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- 08 Aug 2012, 06:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Incident At Spaces
- Replies: 2
- Views: 12976
Incident At Spaces
Atsushi Takenouchi unwinds slowly like a robot keyed up let loose on a spring. I tried counting his ribs outside his ribcage. One could have drawn a skeletal diagram. I could hear the blood course up and down his spine along with the contraction of muscles in his chest— like a kavadi carrier poking ...
- 07 Aug 2012, 10:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I have removed the poem I posted
- Replies: 0
- Views: 7736
I have removed the poem I posted
It is not a new poem.
- 07 Aug 2012, 10:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Dry Dock Road - edit 1
- Replies: 5
- Views: 17501
Re: The Dry Dock Road
Frank
I have been reading this and I need to read this more to be able to comment.
Siva
I have been reading this and I need to read this more to be able to comment.
Siva
- 07 Aug 2012, 09:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: on reading Hemingway's the garden of eden
- Replies: 3
- Views: 10589
Re: on reading Hemingway's the garden of eden
"The bull wasn't doing anyone any harm and now we've tracked him to where he came to see his dead friend and now were going to kill him."-(E)ernest (H)hemingway when I started reading more of the garden of (E)eden [the next day,]I thought all sadness was driven deep inside of my lungs; [and] all tha...
- 07 Aug 2012, 05:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: 'No Place To Sleep, No Place To Call Our Own'
- Replies: 17
- Views: 30702
Re: 'No Place To Seep, No Place To Call Our Own'.
'no place to sleep, no place to call our own'. Our dead ancestors, once lay buried on the banks of the Cauvery, stretched out, sandwiched between holy ash Bilva leaves and rock salt; we pushed in mud and powdered brick thrice into the pit our backs turned, not looking. Why wait a year to lay out the...
- 05 Aug 2012, 16:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptomatic
Michael
I saw your message only now,and I am travelling.Will reach Chennai tomorrow morning.Will make the necessary changes.But I feel quite comfortable with this,as it is.Thank you both for spending so much time on one single poem and sharing your expertise.
Siva
I saw your message only now,and I am travelling.Will reach Chennai tomorrow morning.Will make the necessary changes.But I feel quite comfortable with this,as it is.Thank you both for spending so much time on one single poem and sharing your expertise.
Siva
- 04 Aug 2012, 07:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptomatic
Frank
I posted the poem in the Contest thread at 5pm yesterday.I forgot to mention it in this thread.Think I should learn perseverance from you.I will use your edition when I bring out my book.Many thanks.
I posted the poem in the Contest thread at 5pm yesterday.I forgot to mention it in this thread.Think I should learn perseverance from you.I will use your edition when I bring out my book.Many thanks.
- 03 Aug 2012, 20:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: 'No Place To Sleep, No Place To Call Our Own'
- Replies: 17
- Views: 30702
We Can No Longer Bury Our Dead,We have Got To Burn Them....
Our ancestors, once lay on the banks of the Cauvery. Stretched out, sandwiched between holy ash. Bilva leaves and rock salt, mud and powdered brick pushed into the pit thrice, back turned, not looking. Why wait a year to build the cemetery? One year is one day for the departed, it is all that the su...
- 03 Aug 2012, 19:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Thank you, Frank and Michael
Thank you Frank. And Michael, for the confidence you have in me. Frank,I am learning.Though I have been writing for more than forty years I have not come out with a book of poems only because I do not want to self publish unedited work.I will not be able to spot anything because I have been reading ...
- 03 Aug 2012, 16:19
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Our 2 to represent the Block for August IBPC
- Replies: 5
- Views: 20432
Re: Our 2 to represent the Block for August IBPC
I second Michael's poem 'Independence' for the August IBPC.
Siva
Siva
- 03 Aug 2012, 16:09
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Our 2 to represent the Block for August IBPC
- Replies: 5
- Views: 20432
Re: Our 2 to represent the Block for August IBPC
The poem ,'Symptomatic ' written by me ,is an unpublished poem.I am not representing any other board. my e-mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com Symptomatic Not born with it. Eclipse swallows pushing out great grandmothers and babies, so that death and life daisy chain like phosphorescent super n...
- 03 Aug 2012, 07:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Insanity
I will post after 5pm.
- 02 Aug 2012, 19:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Insanity
Still, we mst write the way we write. No? I would like to retain the title.
My entire collection s about the progress of madness and the resolution thereof.
My entire collection s about the progress of madness and the resolution thereof.
- 02 Aug 2012, 18:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Insanity
Frank
I understand why you are confused.The poem is about 'Mother'.I have used grandmother once, great grandmother once.I will think up a title before tomorrow morning.I will be travelling and where I go there will be no internet connection,But I will somehow manage to post just the title.
