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- 17 Jun 2019, 09:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12049
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
This is a lovely piece, as is....
- 17 Jun 2019, 09:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: M C Escher's " Drawing Hands"
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11322
Re: Mauris Cornelius Escher
Good poem...those last 3 stanzas lovely: the way my cats sleep curled, tail to nose of the other so that I can't tell where one ends and the other begins unless they rise, arch their backs and yawn. This must be what love is: The finger reaching down from The Sistine toward Adam; the faint blue arc ...
- 17 Jun 2019, 08:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Difference
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7228
Re: The Difference
And living in The Swamp which someone promised to drain.........
- 16 Jun 2019, 07:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Difference
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7228
Re: The Difference
Clever
- 14 Jun 2019, 01:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12049
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
Perhaps what has been lost is the contrast in the two worlds colliding, which you hinted at in v1. So after the Horne stanza, contrast the couple: for example, the girl’s history like Lena’s skin, almost flawless, the guy’s past a rap sheet thicker than the Gospel... or a bookie’s journal... you get...
- 13 Jun 2019, 21:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12049
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
The never mind and they say don’t work as well as some of the writing in the first version.... maybe replace the 3rd stanza with this from earlier? Seventeen horns and a rhythm section, Lena Horne could almost pass when back-lit. Also, “universe” ... would “world” work better, along with tweaking th...
- 13 Jun 2019, 19:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10772
Re: Love's Arrival
Thanks, Michael, for the options...best, Bob
- 12 Jun 2019, 23:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12049
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
Really like this... I like both versions... love this image
It's early and the joint is
quiet as a paid- off cop.
Nitpick: in the last stanza the tense changes from present to past
It's early and the joint is
quiet as a paid- off cop.
Nitpick: in the last stanza the tense changes from present to past
- 11 Jun 2019, 18:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10772
Re: Love's Arrival
Ken, Frank — thank you
- 11 Jun 2019, 06:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10772
Love's Arrival
Love's Arrival Our mothers and grandparents admired this same dusting of stars... I slip my palm into your hand. Somewhere a spaceship from an outer pocket of the universe is speeding towards us with another couple in love. Like us they will face minor problems, too. Maybe their luggage will be lost...
- 10 Jun 2019, 04:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
- Replies: 25
- Views: 39651
Re: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.
I agree... an excellent subject for a poem, and one that is handled well with gentleness and subtlety.
- 09 Jun 2019, 19:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory
- Replies: 7
- Views: 10843
Re: Big Band Theory
It’s a good poem, Ken. Just not as powerful as some of your gems.... your bar is set so high
- 09 Jun 2019, 07:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Badge of Freedom
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7048
Re: Badge of Freedom
The last line is much better
- 07 Jun 2019, 21:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Never Forget
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13192
Re: Never Forget - V2
Thanks, Frank...I like how you have thought this out
- 07 Jun 2019, 20:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Burning Man
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8720
Re: Burning Man
Thx for the explanation....Bob
- 07 Jun 2019, 20:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory
- Replies: 7
- Views: 10843
Re: Big Band Theory
I like this, the reefer odor mixing with the Pomade, and especially the last stanza. My first thought when reading this was that it was a bit too generic, and maybe it is. But it is good. A keeper. What I would also like to see is a second poem that zooms in, immerses me in a specific moment. Instea...
- 07 Jun 2019, 19:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Never Forget
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13192
Re: Never Forget - V2
We can't praise that generation enough...they saved Europe. Out of curiosity, who publishes found / erasure poems? Personally, I don't get the attraction, but I have never been a big fan of collage either. Or Slam Poetry for that matter. But that's me. And it isn't a criticism of you or anyone else ...
- 07 Jun 2019, 00:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Burning Man
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8720
Re: Burning Man
I like the last 2 stanzas best... especially the smoldering boots. I am not sure how the ants image relates, or what it’s trying to tell me. Maybe it’s me.
- 07 Jun 2019, 00:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Never Forget
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13192
Re: Never Forget - V2
Pretty well done exercise.... the ending needs to be stronger, the history written in blood too common.... just curious, why are you doing this type of exercise? You have a good, imaginative voice which interests me more
- 04 Jun 2019, 00:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Worst Things About You
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12749
Re: The Worst Things About You
I just listened to this song, Frank, on Youtube... enjoyed... thx for mentioning it
- 03 Jun 2019, 23:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Problem With Two Cats
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7016
Re: The Problem With Two Cats
This is hilarious.... love the narrator’s voice... stellar from top to bottom
- 03 Jun 2019, 03:14
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2019:
- Replies: 17
- Views: 31715
Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2019:
This is my original work, and I’m not posting at another forum. Bob Bradshaw bobbybradshw@yahoo.com La Brea Tar Pits I came to Los Angeles for the Strip, the nightclubs, the famous restaurants where celebrities gather, picking at their salads, and sipping wines that would cost me a year’s rent. In t...
- 03 Jun 2019, 03:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Worst Things About You
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12749
Re: The Worst Things About You
I don’t know this song but thx. for sharing it....I. Will look it up
- 02 Jun 2019, 00:56
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2019:
- Replies: 17
- Views: 31715
Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2019:
Thanks, guys... I accept the nom for La Brea if chosen
- 02 Jun 2019, 00:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Worst Things About You
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12749
Re: The Worst Things About You
Meenas, Ken —. Glad you enjoyed it