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- 23 Jun 2018, 21:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne - V4 Final Version
Frank--- the issue is this j ournalist didn't get her facts right. simple as that. and you base a very ugly charge (Dylan beat his wife) on that cribbed account. published online, not in a newspaper of record. And even the cribbed account does not say that Dylan beat his wife---that is simply your ...
- 23 Jun 2018, 02:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marital Adventures
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16438
Re: Marital Adventures
M---
especially appreciate the comment about sequencing.
i gave especial attention to that element of this poem.
bernie
especially appreciate the comment about sequencing.
i gave especial attention to that element of this poem.
bernie
- 23 Jun 2018, 01:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne-V3
Frank---
Francesco, the son of Caitlin and Giuseppe Fazio was born well after the death of Dylan Thomas...he had no first hand information about the domestic life of Caitlin and Dylan, more, he never says that his mother told him Dylan beat her.
the poem is yours, the facts are not.
bernie
Francesco, the son of Caitlin and Giuseppe Fazio was born well after the death of Dylan Thomas...he had no first hand information about the domestic life of Caitlin and Dylan, more, he never says that his mother told him Dylan beat her.
the poem is yours, the facts are not.
bernie
- 22 Jun 2018, 04:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marital Adventures
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16438
Re: Marital Adventures
hullo Frank--- rewriting, fussing, never satisfied: 14 May 1953 The first stage performance of Under Milk Wood, at the Poetry Center, NY. Liz Reitell recalled: “The curtain was going to rise at 8.40. Well, at 8.10 Dylan was locked in the back room with me. And no end to Under Milk Wood. He kept say...
- 22 Jun 2018, 01:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marital Adventures
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16438
Re: Marital Adventures
Bob--- thanks. i urge others to doggedly rewrite, took my own advice. swallowed my own medicine. and a little francoise hardy...her image of a ship, and others made me think.....now, she said quarter moon---thinking still about that. https://video.search.yahoo.com/search/video;_ylt=Awr9IkqN.itbvWUAO...
- 21 Jun 2018, 06:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Iolo's Stand - V3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 19916
Re: Iolo's Stand - V3
Frank--- great idea. I see a young woman rubbing a muscled right arm of a warrior. her hand traces a large scar. the man's dog at their feet, but vigilant, we back away and see his bow. the fire is low, it is almost sunrise. he stands, she does not release his arm and is pulled slowly, reluctantly,...
- 21 Jun 2018, 02:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Iolo's Stand - V3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 19916
Re: Iolo's Stand - V3
Frank--- the ecstasy of gold, from the movie w clint eastwood. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1pyZt-BsgnI&list=RD4niv522mbtM&index=8 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KkM71JPHfjk&list=RD4niv522mbtM&start_radio=1 good bad and ugly with danish national orchestra whistler, soprano, clap board, female c...
- 20 Jun 2018, 22:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe - August version
- Replies: 14
- Views: 21182
Re: A Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe, 1849 - June version
a tough choice, but I think V5.
glad to see you stay with this troubled man and get the poem you wanted for him.
bernie
glad to see you stay with this troubled man and get the poem you wanted for him.
bernie
- 20 Jun 2018, 21:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marital Adventures
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16438
Re: Marital Adventures
Guys---
the aged lion in winter, feeling romantic.
bernie
the aged lion in winter, feeling romantic.
bernie
- 20 Jun 2018, 04:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Iolo's Stand - V3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 19916
Re: Iolo's Stand - V2
As the Romans abandoned Pretania, the Frisian raiders invaded the undefended Brittainy coast bringing new slaughter and mayhem. They made sacrifice to their gods by cutting out the pulsing lungs of victims to form angels wings. i suggest making this a little less like a history lesson with dates......
- 20 Jun 2018, 03:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Marital Adventures
- Replies: 11
- Views: 16438
Marital Adventures
V-1 My wife kisses slowly, A fortune teller with secrets At each turn of the cards. I kiss back, Indian Summer Opens for us in gold leaves Under frail, wandering stars. Love folds us in stupor, We are picnickers lolled On the grass of a city park. She is a Courvoisier Napoleon Running inside my brai...
- 20 Jun 2018, 02:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One Of A Macabre
- Replies: 10
- Views: 15958
Re: One Of A Macabre
M--- we met four years ago. you wrote this poem: The Umbilical Cord -- Invisible A Year After Three hours from the last one the baby had to be fed. Unusual of all times the baby , Veda, slept Maitiri, the mother was fast asleep while the hours eloped in speed milk from Maitiri's bosom tripped, drop...
