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- 04 Oct 2020, 21:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Secret Lover
- Replies: 1
- Views: 4651
Re: Secret Lover
The last stanza makes this poem work...
- 29 Sep 2020, 05:09
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 14
- Views: 21950
Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2020:
I am not available for WB this month, but I am delighted to nominate:
1) Billy’s “She Smiles through the Inevitable”
2) Michael’s “remember September”
3) Ken’s “Devils Courthouse...”
1) Billy’s “She Smiles through the Inevitable”
2) Michael’s “remember September”
3) Ken’s “Devils Courthouse...”
- 29 Sep 2020, 05:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Devils Courthouse Blue Ridge Parkway
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10588
Re: Devils Courthouse Blue Ridge Parkway
Good from start to finish. No criticisms. The surprise ending delights. A nom from me. Hope you and Billy will accept.
storm cloud moving
through the valley like a black fish,
the dispensation of rain and life,
storm and fire, darkness and thunder.
God cutting a rug with his sweetie.
storm cloud moving
through the valley like a black fish,
the dispensation of rain and life,
storm and fire, darkness and thunder.
God cutting a rug with his sweetie.
- 27 Sep 2020, 08:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Outer Banks in Autumn
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11497
Re: Outer Banks in Autumn
Good piece. So good to have you back, and to read your work.
Love these 3 lines especially:
Nothing has changed here in a century.
The same derelict wrecks on the bottom,
the same dialectical wheel of gulls.
Love these 3 lines especially:
Nothing has changed here in a century.
The same derelict wrecks on the bottom,
the same dialectical wheel of gulls.
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: She Smiles Through The Inevitable
- Replies: 9
- Views: 13854
Re: She Smiles Through The Inevitable
Hope you'll accept a nom for this...
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:19
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the August IBPC 2020 (Congrats Bob!):
- Replies: 2
- Views: 8217
Re: Poems that placed in the August IBPC 2020 (Congrats Bob!):
Michael, Siva -- thank you....
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
- Replies: 11
- Views: 15675
Re: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
Thanks, Billy
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Moonbeam
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9315
Re: Moonbeam
Yep, you nailed a universal experience...who can't like these lines:
a smile
opening larger
like a fully blossoming
flower as I continue to look
without guilt, embarrassed,
in need of nothing more.
a smile
opening larger
like a fully blossoming
flower as I continue to look
without guilt, embarrassed,
in need of nothing more.
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: She Smiles Through The Inevitable
- Replies: 9
- Views: 13854
Re: She Smiles Through The Inevitable
Yeah, great line...and everything from this point on is really good.
Health is a faraway land inhabited
by everyone else,
love these lines as well:
The usually talkative nurses
moving in unison as if in a practiced
ritual performed in secret--a secret
we know that doesn't need telling.
Health is a faraway land inhabited
by everyone else,
love these lines as well:
The usually talkative nurses
moving in unison as if in a practiced
ritual performed in secret--a secret
we know that doesn't need telling.
- 26 Sep 2020, 20:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: remember September
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8677
Re: remember September
Terrific haiku, Michael!
- 26 Sep 2020, 05:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
- Replies: 11
- Views: 15675
Re: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
Time to start. You are one of the most talented poets I know...
- 25 Sep 2020, 22:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
- Replies: 11
- Views: 15675
Re: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
Thanks, Ken. It's great to see you commenting. I'm looking forward to your poems!
- 24 Sep 2020, 20:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
- Replies: 11
- Views: 15675
Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace
v2: Oscar Wilde in the Hotel d'Alsace As Oscar wandered the streets of Paris, he sought only company to converse with, to talk about anything but memories of prison where at night a blanket rough as whiskers had been his only comfort. Yet it wasn't regrets that had kept him awake. It was the hard pl...
- 24 Sep 2020, 00:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: remember September
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8677
Re: remember September
Lovely imagery in the opening and closing stanzas. The summer line... it doesn’t feel necessary
- 22 Sep 2020, 01:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Earth and its Resilience
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8353
Re: The Earth and its Resilience
I like the simple, clear language in this revision. Should “one” in S1 be “he”? I think so. For the last stanza I think a slight lead in would help...maybe something along the lines of “when the bland earth again greens”? Think about it...
- 18 Sep 2020, 06:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Earth and its Resilience
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8353
Re: The Earth and its Rescilence
It’s interesting to read a poem of another culture, another belief system. But I also wanted more, an emotional connection with the narrator. A sense of comfort from faith or tradition, a sense of wonder...the awe of time passed and passing...but I am left with a history lesson. This poem might be b...
- 13 Sep 2020, 20:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Patriot Day 2020 (observing the weekend)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12633
Re: Patriot Day 2020 (observing the weekend)
Siva, it’s peanut butter & jelly
- 13 Sep 2020, 20:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Patriot Day 2020 (observing the weekend)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12633
Re: Patriot Day 2020 (observing the weekend)
Good one! I didn’t see that punch to the guy coming... stellar end
- 06 Sep 2020, 22:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Friend's Wedding Reception
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11442
Re: A Friend's Wedding Reception
I was moved by your story of your mother and sister. Thx for sharing.
Also, your help on this poem made a huge difference. Much thanks
Also, your help on this poem made a huge difference. Much thanks
- 05 Sep 2020, 23:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Friend's Wedding Reception
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11442
Re: A Friend's Wedding Reception
You're very kind, Michael. I appreciate all the support you've provided. I really like "disrobing the ghost"....
- 05 Sep 2020, 22:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Friend's Wedding Reception
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11442
Re: A Friend's Wedding Reception
Thx, Michael. I like your suggestions, especially the last line. May I ask if your last name is Neff?
- 04 Sep 2020, 03:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: No Need for Redemption.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10825
Re: No Need for Redemption.
Your poem is nominated. Pls post it on the nom page.
- 03 Sep 2020, 23:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Friend's Wedding Reception
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11442
A Friend's Wedding Reception
v2: A Friend's Wedding Reception I remember looking up at a chandelier with all its glass and lights winking at the bride and groom as they danced in an open clearing on the floor, the guests ooh-ing and ahhh-ing on the perimeter like children seeing a meadow of fireflies ascending from the grass. W...
- 03 Sep 2020, 23:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: No Need for Redemption.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10825
Re: No Need for Redemption.
Thanks, Michael, for your help in getting Siva past her login issues....
- 03 Sep 2020, 23:32
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming September IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11763
Re: Upcoming September IBPC 2020:
I nominate Michael's poem "therefore I am".