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- 15 Sep 2019, 04:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Percy Shelley
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12752
- 15 Sep 2019, 04:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Yanar Dag
- Replies: 8
- Views: 12877
Re: Yanar Dag
Terrific piece. The images are imaginative and the closing just right.
- 14 Sep 2019, 20:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cormorant Fishing
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5878
Cormorant Fishing
Cormorant Fishing Only a cormorant can love a bird like me, goofy looking, with black plumage, and a bill with a hooked tip. Any fish I grab I slip deftly into my pocket, my pouch. If I don't sail back with my catch, my boss drags me back by my roped ankle. A noose loosely tied around my neck guaran...
- 14 Sep 2019, 19:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: On The Shelves
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8867
Re: On The Shelves
Good topic.... just thoughts...S1 can be trimmed a bit. I really like S2, and the breaks. s3 is good. s4 can be simplified? s5...Shakespeare doesn't need to be mentioned...we all know it. excites...bears lots of fun...choose one, not both descriptions....enjoyable poem....just needs some simplifying...
- 13 Sep 2019, 20:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Percy Shelley
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12752
Re: Percy Shelley
Ken, Meenas — thank you for your comments
- 13 Sep 2019, 09:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Let Go
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14581
Re: Let Go
good point, Michael.....I'll change shaking to quivering
- 13 Sep 2019, 09:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Percy Shelley
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12752
Percy Shelley
Percy Shelley Mary confessed to me how in St. Pancras' cemetery-- her mother's grave a stone's throw away-- Percy pulled her down, moaning and swearing a loyalty as steadfast as the sky is to land and sea. She was sixteen, and afraid to ask, Had he pledged the same to his pregnant wife, Harriet? As ...
- 13 Sep 2019, 05:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Let Go
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14581
Re: Let Go
I like your suggestions, how you have simplified the poem, meenas... thank you...
- 12 Sep 2019, 19:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: So Many Memories
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11591
Re: So Many Memories
nice... I like S2 the best... love the verb flipped. Agree with Ken.... good restraint.
- 11 Sep 2019, 00:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11526
Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist
I have read a number of poems on shooters recently... this one is by far the best
- 10 Sep 2019, 19:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11526
Re: Note From the School Shooter's Therapist
Wow.... terrific and to say the least disquieting... well done!
- 09 Sep 2019, 20:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dante's Outer Circles
- Replies: 12
- Views: 23901
Re: Dante's Outer Rings
Splendid writing..not crits...
- 09 Sep 2019, 09:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Rockaway Farms, East Islip -1908.
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9211
Re: Rockaway Farms, East Islip -1908.
Well, I really like what you're doing...stretching your skill set, trying new voices. You nail the voice, the local dialect. The details pulled me in, too....love the writing as seen here: I coaxed them with oats and apples, rigged a sling truss in the barn to work their fetlocks, used poultices and...
- 08 Sep 2019, 00:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Downsizing the Dead
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8245
Re: Downsizing the Dead
The 2nd stanza is a stunner...really good. The 3rd and 4th stanzas are good as well... I enjoyed the conversational deftness . I am uncertain how I feel about the 1st stanza... it is clever but not the same tone as the following stanzas. I might cut it. The ghost-cheater ending doesn’t carry the kin...
- 07 Sep 2019, 22:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Let Go
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14581
Re: Let Go
Ken, I love your suggestions. I will repost with them. The poem is much better with your cuts. Thank you
I am sorry to hear about your cat. We lost our cat, and go was nearly 20 years old, awhile back.... heartbreaking
I am sorry to hear about your cat. We lost our cat, and go was nearly 20 years old, awhile back.... heartbreaking
- 07 Sep 2019, 20:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Let Go
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14581
Let Go
V2: Let Go I'm like a violin player reading the notes ahead on my perched sheet, even as I’m scraping faster and faster, determined to catch up with the notes. How could I have expected turning towards the kitchen to whisk up an omelet, as I do every morning, to see you toppled over onto the linoleu...
- 06 Sep 2019, 02:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15484
Re: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
Thx, Michael, for the interesting response. I googled auto Thanatographt, but found the articles confusing. Perhaps you could explain in layman terms... thx
- 05 Sep 2019, 20:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15484
Re: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
Thanks, guys, for commenting
- 05 Sep 2019, 19:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Who Could She Be?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8374
Re: Who Could She Be?
Just lovely, and so well done! Your best, or one of your best. The way you keep us guessing is a lot of fun. Kudos
Note: now that you're writing at such a high level, I would welcome, and I'm sure others would welcome, constructive criticisms from you on our pieces. Teamwork....thanks, meenas
Note: now that you're writing at such a high level, I would welcome, and I'm sure others would welcome, constructive criticisms from you on our pieces. Teamwork....thanks, meenas
- 05 Sep 2019, 08:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Anniversary Reaction
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7167
Re: Anniversary Reaction
Love that opening stanza... love the narrator’s strong voice... excellent poem!
- 05 Sep 2019, 05:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15484
Re: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
I have revised the poem... let me know your thoughts
- 04 Sep 2019, 21:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Monsoon Bliss
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8312
Re: Monsoon Bliss
I like it, especially the ending. My only criticism... to say these lines a bit more simply, conversationally:
the not
so versatile repeat
in chorus a simple line,
' we want rain" competes.
the not
so versatile repeat
in chorus a simple line,
' we want rain" competes.
- 04 Sep 2019, 20:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Find's His Pride
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7348
Re: Find's His Pride
I echo Ken... great to have another poet here. I like some of the phrases, especially “I am a fish”...I am liquid”. Ken is right... toss “Mayest”. I have only seen a couple of the shows... thought they were original and funny... but having only seen 2 shows, I am not qualified to comment on the poem...
- 03 Sep 2019, 20:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15484
Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads
V2: Wordsworth on the Second Edition of Lyrical Ballads Dorothy smiles sadly as Coleridge lumbers up the stairs, his losses growing, his heart heaving like a widow's-- William having turned down "Christabel" for the second edition, the poem like a relative too embarrassing to be seen with. Worse, Co...
- 03 Sep 2019, 00:58
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming September IBPC 2019:
- Replies: 11
- Views: 22551
Re: Upcoming September IBPC 2019:
Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com Original and unpublished poem Only for this forum Algernon Charles Swinburne Lean like a flamingo, he boasted a cataract of red hair— but was just as famous for his drunken pratfalls, his poetry accused of being just as confused as he was when sloshing about a roo...