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- 30 Dec 2023, 23:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: William Davenant. Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1393
William Davenant. Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me
v2: William Davenant. Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me Oft Shakespeare dropped by the Crown Tavern at Oxon on his way to Stratford. He loved to jest with Mother, who, when around musicians and players, was as lively as any minuet. I take pleasure in the rumor that Will fathered me a bast...
- 30 Dec 2023, 22:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Drives and Driveways
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1067
Re: Drives and Driveways
An explanation would help. I add titles to my haiku as well…
- 29 Dec 2023, 23:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1842
Re: Wish You Were Here
It’s a good image.
- 29 Dec 2023, 22:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1842
Re: Wish You Were Here
Good ending. Well done, efficient poem. Reminds me of Emily’s hope is a feathered thing. But any line with hope and bird would inevitably invoke Emily.
- 29 Dec 2023, 22:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Re: Ode to a Rug
Thanks, Michael. I like the worn rug suggestion. I will change the title.
It’s been a lot of fun for me as well working with so many talented poets…. The enjoyment of reading so many good poems at this site has been a literary blessing.
Enjoy the new year… all of it!
Bob
It’s been a lot of fun for me as well working with so many talented poets…. The enjoyment of reading so many good poems at this site has been a literary blessing.
Enjoy the new year… all of it!
Bob
- 29 Dec 2023, 02:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: From This to That (version 2)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1073
Re: From This to That
Sorry, I missed this. It’s a good draft. I like the first 3 poignant stanzas a lot. The specifics put me right there. For example, I love “Rubbermaid trays”, a good example of great detail. The contrast between how the mother took care of plants before and after her illness works very well. The four...
- 28 Dec 2023, 22:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Chandler's Assistant
- Replies: 2
- Views: 894
Re: Ship Chandler's Assistant
Fun poem. I liked the breast imagery, and the humor throughout. Its innocence has a Norwegian Wood vibe to it.
- 28 Dec 2023, 08:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Re: Ode to a Rug
It's just the way I hear it spoken....I did change the title, and work forgiveness into a line, per your suggestions....enjoy new year's!
- 28 Dec 2023, 05:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Re: Ode to a Rug
Thanks for your comments, Caleb. I’ve tweaked the poem.
- 28 Dec 2023, 00:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Re: Hair Loss
Ha! Maybe
- 27 Dec 2023, 22:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Showman Catches Bullets in His Belt
- Replies: 4
- Views: 944
Re: The Showman who Catches Bullets in a Stomach Pouch
I like it all except for the last stanza. I wanted more of a punch line.
- 27 Dec 2023, 22:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Re: Hair Loss
Thanks, Caleb. I agree the title isn’t memorable. I’m open to suggestions, even wild funny ones….
- 27 Dec 2023, 06:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
- Replies: 12
- Views: 1792
Ode to a Worn Rug
V2: Ode to a Worn Rug To hide my naked head, I wear a rug which mimics a dead cat. Ah, how forgiving old age is! No one wants to embarrass an ambassador of dementia by pointing to it. I move through the markets with my headdress of a cat, chin up, haughty like a model who’s graced the covers of Vogu...
- 26 Dec 2023, 00:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Christmas Day 2023
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1188
Re: Christmas Day 2023
Lovely close, the love for the grandson
The thrill of Christmas
Day soon grown old
like the new game or toy.
I see in his heart the desire
for the joy that lasts.
The thrill of Christmas
Day soon grown old
like the new game or toy.
I see in his heart the desire
for the joy that lasts.
- 26 Dec 2023, 00:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Senryu About Ships on Christmas Day
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1103
Re: Senryu About Ships on Christmas Day
Ha! Nice one
- 26 Dec 2023, 00:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Senryu About Chips on Christmas Day
- Replies: 1
- Views: 714
Re: Senryu About Chips on Christmas Day
Well done…. You’re really good at this gorm
- 26 Dec 2023, 00:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Poem About The Lost on Christmas Day in Port Eynon
- Replies: 1
- Views: 630
- 25 Dec 2023, 02:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Guy
- Replies: 22
- Views: 12662
Re: Big Guy
I love the revision you have started here, Ieuan. Hope to see more soon….Merry Christmas, my friend.
- 24 Dec 2023, 02:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 1527
Re: The Sky (version 3!)
This works. Good poem. Enjoy the holidays.
- 23 Dec 2023, 00:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 1527
Re: The Sky (new version)
This is good, and a fine revision. My only quibble may be with the line about the son being under the father's Thumb. Why is Thumb but not father capitalized? Also, for me this is the weakest line. It isn't as good as the others...maybe because it doesn't feel necessary. I know poets tend to focus o...
- 21 Dec 2023, 02:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Revisions
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4345
Re: Revisions
Feel free, my friend. Clouds have been referred to as blankets forever. I don’t recall one being referred to as a “thin blanket” in a poem before, but it probably has been. So you won’t be stealing anything. No need to “cover” yourself!
- 21 Dec 2023, 00:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
- Replies: 14
- Views: 1527
Re: The Sky
This is good. Your best piece. I like it all. No suggestions. My fave line: The sky has been debunked.
- 21 Dec 2023, 00:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Revisions
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4345
Re: Revisions
Thank you for your kind words. There is no older version. I didn’t start a new thread. No one had commented on it previously. So I “tweaked” it to resurrect it.
- 20 Dec 2023, 07:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Revisions
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4345
Re: Revisions
Tweaked
- 20 Dec 2023, 01:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Christmas Poem - removed for publishing
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1907
Re: Christmas Poem - removed for publishing
Sounds good