Frank---
2 poems here, me, i take the first verse as the first poem. then stop, maybe a second "political" poem later, somewhere else....
benie
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- 19 May 2018, 20:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kaunda (1972)-V2
- Replies: 8
- Views: 13372
- 19 May 2018, 06:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kaunda (1972)-V2
- Replies: 8
- Views: 13372
Re: Kenneth (1972)
FRANK--- BADLY LOST. Kanuda. did he once flirt with Red China? Kanuda, i presume, of Zambia. came to visit two or three us Presidents. one party rule for a long time. think he deserves =better then your last verse. here is Kippling: We've fought with many men acrost the seas, An' some of 'em was bra...
- 19 May 2018, 03:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Adjunct American Lit (final revision)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19998
Re: Adjunct American Lit (final revision)
I----
sure like the revised version.
descriptive lines like this fly by and grab me almost without my noticing:
,
Halfway through class
a Nigerian girl,
bold as Grace Jones,
glosses her lips
sign painter’s red,
just a grea job.
bernie
sure like the revised version.
descriptive lines like this fly by and grab me almost without my noticing:
,
Halfway through class
a Nigerian girl,
bold as Grace Jones,
glosses her lips
sign painter’s red,
just a grea job.
bernie
- 19 May 2018, 03:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe, 1849 -- revised
- Replies: 26
- Views: 34897
Re: A Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe, 1849
Bob--- on the road, no time to look at this carefully....but two impressions: this is too plain--- Drink was his last refuge, something to disappear into. compared with this: across his face, spread as obvious as winter's pale light also, fasten on the man, did he stumble? any friends? his speech pa...
- 18 May 2018, 08:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Abandoned School Bus Blues
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9858
Re: Abandoned School Bus Blues
Bob---
the image of an old school bus, so powerful as a metaphor for so much that has come before, so much that now lies wounded and disabled.
love the image of the old woman.
i join Ken and offer a second IBPC nom for this far reaching poem.
bernie
the image of an old school bus, so powerful as a metaphor for so much that has come before, so much that now lies wounded and disabled.
love the image of the old woman.
i join Ken and offer a second IBPC nom for this far reaching poem.
bernie
- 18 May 2018, 07:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Copper Colored as an Ancient Pot
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6218
Copper Colored as an Ancient Pot
The white spell of the tub.
Your lean ballerina foot
clean as the winter Bolshoi,
the water’s fevrille glass surface,
anise-scented goldenrod,
oatmeal soap. Your breasts
float weightless as a cosmonaut
and the gargoyle moon breathes
into my mouth.
Your lean ballerina foot
clean as the winter Bolshoi,
the water’s fevrille glass surface,
anise-scented goldenrod,
oatmeal soap. Your breasts
float weightless as a cosmonaut
and the gargoyle moon breathes
into my mouth.
- 17 May 2018, 01:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Old Birds - Edit 2 and Then a Short Version
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19154
Re: Old Birds - Edit 2
ah, W. C. Fields....
humor....imagine him a parrot....
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yOHGr8r5Cs4
nice line:
feathers, and gilded cages
of all shapes and sizes.
bernie
humor....imagine him a parrot....
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yOHGr8r5Cs4
nice line:
feathers, and gilded cages
of all shapes and sizes.
bernie
- 17 May 2018, 01:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10598
Re: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941
La Wally---two versions: Maria Callas--- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fJKpYnMMKKM and from French big ht film, Diva: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fJKpYnMMKKM "...then I will go away...as far as the echo from the church bell... and here, the woman that inspired my Japanese umbrella lady. https:...
- 15 May 2018, 23:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Urban Aspirations
- Replies: 10
- Views: 17965
Re: I think I may have it this time
K--- haunting. knocks me down, again and again. breathtaking imagery, so original: If only for the sake of Tuesday, I should go out for a walk with my one trick knee, laces undone for the edema. great opening. love this: I lay out my morning meds by color: azure, oyster, salmon, It is thirty seven ...
- 15 May 2018, 22:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Old Birds - Edit 2 and Then a Short Version
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19154
Re: Old Birds -Edit 1
Frank-- - Near the Thames a parrot sanctuary rests on stone haunches as double bass toots from river tugs drift over. Psittaciformes: parrots, parakeets, macaws, parottlets, amazons, rosellas, lories, lorikeets and cockatoos too. Money to open the sanctuary came from the gold rings found in the ear...
