 2018, 17:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sinful Woman
- Replies: 6
- Views: 9826
Re: The Sinful Woman
It is plainly told. That doesn't make it a bad poem
- 16 Feb 2018, 14:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sinful Woman
- Replies: 6
- Views: 9826
Re: The Sinful Woman
I think you should expand this to verse 48, include her washing his feet with her hair, one of the most poignant descriptions of devotion in the Bible.
It isn't bad as is, but I see a missed opportunity. Nicely done.
It isn't bad as is, but I see a missed opportunity. Nicely done.
- 14 Feb 2018, 07:28
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: ssession, I think we were hanging in there and
- Replies: 0
- Views: 8239
Re: ssession, I think we were hanging in there and
Can someone please block this asshat?
- 12 Feb 2018, 00:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Heart With No Permanent Address
- Replies: 10
- Views: 18978
Re: Heart With No Permanent Address
Nom this for March IBPC
- 12 Feb 2018, 00:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Herring
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8752
Re: Herring
Bring this into present tense Bob.Let us visit it with you.
- 12 Feb 2018, 00:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Middle Age
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7738
Re: Middle Age
Nice imagery. I esp. love "pagan crows" preceding Alexander
His horse was named Bucephalus, conjoined with the rental horse.
Then nailed mallards as to faded lawn ducks, a commentary for the newly weds on how most marriages end up.
You're always as good with what is not said.
His horse was named Bucephalus, conjoined with the rental horse.
Then nailed mallards as to faded lawn ducks, a commentary for the newly weds on how most marriages end up.
You're always as good with what is not said.
- 10 Feb 2018, 17:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dry Stone Walls
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12929
Re: Dry Stone Walls
Quite lovely
- 03 Feb 2018, 08:14
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming February IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 15
- Views: 30109
Alien
A pump in his pocket keep s him alive; bilge of old seawater from a dying planet. He is ancient even in earth years. Everyone he's ever known in two worlds is gone. They opened his chest once to remove what was the matter: Indian head penny, old pocket watch, and a yellow cat's-eye marble. At night,...
- 29 Jan 2018, 13:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien
- Replies: 3
- Views: 6601
Re: Alien
Thanks guys. I accept the nom
- 28 Jan 2018, 09:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien
- Replies: 3
- Views: 6601
Alien
A pump in his pocket keeps him alive; bilge of old seawater from a dying planet. He is ancient even in earth years. Everyone he's ever known in two worlds is gone. They opened his chest once to remove what was the matter: Indian head penny, old pocket watch, and a yellow cat's-eye marble. At night, ...
- 26 Jan 2018, 10:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
- Replies: 12
- Views: 22537
Re: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
RC...good rewrite.I still say it's keeper.
I was alive during that era RC, not many of us left. If you arw satisfied with it, that is all that matters.
If I have your permission I would like ti nominate it for the pool of IBPC poems.
I was alive during that era RC, not many of us left. If you arw satisfied with it, that is all that matters.
If I have your permission I would like ti nominate it for the pool of IBPC poems.
- 24 Jan 2018, 18:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: You Began Talking and I Lost My Place While Making Love
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13725
Re: You Began Talking and I Lost My Place While Making Love
Yes beautiful.Im a bit stumped as to the slighlty varied repitition, but then, I just learned from MV what a cinqa whatever was last month.
- 24 Jan 2018, 18:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
- Replies: 12
- Views: 22537
Re: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
RC, stanza breaks look great. IMHO the last stanza is the poem: presumably a group of draft age men with the desperate hope their sacrifice and incarceration are not in vain. Whatever precedes either buttresses this or detracts, merely because it comes at the end of the poem. My opinion is that 85% ...
- 24 Jan 2018, 18:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: What Aja Monet Didn't Read at the Woman's March-Washington
- Replies: 8
- Views: 16411
Re: What Aja Monet Didn't Read at the Woman's March-Washingt
I get it. Nicely stated without one being beaten about the head and shoulders.
- 24 Jan 2018, 08:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
- Replies: 12
- Views: 22537
Re: In Custody - Leavenworth - 1969
I think there is a good story here, but I think it obscured by word choices that try too hard to sound clever.
A stanza break or two would help greatly
A stanza break or two would help greatly
- 22 Jan 2018, 18:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Herringboat
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13515
Re: The Herringboat
Again, the use of olde language truly sets this off. You've a flair for that.There is a timelessness in this. Could be today or a hundred years ago
Nicely done
Nicely done
- 22 Jan 2018, 18:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remaindered
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14806
Re: Remaindered
A finely ctafted poem as is.
- 09 Jan 2018, 18:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Into The Manner and Causation of The Death of Jane Doe.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10641
Re: Into The Manner and Causation of The Death of Jane Doe.
My personal "rule" is that if two or more people give the same crit, go with it.
I will set this aside. Thanks guys.
I will set this aside. Thanks guys.
- 09 Jan 2018, 15:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Into The Manner and Causation of The Death of Jane Doe.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10641
- 09 Jan 2018, 05:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Into The Manner and Causation of The Death of Jane Doe.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10641
Re: Into The Manner and Causation of The Death of Jane Doe.
Bernie, you are so literate I don't know how your brain holds it all. Valid comments. Thanks coach:)