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by BobBradshaw
30 Dec 2023, 23:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: William Davenant.  Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me
Replies: 6
Views: 1393

William Davenant.  Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me

v2: William Davenant.  Shakespeare Was More Than Godfather To Me Oft Shakespeare dropped by the Crown Tavern at Oxon on his way to Stratford. He loved to jest with Mother,   who, when around musicians and players, was as lively as any minuet. I take pleasure in the rumor that Will fathered me a bast...
by BobBradshaw
30 Dec 2023, 22:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Drives and Driveways
Replies: 4
Views: 1067

Re: Drives and Driveways

An explanation would help. I add titles to my haiku as well…
by BobBradshaw
29 Dec 2023, 23:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1841

Re: Wish You Were Here

It’s a good image.
by BobBradshaw
29 Dec 2023, 22:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Wish You Were Here
Replies: 7
Views: 1841

Re: Wish You Were Here

Good ending. Well done, efficient poem. Reminds me of Emily’s hope is a feathered thing. But any line with hope and bird would inevitably invoke Emily.
by BobBradshaw
29 Dec 2023, 22:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Re: Ode to a Rug

Thanks, Michael. I like the worn rug suggestion. I will change the title.

It’s been a lot of fun for me as well working with so many talented poets…. The enjoyment of reading so many good poems at this site has been a literary blessing.

Enjoy the new year… all of it!
Bob
by BobBradshaw
29 Dec 2023, 02:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: From This to That (version 2)
Replies: 5
Views: 1073

Re: From This to That

Sorry, I missed this. It’s a good draft. I like the first 3 poignant stanzas a lot. The specifics put me right there. For example, I love “Rubbermaid trays”, a good example of great detail. The contrast between how the mother took care of plants before and after her illness works very well. The four...
by BobBradshaw
28 Dec 2023, 22:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Chandler's Assistant
Replies: 2
Views: 894

Re: Ship Chandler's Assistant

Fun poem. I liked the breast imagery, and the humor throughout. Its innocence has a Norwegian Wood vibe to it.
by BobBradshaw
28 Dec 2023, 08:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Re: Ode to a Rug

It's just the way I hear it spoken....I did change the title, and work forgiveness into a line, per your suggestions....enjoy new year's!
by BobBradshaw
28 Dec 2023, 05:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Re: Ode to a Rug

Thanks for your comments, Caleb. I’ve tweaked the poem.
by BobBradshaw
28 Dec 2023, 00:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Re: Hair Loss

Ha! Maybe
by BobBradshaw
27 Dec 2023, 22:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Showman Catches Bullets in His Belt
Replies: 4
Views: 944

Re: The Showman who Catches Bullets in a Stomach Pouch

I like it all except for the last stanza. I wanted more of a punch line.
by BobBradshaw
27 Dec 2023, 22:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Re: Hair Loss

Thanks, Caleb. I agree the title isn’t memorable. I’m open to suggestions, even wild funny ones….
by BobBradshaw
27 Dec 2023, 06:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ode to a Worn Rug
Replies: 12
Views: 1792

Ode to a Worn Rug

V2: Ode to a Worn Rug To hide my naked head, I wear a rug which mimics a dead cat. Ah, how forgiving old age is! No one wants to embarrass an ambassador of dementia by pointing to it. I move through the markets with my headdress of a cat, chin up, haughty like a model who’s graced the covers of Vogu...
by BobBradshaw
26 Dec 2023, 00:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Christmas Day 2023
Replies: 3
Views: 1188

Re: Christmas Day 2023

Lovely close, the love for the grandson

The thrill of Christmas
Day soon grown old
like the new game or toy.
I see in his heart the desire
for the joy that lasts.
by BobBradshaw
26 Dec 2023, 00:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Senryu About Chips on Christmas Day
Replies: 1
Views: 714

Re: Senryu About Chips on Christmas Day

Well done…. You’re really good at this gorm
by BobBradshaw
25 Dec 2023, 02:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Big Guy
Replies: 22
Views: 12662

Re: Big Guy

I love the revision you have started here, Ieuan. Hope to see more soon….Merry Christmas, my friend.
by BobBradshaw
24 Dec 2023, 02:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
Replies: 14
Views: 1527

Re: The Sky (version 3!)

This works. Good poem. Enjoy the holidays.
by BobBradshaw
23 Dec 2023, 00:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
Replies: 14
Views: 1527

Re: The Sky (new version)

This is good, and a fine revision. My only quibble may be with the line about the son being under the father's Thumb. Why is Thumb but not father capitalized? Also, for me this is the weakest line. It isn't as good as the others...maybe because it doesn't feel necessary. I know poets tend to focus o...
by BobBradshaw
21 Dec 2023, 02:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisions
Replies: 7
Views: 4345

Re: Revisions

Feel free, my friend. Clouds have been referred to as blankets forever. I don’t recall one being referred to as a “thin blanket” in a poem before, but it probably has been. So you won’t be stealing anything. No need to “cover” yourself!
by BobBradshaw
21 Dec 2023, 00:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Sky (version 3!)
Replies: 14
Views: 1527

Re: The Sky

This is good. Your best piece. I like it all. No suggestions. My fave line: The sky has been debunked.
by BobBradshaw
21 Dec 2023, 00:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisions
Replies: 7
Views: 4345

Re: Revisions

Thank you for your kind words. There is no older version. I didn’t start a new thread. No one had commented on it previously. So I “tweaked” it to resurrect it.
by BobBradshaw
20 Dec 2023, 07:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisions
Replies: 7
Views: 4345

Re: Revisions

Tweaked