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- 04 Feb 2024, 05:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Heat
- Replies: 2
- Views: 672
Re: My Heat
This is probably my favorite of yours so far that I've seen posted here. I'll read it some more and maybe come back with a suggestion, maybe not, maybe it needs nothing.
- 02 Feb 2024, 00:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 870
Re: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
Thanks Bob and Caleb.
Caleb, I write in the style William Carlos Williams in his later career--writing in the language I speak and hear spoken. Of course I do not write with his skill.
Caleb, I write in the style William Carlos Williams in his later career--writing in the language I speak and hear spoken. Of course I do not write with his skill.
- 02 Feb 2024, 00:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dervish Dance
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1314
Re: Dervish Dance
Well, I did know about dervish dancing in high school but that's not the point. N, now that he's older, is calling all his dancing a dervish dance, whether he was doing the Mashed Potatoes, the Dog, the Monkey--what the dances were called in those day--or doing the sexual mating dance.
- 01 Feb 2024, 20:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 870
DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
Does That Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me? Once, I jumped in a freezing lake, naked, in shock, quickly swam to the dock, scrambled out. It might as well have been a lake of fire. What if I'd been the burning bush, my skin as red as the time I was stung by a swarm of bees. Somehow it seems...
- 01 Feb 2024, 19:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dervish Dance
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1314
Re: Dervish Dance
Thanks Bob and Caleb
Dervish dancing is a part of the Sufi way in Islam to connect closer to God, swirling like planets, praising and meditating, a mystical practice.
Dervish dancing is a part of the Sufi way in Islam to connect closer to God, swirling like planets, praising and meditating, a mystical practice.
- 01 Feb 2024, 05:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Dream at the Beach
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1086
Re: A Dream at the Beach
Now that you mention it I think you could eliminate S2. As to the friend, without that it is still understandable, and just extraneous material and isn't needed.
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dervish Dance
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1314
Dervish Dance
Dervish Dance When I was much younger, I did the dervish dance in the Central High gymnasium. From the Mashed Potatoes to the Monkey, to the Dog. Mr. Doos kicked me out, said it was lewd. None of that while he was on watch. In my twenties I did the dervish dance with all the women. They didn't know...
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Dream at the Beach
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1086
Re: A Dream at the Beach
Just my edits, take or leave. The last line in the second stanza needs changed to me, but I hadn't come up with anything right now. A Dream at the Beach While sleeping peacefully in the guest house I half-woke to girls laughing, tittering--teen-aged girls, projecting all of the judgmental pettiness ...
- 18 Jan 2024, 20:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: blackberry pie
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2164
Re: blackberry pie
Thanks Caleb
- 18 Jan 2024, 20:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2320
Re: My Siberia
ThAnks Caleb. I will consider your suggestions.
- 18 Jan 2024, 20:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Archiving Colonization
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1737
Re: Archiving Colonization
I like the poem as is. It is very effective in its undertone. I love that N can see into his mind and likes the way he writes.
- 17 Jan 2024, 23:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: blackberry pie
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2164
Re: blackberry pie
Thanks Bob
- 17 Jan 2024, 23:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2320
Re: My Siberia
Thanks Bob
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
- Replies: 5
- Views: 5617
Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Worthy and timely choice of biographic poem, written with seeming ease to read with grace and subtlety.
- 17 Jan 2024, 22:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2320
My Siberia
My Siberia revised Maybe it's this sudden winter, mild thus far, for the record books, now below zero, frozen doors, the world cracking beneath boots, steps feel for surety, for freedom from a fall, the breath I've never noticed before, a cloud before me like vapors of dry ice, counting steps, stil...
- 17 Jan 2024, 21:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: blackberry pie
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2164
blackberry pie
blackberry pie in the middle of the first grade holding on to the real thing whatever that was blackberry bird shit on the old Edsel grandma turning purple grandpa churning and churning the world goes round thickening into this moment with each turn ice and salt cream and sugar the contradictions t...
- 17 Jan 2024, 20:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: God Lives (version 3)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1985
Re: God Lives
This is the best of the poems you've posted so far. "in desires so strong they lead to crimes"
I'm just not sure about the last line; it doesn't seem to match the quality of the rest of the poem. Maybe.
I'm just not sure about the last line; it doesn't seem to match the quality of the rest of the poem. Maybe.
- 14 Jan 2024, 01:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Nutritionist
- Replies: 21
- Views: 2821
Re: The Nutritionist
I like what Wallace Stevens said about the mind, intellect:
Poetry must resist the intelligence almost successfully.
Poetry must resist the intelligence almost successfully.
- 09 Jan 2024, 03:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The New Year's Fish
- Replies: 5
- Views: 1762
Re: The New Year's Fish
I like the stretch you take in this poem and the poem, Pilot Whale. I believe they both word in that context.
- 07 Jan 2024, 05:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sick Dog
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1266
Sick Dog
Sick Dog It's night. A cold night. I've turned up the thermostat. Heavy socks. A blanket. Chills, no fever unless the thermometer's lying. It's all a lie right now. I was grateful a half-a-day ago. Cough, cough, cough! Where's this going, back and forth between Death Valley and the arctic? My body ...
- 04 Jan 2024, 22:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: I Don't Give You Any Answers
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1673
I Don't Give You Any Answers
I Don't Give You Any Answers A drunk man kicks a puppy to death. A child sits at the feet of unrequited love, crying in the alley, waiting for God to notice. The wrong number. I won't give up easily. A will I was given that's useless. What has it ever gotten me, other than more misery upon misery. ...
- 02 Jan 2024, 03:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1945
Re: Wish You Were Here
Yeah, miss Bernie, he was one of a kind, a great poet and critic.
- 01 Jan 2024, 22:56
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1945
Re: Wish You Were Here
Thanks, Frank, but I like it the way it is.
- 29 Dec 2023, 23:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1945
Re: Wish You Were Here
Thanks, Bob, I was invoking Emily consciously.
- 29 Dec 2023, 22:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wish You Were Here
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1945
Wish You Were Here
Wish You Were Here
Clouds obscure the sun
this winter morning.
Bright days to come.
I learned my lesson.
Age and honesty
will do that,
hope it's not too late.
I'm counting on spring.
Hope is green,
and that lone, bedraggled
sparrow on a barren limb
chirping his heart out
for anyone to hear.
Clouds obscure the sun
this winter morning.
Bright days to come.
I learned my lesson.
Age and honesty
will do that,
hope it's not too late.
I'm counting on spring.
Hope is green,
and that lone, bedraggled
sparrow on a barren limb
chirping his heart out
for anyone to hear.