- 19 Jun 2018, 00:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe, 1849 -- revised
- Replies: 26
- Views: 34931
Re: A Daguerreotype of Edgar Allan Poe, 1849 -- revised
Bob: Ah, V4 works far better for me. ....thin, closed lips. Two years before his child bride and wife of eleven years, Virginia-- might reconsider: Virginia-- --as charming as a robin singing at dawn-- of blood. But when that first small drop trembled on her lower lip, Poe had assured her it was ju...
- 16 Jun 2018, 20:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne-V3
Frank--- version 3 is smooth. but i ask again, what is the source for this: ...in drink, debauched in decadence he beat Caitlin for her troubles, beat that beautiful woman, beat the devil in . but still no indication that he was a rock star poet, no indication of his humor, self abnegation, long ma...
- 15 Jun 2018, 22:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: One Of A Macabre
- Replies: 10
- Views: 15958
Re: One Of A Macabre
M--- clever, exceptional. That is his procedure, governed by integers the accounting practice commensurate with his tactics but i want a plot. your poem does not delight and shiver me, your poem seems to request admiration, but not counsel for the broken hearted, the estranged and dumped. poetry lo...
- 15 Jun 2018, 22:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne
Frank--- he died in new york. 1953. Caitlin in this marvelous and lashing interview with Vincent Kane, says she went to see him, drunk on the plane. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dQzcQ1KVFaM ushered in to him, and Dylan silent under an oxygen tent, she sat and and rolled a cigarette.... no, no ki...
- 15 Jun 2018, 20:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne
Frank--- better, but still much too long. and too many warblers.... and the symphony of the sedge warbler's call, an infinite variety of songs in series, ratchet trills and warbled peeps. No one warbler's-call the same, and other uses of the words later in the poem. still seems flat. this man was o...
- 14 Jun 2018, 19:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The First Time I Drank With My Father
- Replies: 9
- Views: 15884
Re: The First Time I Drank With My Father
Kenneth: This poem never forgets to introduce plot . the idea, in the title and last verse, that a tension exists between son and father---the reasons are not given, good. not needed. the poem is almost savage in its building and compilation of facts, history and mood. a great triumph here, a memora...
- 13 Jun 2018, 21:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Man Smoking Cigarette at the Beach
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14326
Re: Man Smoking Cigarette at the Beach
Revision (2) And now sad to say it is too short we are left wanting prose....Frank OK, Frank, here's more...bernie His cigarette smoke is pushed softly by burrows of wind to ocean cliff diners gathered to parse grilled mussel, they order bass under rippled umbrellas and flags, among orders for a ca...
- 13 Jun 2018, 21:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed at Laugharne
Frank---
ah, there's your poem.....
bernie
ah, there's your poem.....
bernie
- 13 Jun 2018, 04:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Puffins
- Replies: 9
- Views: 13989
Re: Puffins
Bob:
sweet, adult and replete with warmth.
i like the tenderness that the poem uses to tell the story. the details, the contrasts and insights.
bernie
sweet, adult and replete with warmth.
i like the tenderness that the poem uses to tell the story. the details, the contrasts and insights.
bernie
- 13 Jun 2018, 04:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Shed at Laugharne
I had not seen this film about Dylan, just magnificent.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QDAXkhTwTFM
bernie
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QDAXkhTwTFM
bernie
- 11 Jun 2018, 22:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Shed at Laugharne
Frank--- not a cooperative subject---distance, language and poetry. ,. . . on a clifftop overlooking a brick built boathouse painted lemon. No ty bach here. what does this mean? distance does not improve the heart....i wish to see the man, to become engaged quickly....no what i mean? The poet once ...
- 10 Jun 2018, 01:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed for publishing
- Replies: 31
- Views: 41357
Re: Wooden Shed sat opn a Hill at Laugharne
Frank---- telly. poem runs the risk of becoming maudlin, making thomas boring... let's hear the rage....feel the man. what smells can you offer? he liked cockle and bacon chowder. frying sausage. nights curled with his wife against the wind, a short glass of Penderyn single malt...finishing with a ...
- 08 Jun 2018, 20:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Teuton Golden Haired Maiden
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9452
Re: Teuton Golden Haired Maiden
Frank--- the first 11 or 12 lines daze and blur. here's the pom: There she was browned, with sweat gathered in the dimple of her back, downy hair sun-goldened that disappeared into her bikini and it was as if all foot traffic stalled as it came across her, stalled, slowed to take in, glance and bas...