- 15 May 2018, 02:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Old Birds - Edit 2 and Then a Short Version
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19154
Re: Old Birds
Frank---/b]
dump the dickens, opening and close.
i would dump or greatly sharpen what the birds have to say.
the background is narrative material i didn't appreciate, but the overall idea here is interesting, if not very poetic.
bernie
dump the dickens, opening and close.
i would dump or greatly sharpen what the birds have to say.
the background is narrative material i didn't appreciate, but the overall idea here is interesting, if not very poetic.
bernie
- 14 May 2018, 23:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
- Replies: 17
- Views: 23490
- 14 May 2018, 09:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10598
Japanese Woman, Page 17, Life Magazine 1941
I see your photograph in a magazine,
wistful as a heavy girl in high school,
violet parasol blown sideways
in the Zephyr wind, a rainy languor
as you read the iris-white pages
of the Osaka Shinbun news,
metal glasses like the goggles
of an Imperial pilot sighting
American carriers for the first time.
wistful as a heavy girl in high school,
violet parasol blown sideways
in the Zephyr wind, a rainy languor
as you read the iris-white pages
of the Osaka Shinbun news,
metal glasses like the goggles
of an Imperial pilot sighting
American carriers for the first time.
- 13 May 2018, 21:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Rarest Light
- Replies: 10
- Views: 15879
Re: The Rarest Light
Ken--- magical subject. illusive, almost abstract. the male bets everything on one big night out, talk about Saturday Night Fever, drops back with his memory of a grand eloquent encounter to age and die alone. firefly with a pale yellow lantern. fascinating take on this marginal subject. bernie
- 13 May 2018, 11:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sister Valeria
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16314
Re: Sister Valeria
I am talking
about spectacles
convex or concave.
My German glasses
heavier than Indian.
I was named 'soda bottle'
but the clarity I forget,
except that I was proud
flaunting foreign glasses.
this line made me think you were looking in a mirror.
bernie
about spectacles
convex or concave.
My German glasses
heavier than Indian.
I was named 'soda bottle'
but the clarity I forget,
except that I was proud
flaunting foreign glasses.
this line made me think you were looking in a mirror.
bernie
- 13 May 2018, 10:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Convent School
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11630
Re: The Convent School
common shoe worn by junior and senior high school girls.
- 13 May 2018, 05:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Tenderfoot
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10279
Re: Tenderfoot
Frank---
industrial graphic.
a brave new telling of the industrial story, rich and highly visual.
i found myself just saying wow as this freight train roared by
bernie
industrial graphic.
a brave new telling of the industrial story, rich and highly visual.
i found myself just saying wow as this freight train roared by
bernie
- 13 May 2018, 05:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Naming The Beasts. Revised
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12119
Re: Naming The Beasts. Revised
Ken---
utterly stunning.
change nothing.
bernie
utterly stunning.
change nothing.
bernie
- 13 May 2018, 05:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Convent School
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11630
Re: The Convent School
Siva--- a shocking, sad glimpse into Tamil education methods. the vivid images stick deep in my brain. I heard uncle panting. This was the game of a school-hating kid. Uncle fetched my shoes as i knew he would, my school girl trick that found him returning with my saddle oxford, exhausted. but grea...
- 13 May 2018, 05:32
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sister Valeria
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16314
Re: Sister Valeria
Siva--- need i see the film first? Appa (English: Father) is a 2016 Indian Tamil-language independent drama film written, produced and directed by Samuthirakani. A sequel to Saattai (2012), the film features Samuthirakani in the lead role with Thambi Ramaiah in a supporting role. Featuring music co...
- 13 May 2018, 05:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ganbare
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6270
Re: Ganbare
Bob---
so original and refreshing to read.
might review the final verse---
a north star that to this day
my heart's compass
turns to.
two to words....for example...
a north star permanently pointed to the heart's radiant core.
etc....
but a terrific poem just as it is.
bernie
so original and refreshing to read.
might review the final verse---
a north star that to this day
my heart's compass
turns to.
two to words....for example...
a north star permanently pointed to the heart's radiant core.
etc....
but a terrific poem just as it is.
bernie
- 12 May 2018, 08:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
- Replies: 17
- Views: 23490
Re: Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
Ken:
no, i just used her title.
bernie
no, i just used her title.
bernie
- 12 May 2018, 05:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Hail to The Chief
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13087
Re: Bad Boy Trump
F---
i like this note:
I love his Mussolini pout,
his windswept hair that flaps
in the wind.
bernie
i like this note:
I love his Mussolini pout,
his windswept hair that flaps
in the wind.
bernie
- 11 May 2018, 22:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
- Replies: 17
- Views: 23490
Re: The Fierce Missing After Your Separation
Rains wash across the grain carriers, the massive ships lumber the glassine sea, the occasional whistle like a woman speaking a secret wish. The softened glimmer of their passage glows on the black ocean, I face the rains and my memories of you trail out to wrap me in restless night. The yellow ship...
- 11 May 2018, 21:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ashlyn, Attending a Friend’s Wedding Reception, Meets a Youn
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10716
Re: Ashlyn, Attending a Friend’s Wedding Reception, Meets a
Bob---
love it.
as you brush past
on the way to an aperitif table.
You pause, swinging around
slowly, sleek
and as striking as any sailboat
during Race Week.
gorgeous.
bernie
love it.
as you brush past
on the way to an aperitif table.
You pause, swinging around
slowly, sleek
and as striking as any sailboat
during Race Week.
gorgeous.
bernie