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Canine keen, the nose knows first - remembers the vapor rub from father's Vicks inhaler, and in a puff, the scent of of mother's Wills. The eyes see again lotus beauty years from infancy, and then beauty was anything I looked upon, even the invisible. The tongue touches the taste of native candy, th...

Let us deal with the nose first. It remembers the Vicks Vapour Rub inhaler connects it with my father, the Wills cigarette smoke to my mother. The eyes remember idyllic lotus beauty over the years from infancy, after which beauty was anything I noticed, even concrete. The ears could see, tuned to vi...

Billy

You have changed the title and now it is good.Someone on another board always used to tell that the title of the poem should not have the same words that appear in the poem.

S

Billy
I like the way you connect
It is a well pump like the one

on my Uncle's farm
and this
grin, pump cool water at Uncle's farm.

1 The Gods sit as in concert, waiting for our dusk chants as the evening gathers momentum lamps are lit at five places. Married girls take their own lamp to the one sleeping room awaiting their husband who live in their wife’s house, who remember to visit their parents only on feast days. 2 The over...

Michael
I have read about 'mirror poetry"
Is this one?
S

Frank
Please don't delay posting your poem in the IBPC thread.
Siva

Frank
I second Michael's suggestion.Let this poem of your go.It has a certain mystery that makes one go back to it.And it is well crafted.Almost minimalistic, much different from your usual work.
Siva

Michael

Your superscript is a novel introduction to this letter poem.The two lines you have added blend well and is a fitting conclusive stanza.

Siva

Michael

I recommend your poem "psalm-swift of foot" for the September IBPC.

Siva

Thanks Michael,
Alternate titles,''Noise As In Pandemonium; Ecstasy As In Alive; Passion
Please read through once again.
Siva

IC Women don't smoke in Tamilnadu. Even if they do they don't do so in public.Good women (family type) don't smoke.If a woman smokes it means that she lacks character.I am talking about half a century earlier.Thanks for the 'through the cups of bras'; I want to stress that something eccentric is goi...

'Syntax and Semantics 'is my poem and I am not representing any other board,with this poem. sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com "Syntax & Semantics" I daubed my face with Ponds pushed German specs up on my nose dusted my plain skirt and tops, and ventured into the world with a few words: Drumstick, ladyfi...

Michael
What about your "A Lang-ku?" It is something very different and I am seeing something like this for the first time.

S

Hi Michael
Thank you for workshop-ping. I visit this block at least three times daily.I do not comment on all the poems because I don't get some of them due to cultural differences. But I read all the poems several times.

S

He studies at an American university, making innumerable black and white slides. By air he lands on native ground, then returns to his place of birth in a decorated car. An air-plane clip made of semi-precious white stones trails in her hair like a jet stream. Her would-be sister taunts her --- Each...

M.V
Thanks.
Billy
Mostly fending for myself
I daubed my face with Ponds
I was not confident, so I daubed myself with powder,and pushed my spectacles up my nose.
This line is not necessary?
Mostly fending for myself
S

Billy
Is "revve" something to do with a mo-bike?
S

Billy
Is "revve" something to do with a mo-bike?
S

Billy

Which is the first line?

S

MV

Thanks Michael. I shall edit it tomorrow.

S

edited I daubed my face with Ponds pushed my German specs up the nose dusted my plain skirt and tops, and ventured into the world with a few words. ‘Drumstick, lady's finger, all that's water under the bridge; don't try to pull my legs.’ Now I gawk at youngsters they ‘chill out, or cool it.’ ‘Freeze...

Introspection Lounging in a racing Landsor I see the trees dark with the night in a distance a bracket of serial lights. Coming closer it is the outline of a long and hooked nose; soon the lights are magnified on the mountain forming the alphabet ‘v” in running hand looking like a bright and glowing...

1980 The Black–MarieAmman Temple In the ant hill outside the temple, where snakes inhabit and devotees offer milk and eggs fangs punctured holes in these eggs so the yellow and white streamed down you picked up that mud and swallowed it; I could not even go around the pit thrice. 1981 Nagercoil We ...

IapCharon

Thank you.I will work on it with your suggestions.

S