I understand why you are confused.The poem is about 'Mother'.I have used grandmother once, great grandmother once.I will think up a title before tomorrow morning.I will be travelling and where I go there will be no internet connection,But I will somehow manage to post just the title.
- 02 Aug 2012, 11:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Insanity
Frank Dyer
You seem to be tuned to Indian sensibilities.Thank you for your time and patience.I would have saved both of us a lot of 'messages' if only I had listened to you,when you edited after your first reading.
You seem to be tuned to Indian sensibilities.Thank you for your time and patience.I would have saved both of us a lot of 'messages' if only I had listened to you,when you edited after your first reading.
- 01 Aug 2012, 21:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Thanks Frank and Michael
Frank
I have changed mongoose to mongooses.I am not able to spot the mistakes because I wrote it in a child's voice.So the hiccups
of language will be there.Pen has also disappeared.I have asked my daughter who is in LSE to have a look.She is an 'All India Prize' winning poet.
I have changed mongoose to mongooses.I am not able to spot the mistakes because I wrote it in a child's voice.So the hiccups
of language will be there.Pen has also disappeared.I have asked my daughter who is in LSE to have a look.She is an 'All India Prize' winning poet.
- 31 Jul 2012, 10:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Madness
Footnote Eclipse-the great Solar Eclipse of 1955 Kuttichatan--an evil spirit(can be googled) Dhamayanthi-A princess married to Nala Nala--He was a deva,so his feet could not touch the ground Yakshies--spirits of the forest Ravi Varma's art(can be googled)--Ravi Varma's paintings in the Trivandrum Ar...
- 31 Jul 2012, 09:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Re: Symptoms Of Madness
Frank Thank you for your detailed reading.The poem has been with me for more than thirty years.Unpublished,because it is too personal. Mongooses, right. We learnt that the plural of mongoose is mongoose not mongooses. I will keep cups of bras. I once saw children use a bra as a hammock for their dol...
- 28 Jul 2012, 11:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: prey
- Replies: 5
- Views: 17196
Re: prey
Octo I have taken the liberty of cut and paste because you let it aside.Now I think the poem looks neater.Forgive me if I have trespassed. I thought those pair of eyes were yours how they glared at me earlier in the day burning intensity,you became this wild predator that now stalked the trees late ...
- 28 Jul 2012, 05:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: prey
- Replies: 5
- Views: 17196
too wordy
Octo
If only you would rewrite it --perhaps with the second stanza coming first.
If only you would rewrite it --perhaps with the second stanza coming first.
- 28 Jul 2012, 05:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: the passenger seat
- Replies: 3
- Views: 12358
clarification
Is there a time gap between all three stanzas?What does the second stanza seek to do ?The word 'honey' spoils it for me.Anyway honey does not drip invitingly from the comb.
The third stanza makes sense.It can be condensed into a minimalistic poem with the title.'the passenger seat'.
The third stanza makes sense.It can be condensed into a minimalistic poem with the title.'the passenger seat'.
- 27 Jul 2012, 05:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: clarification
- Replies: 0
- Views: 8338
clarification
Is there a time gap between all three stanzas?What does the second stanza seek to do ?The word 'honey' spoils it for me.Anyway honey does not drip invitingly from the comb.
The third stanza makes sense.It can be condensed into a minimalistic poem with the title.'the passenger seat'.
The third stanza makes sense.It can be condensed into a minimalistic poem with the title.'the passenger seat'.
- 26 Jul 2012, 22:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Thatha gets ready for Death
- Replies: 1
- Views: 9068
Thatha gets ready for Death
: counting days of churning buttermilk, skimming butter, melting ghee, knowing full well the ultimate and penultimate day of being seated in a sitting posture-this Saivite, fit for burial, being lowered into a cave of mud earth, after the last ritualistic bath with ghee and milk, grandpa's daughter-...
- 23 Jul 2012, 09:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Symptomatic
- Replies: 24
- Views: 50204
Symptomatic
Symptomatic Not born with it. Eclipse swallows pushing out great grandmothers and babies, so that death and life daisy chain like phosphorescent super naturals and traffic whiz a whiz around her birth bed ; grandmother's toes draw circles in the air to shoo away haloed mongooses. Tic-toc. The tongu...
- 23 Jul 2012, 09:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "independence"
- Replies: 7
- Views: 22980
Re: "independence"
Michael and Frank I got the patriotic because of the title ,but just thought GPS was too mundane to be written in par with Divine Providence.I am learning a lot in this forum ,especially the grammar coaching of Micheal and the world politics in the American scenario,of Frank.Thanks I did not post be...