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- 04 Jan 2020, 20:41
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 28823
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
"Escape from Routine", if I had to choose
- 04 Jan 2020, 00:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marakuli
- Replies: 6
- Views: 14145
Re: Marakuli
Your poem is nominated
- 02 Jan 2020, 22:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10119
Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Revised
- 02 Jan 2020, 21:31
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 28823
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
Thanks, Michael Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com the poem is my original and unpublished work and I don't have a poem committed to represent another board in the current IBPC. The Moon Walk It’s nearly another anniversary of the day Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin bounced across a powdery surface,...
- 31 Dec 2019, 21:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wishing All A Happy 2020
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5755
Re: Wishing All A Happy 2020
That's sweet, meenas. Happy New Year to you and the rest of WB as well!
- 30 Dec 2019, 21:49
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 28823
Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2020:
I nominate Siva's "Marakuli", Eira's "Escape from Routine" and Meenas' "A Manoeuvre"..... Michael, happy new year...may it be fun and filled with good writing....
- 30 Dec 2019, 21:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Eyes Grow Yellow
- Replies: 3
- Views: 8488
Re: My Eyes Grow Yellow
Ok.....but first let me wish you a Happy New Year, and many glorious poems in 2020
- 29 Dec 2019, 23:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Eyes Grow Yellow
- Replies: 3
- Views: 8488
Re: My Eyes Grow Yellow
This is a terrific subject..."an ordinary woman" comparing herself to her beloved mom. You do a good job, but again compressing the poem will improve it. I've tried to come up with an example. I rush off to school, juggling awkward books, always stooping to pick one up, as Mom, dressed in a pretty s...
- 28 Dec 2019, 22:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: New Year's Resolutions
- Replies: 0
- Views: 8956
New Year's Resolutions
New Year's Resolutions By my mid thirties I looked like an old man, two thirds of my hair a white fog. The white hairs were like notes warning of foreclosure, arriving more and more frequently. But did I change my life, set off on a yacht, circumnavigating the globe? No, I ignored my whitening hair....
- 27 Dec 2019, 10:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Traveling With You Through Space
- Replies: 0
- Views: 8974
Traveling With You Through Space
Traveling With You Through Space Oh the memory....when we first kissed every fiber in my body stood up longing for your approval. Had they believed you would only return with Haley's Comet, they would have sworn their loyalty, combing the skies nightly for signs of you. Your kisses pulled me into yo...
- 27 Dec 2019, 10:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Coming Back
Thanks for your help, Eira. Have a great new year!
- 25 Dec 2019, 00:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Chicken Soup In Times of Disaster
What do you think of cutting the 1st two stanzas ans starting in S3?
- 23 Dec 2019, 21:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Chicken Soup In Times of Disaster
Thanks so much, Eira. Any ideas for a new title?
- 22 Dec 2019, 09:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Chicken Soup In Times of Disaster
Another revision....
- 21 Dec 2019, 22:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10119
Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
No, I'm not counting syllables..."whatever" is standalone for emphasis....but if it doesn't work well to do that, I would like to know and include it in the next line. Bob
- 21 Dec 2019, 01:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10119
Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Which line are you referring to?
- 16 Dec 2019, 10:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10119
Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Ellen and Waldo Emerson Waldo, Waldo… Even a year after my death you feel my presence— a light flicking by a window, my breath stirring against your neck as you lie on your side at night, sleepless like that wretched moon. It both pleases and saddens me how you will suddenly stop what you are doing,...
- 15 Dec 2019, 07:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Chicken Soup In Times of Disaster
You’re right, Judy.... best to put it aside for now....and rethink things.... thx for your input
- 13 Dec 2019, 22:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Manoeuvre
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11717
Re: A Manoeuvre
This is much better. Still, it can be tightened. Here's one approach, to get you thinking.... meenas; Every evening I walk, a ploy to keep my legs active, mine being a strange case. I walk with ease for half an hour but I’m unable to stand for more than quarter an hour. I’m neither obese nor slender...
- 13 Dec 2019, 09:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Is There a Chicken Soup That Can Save Me
Judy, I am listening to your advice, and revising. A substantially different tact, for this latest version....
- 12 Dec 2019, 00:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Is There a Chicken Soup That Can Save Me
Would the closing line work better with "squeezed life into mine" instead of "wrung life into mine"? Or maybe the verb "pressed"?
- 11 Dec 2019, 23:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Postcard (new title for Escape from Routine plus revision)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15009
Re: Escape from Routine
You're using alliteration more and more....but here you capture the sensation of giggling with alliteration and assonance. Is it too much or just delightful? I think it's great
we giggle as tiddler’s fins tickle toes
we giggle as tiddler’s fins tickle toes
- 11 Dec 2019, 22:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Manoeuvre
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11717
Re: A Manoeuvre
Ah, middle age and the beginning demise....You capture the frustration of this well. I love the line "entered the middle age all too soon". Ha! True. There are a number of places to compress slightly...some here, some there. I like the idea of the closing line...but "appear" is like "really" in a po...
- 09 Dec 2019, 09:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Is There a Chicken Soup That Can Save Me
Revised....thx for your ideas, Judy....
- 09 Dec 2019, 07:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Coming Back
- Replies: 16
- Views: 28138
Re: Is There a Chicken Soup That Can Save Me
Ok, I will play with it... thx