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by IndianaDP
21 Dec 2018, 02:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fusions
Replies: 6
Views: 13896

Fusions

Prussian Blue street headlights, horns, stiletto heels clipping down stairs, a small basement club where pink neon shapes moods we fall into, blushes your cheeks, your hands as we order Rioja, eat crumbled cheese, wafers of rye. And music, played by a young Asian artist, silver sax rolling, narrow b...
by IndianaDP
21 Dec 2018, 02:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Renaming Constellations
Replies: 9
Views: 18207

Re: Renaming Constellations

Looks good Bob, I like it.
by IndianaDP
21 Dec 2018, 02:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Running on the Spectrum (revised first 3 stanzas)
Replies: 30
Views: 47907

Re: Running on the Sprectrum (a new revision)

I like the shorter line lengths Bob suggests.
by IndianaDP
16 Dec 2018, 06:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels
Replies: 4
Views: 10815

Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

Thanks Bob,

Just trying to get my mind working on something.
by IndianaDP
15 Dec 2018, 22:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels
Replies: 4
Views: 10815

Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels

Rough wood
Western themed bar.

A widow in a red tasseled vest
Puckers her lips saying please.

Photos on the wall
Wild Bill Cody

A cowgirl
Throwing her lasso.
by IndianaDP
15 Dec 2018, 20:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Koodangkulam Power Plant
Replies: 5
Views: 11022

Re: The Koodangkulam Power Plant

Hi Siva, for myself this reads too much like an editorial, not enough poetics. I want to know about what the lives of the people are like without power, to know better why it is needed.
by IndianaDP
01 Dec 2018, 21:55
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming December IBPC 2018:
Replies: 9
Views: 22826

Re: Upcoming December IBPC 2018:

Thanks for the nom Bob. Here is the poem should it be selected. 1/Dale Patterson 2/dalepatterson@comcast.com 3/the poem is mine 4/and is an unpublished work 5/and that I am not representing in the current IBPC The Miracle of Flight A man walks through corn dank furrows towering green that absorbs hu...
by IndianaDP
30 Nov 2018, 22:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Miracle of Flight
Replies: 6
Views: 12935

Re: The Miracle of Flight

Thanks Ken, in this I am using the plane as a subtle metaphor for God, so the tipping wing is like a signal. None-the-less the man still has doubts even with signs.
by IndianaDP
27 Nov 2018, 18:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Miracle of Flight
Replies: 6
Views: 12935

Re: The Miracle of Flight

Thanks Bob
by IndianaDP
26 Nov 2018, 18:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Miracle of Flight
Replies: 6
Views: 12935

The Miracle of Flight

A man walks through corn dank furrows towering green that absorbs humid yellow. He is angry and tired of fighting his wife things that are set and beyond his control. As he reaches the edge of the field a silver plane drones dips its wing to the earth. He waves then wonders if the pilot can see him ...
by IndianaDP
26 Nov 2018, 18:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wooden Hut - removed for Publication
Replies: 6
Views: 13219

Re: From the Wooden Hut - V3

Beautifullly written Frank. I ditto the accolades of others then add a bravo for the final stanza.
by IndianaDP
26 Nov 2018, 17:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
Replies: 5
Views: 11297

Re: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy

I especially like, ‘mama piles my hair in this dusky apartment.’ The story flows well, I was also bothered some by the multiples of firefly. Great poem.
by IndianaDP
26 Nov 2018, 17:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Indian Summer -revision
Replies: 5
Views: 10938

Re: Indian Summer -revision

Solid poem, I like the revision.
by IndianaDP
15 Nov 2018, 18:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ghost
Replies: 7
Views: 14126

Re: Ghost

Just caught your post, interesting how this memory runs ahead of you in the mall, when we often drag our memories behind us. Nicely done.
by IndianaDP
05 Nov 2018, 03:37
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
Replies: 17
Views: 34782

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:

If selected here is my poem and entry information. 1/Dale Patterson 2/dalepatterson@comcast.com 3/the poem is mine 4/and is an unpublished work 5/and that I am not representing in the current IBPC Selective Breeding She is a beautiful woman who likes Chinese silk and French beaded bags, has a Master...
by IndianaDP
28 Oct 2018, 04:34
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
Replies: 17
Views: 34782

Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2018;

I nominate-

Bob’s - Verlaine’s Young Wife Boards a Train
Billy’s - For Daryl
Frank’s - Welch Cakes of War
by IndianaDP
27 Oct 2018, 06:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Eugenics (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 18924

Re: Eugenics (revision)

Ha ha, will do.

I’m sure I’ll be nominating one of yours when the link is posted, let me know if you have a preference.
by IndianaDP
26 Oct 2018, 18:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Eugenics (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 18924

Re: Eugenics (revision)

Thanks Ken, that would be great, I am changing the title to ‘Selective Breading.’

I have been waiting for a link for new nons.
by IndianaDP
19 Oct 2018, 18:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Eugenics (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 18924

Re: Eugenics (revision)

Thanks Billy, the final will probably be a mix of the two versions, still working on a title.
by IndianaDP
19 Oct 2018, 18:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Desert Oasis
Replies: 1
Views: 5398

Desert Oasis

I see the first Jesus in the corner of my glasses, where lens meets tortoise shell frame and tissue can’t loosen dirt. He is walking on blue smears of grease or firmament expanding, like the great Milky Way or the pool at a desert motel, radiant in turquoise and clear dark of night, where I find mys...
by IndianaDP
19 Oct 2018, 18:00
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Verlaine's Young Wife Boards A Train
Replies: 6
Views: 10855

Re: Verlaine's Young Wife Boards A Train

Bob, as usual a well told and interesting story. I especially like how the title isn’t explained until the final stanza.
by IndianaDP
19 Oct 2018, 17:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: When I Find Myself
Replies: 4
Views: 9381

Re: When I Find Myself

This describes me to a tee.
by IndianaDP
19 Oct 2018, 17:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: a small boat
Replies: 7
Views: 12475

Re: a small boat

Billy, good to see you here, I just figured out who you are. This poem resonates with me, one of my favorite places is to be alone in a small boat, on a small lake, waves slapping under the bow. It is very meditative, a time to get lost in your thoughts. I have never heard if snake doctors, I will h...
by IndianaDP
15 Oct 2018, 23:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Eugenics (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 18924

Re: Eugenics (revision)

I have made revisions, still thinking about the title, considering ‘Selective Breading’
by IndianaDP
14 Oct 2018, 23:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Eugenics (revision)
Replies: 11
Views: 18924

Re: Eugenics

As I understand it it’s more the idea of selective breading, in the case of this poem upper class breading upper class. I do understand many see the term as you mention, hmm, let’s see how others view it.