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- 15 Jan 2024, 00:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1958
Re: Rejections
Thanks, Ieuan. It’s heartbreaking to see animals mistreated, and especially intelligent ones, including ones we share a lot of DNA with. It may be that all of life is intelligent, the differences being either a matter of degree or the type of intelligence testing being done. Even forms like slime mo...
- 14 Jan 2024, 22:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1958
Re: Rejections
Thanks for commenting
- 14 Jan 2024, 00:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2889
Re: The Nutritionist
I don’t have just one favorite, but I do have a soft spot for the light hearted “On a Grasshopper and Cricket”: The poetry of earth is never dead: When all the birds are faint with the hot sun, And hide in cooling trees, a voice will run From hedge to hedge about the new-mown mead; That is the Grass...
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:49
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Ieuan Published -AutumSkyPoetryDaily - In Love with Woman in her Later Years
- Replies: 19
- Views: 26642
Re: Ieuan - Published
I just read your poem at OpenArts… 'For Harmina In Love with a Woman in her Later Years'. It is even more beautiful than I recalled. What a loving tribute… you are blessed, my friend.
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rejections
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1958
Rejections
V2: Desiring this man’s art and that man’s scope, With what I most enjoy contented least; Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising, Haply I think on thee, and then my state, (Like to the lark at break of day arising From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven’s gate; — William Shakespeare, sonnet ...
- 13 Jan 2024, 22:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: All Heart
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1399
Re: All Heart
I like the honesty of this. I like the words chosen to end lines on as well. I especially love that last line
I would replace “nigh” with near.
I would replace “nigh” with near.
- 13 Jan 2024, 04:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1334
Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
Ok, I was thinking you could develop more details about the planet, the environment, the women… And as you filled in your details, emphasize active verbs. E.g. take this description: “had died out caused by a virus that attacked the placenta.” More active verbs and details might be used: e.g., to “h...
- 13 Jan 2024, 01:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9071
Re: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
Congrats on the acceptances.
- 13 Jan 2024, 01:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1334
Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
Look to make the verbs more active, too. That’s something I need to work on as well.
- 13 Jan 2024, 00:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1334
Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
This is clever and fun. However, it works best as an outline for a parody poem, the details needing to be filled in. I’m surprised you recall the old astronauts poem.
By the way, I enjoyed your parody in the Nutritionist stream. Your sense of humor is delicious.
By the way, I enjoyed your parody in the Nutritionist stream. Your sense of humor is delicious.
- 12 Jan 2024, 22:39
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: A Poem from Simon
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1390
Re: A Poem from Simon
I don’t know this poet’s work, but this piece is pretty ragged. The Robert Lowell stanza is poorly written. Why did you post this? And why did you call it an excellent poem? Just curious
- 12 Jan 2024, 22:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2889
Re: The Nutritionist
Ha! There are some very odd things being said in this stream, but the oddest is someone not liking Keats! The mysteries of life….lol
- 12 Jan 2024, 22:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
- Replies: 14
- Views: 9071
Re: In Love with a Woman in her Later Years
I hope Bernie is back among us!
Sorry, I seem to have missed your poem…
Sorry, I seem to have missed your poem…
- 11 Jan 2024, 07:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2889
Re: The Nutritionist
Advice....Never fill a line just for the sake of filling it.... Whatever goes there has to have a compelling reason to be there... A short line is much better than one with filler.
Are you counting feet? Or something else? Just curious...
Are you counting feet? Or something else? Just curious...
- 11 Jan 2024, 06:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2889
Re: The Nutritionist
I would take out the "(of course)". It isn't needed. That's my only nit. It's a good poem to send out.
- 11 Jan 2024, 05:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2889
Re: The Nutritionist
I am delighted by this poem.
- 10 Jan 2024, 22:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
- Replies: 20
- Views: 4690
Re: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
“Show, don’t tell” isn’t a rule. It’s a general guideline meant to be helpful. There are no rules here. You can just ignore that guideline. As Ieuan said, this is a critique forum. If you don’t want constructive criticism, write “No critique” in each post’s heading. There are many fine poems written...
- 10 Jan 2024, 07:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
- Replies: 20
- Views: 4690
Re: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
“Birches” is filled with outstanding imagery. The imagery complements what commentary there is brilliantly. Without the details and similes no one would remember this poem. Commenting on something via imagery is another form of “showing”, instead of telling. “Show, not tell” is what this forum advis...
- 09 Jan 2024, 22:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
- Replies: 20
- Views: 4690
Re: Death of an Armed Guard (version 2)
The ending is better. I won’t repeat my earlier comments. We can agree to disagree about what makes a good poem.
- 09 Jan 2024, 04:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The New Year's Fish
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1765
Re: The New Year's Fish
Thanks, Billy
- 09 Jan 2024, 04:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Pilot Whale
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1544
Re: The Pilot Whale
Thanks, Ieuan. Climate change and the disasters it’s causing are scary.
- 08 Jan 2024, 21:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Pilot Whale
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1544
Re: The Pilot Whale
No, it’s about a beached pilot whale.
- 08 Jan 2024, 21:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The New Year's Fish
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1765
Re: The New Year's Fish
Thanks for commenting
- 08 Jan 2024, 03:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Pilot Whale
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1544
The Pilot Whale
The Pilot Whale I was on a beach that scraped the side of a wilderness. I grabbed her tail and yanked but it swung up like a play yard swing, an uppercut that sent me sprawling. She lay on her side the whole time I threw buckets of water onto her. Her jaw jostled. I've seen a dying stork, its bill o...
- 07 Jan 2024, 22:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sick Dog
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1271
Re: Sick Dog
I like these lines…. I like the playfulness here. Comedy is often the best way to talk seriously. A good way to write slant poetry. Chills, no fever unless the thermometer's lying. It's all a lie right now. I was grateful a half-a-day ago. Cough, cough, cough! Where's this going, back and forth betw...