Thanks Bob, I will remove those words.BobBradshaw wrote: ↑02 Oct 2018, 08:27Who can't feel touched by such a scene? I like the verbs used in this. Nicely done
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Eira
Thanks Bob, I will remove those words.BobBradshaw wrote: ↑02 Oct 2018, 08:27Who can't feel touched by such a scene? I like the verbs used in this. Nicely done
Suggested trim: remove these lines:
impatient to begin.
Initially,
Kenneth2816 wrote:I second Eiras poem as she has written it
I'm satisfied, Frank.FranktheFrank wrote:Just suggestions Eira
It is you who needs to be satisfied.
I am happy when you are happy.
Thanks Bob.BobBradshaw wrote:Yes, I do. Very nice. The ending reads more smoothly now...Bob
FranktheFrank wrote:A rescue dog
how sweet.