I recommend Michael's 'Victorio's Secret' and Billy's 'this is me' for the July IBPC.
Siva
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- 01 Jul 2013, 06:33
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC July 2013:
- Replies: 2
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- 23 Jun 2013, 05:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Trunkshow (for all seasons)
- Replies: 3
- Views: 11237
Re: Trunkshow (for all seasons)
Michael
Your 'minimalist' poems are posted only when they reach perfection.Enjoyed reading and also smiled at the undercurrent humour in it.
Siva
Your 'minimalist' poems are posted only when they reach perfection.Enjoyed reading and also smiled at the undercurrent humour in it.
Siva
- 09 Jun 2013, 21:25
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC for June 2013:
- Replies: 8
- Views: 19421
Re: Upcoming IBPC for June 2013:
Michael and Billy
I feel happy that both your poems have gone.And I am also happy that my poem ,"The Birthing of Snakes" has not gone, because it has not been worked on.I was away from our group for a week or so and that is why I did not see Rus's message. There will be better poems later on.
Siva
I feel happy that both your poems have gone.And I am also happy that my poem ,"The Birthing of Snakes" has not gone, because it has not been worked on.I was away from our group for a week or so and that is why I did not see Rus's message. There will be better poems later on.
Siva
- 08 Jun 2013, 13:45
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC for June 2013:
- Replies: 8
- Views: 19421
Re: Upcoming IBPC for June 2013:
Sorry,did not see this thread.If there is still time ,then I would like to send my poem ,The Birthing of Snakes'.It is my unpublished poem.My e-mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com The Birthing Of Snakes He began going to the Black MarieAmman around and around the snake pit, as I swallowed the r...
- 06 Jun 2013, 06:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Talking To Myself Without Praying
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17812
Re: Talking To Myself Without Praying
''The father will save you,''
is that a Biblical reference?
is that a Biblical reference?
- 05 Jun 2013, 06:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Those Controversial Diamonds(removed)
- Replies: 0
- Views: 6995
Those Controversial Diamonds(removed)
I thought that chunk of a paragraph could pass off as a prose poem,but after several readings it reads like bad prose.So I have removed it.
I will be more careful in future before posting.
S
I will be more careful in future before posting.
S
- 04 Jun 2013, 19:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Automatic Writing on Silence.
- Replies: 3
- Views: 11276
Re: Automatic Writing on Silence.
Billy
Thanks.for your suggestions.Can you please read this once more?
Thanks.for your suggestions.Can you please read this once more?
- 03 Jun 2013, 20:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Talking To Myself Without Praying
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17812
Re: Talking To Myself Without Praying
Billy
I thought of Donne when I read your first line.
How can I love you
The poem is compact,though I don't get the image of the man with the gun.Keep it as it is.Michael usually has some edit points.I have been reading this so many time but the meaning still remains obscure.
S
I thought of Donne when I read your first line.
How can I love you
The poem is compact,though I don't get the image of the man with the gun.Keep it as it is.Michael usually has some edit points.I have been reading this so many time but the meaning still remains obscure.
S
- 03 Jun 2013, 20:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Longplayer
- Replies: 3
- Views: 12859
Re: Longplayer
This is automatic writing.You should edit it.
- 03 Jun 2013, 20:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Automatic Writing on Silence.
- Replies: 3
- Views: 11276
Automatic Writing on Silence.
The sisters of the Holy Angels, sisters self imprisoned, self sacrificed, in the alter of God, voluntarily. Only some hear the calling others flee the insecure world and rush into cloisters; confused, they go into retreat hoping to find divine answers. But a few follow the voice, lose their own and ...
- 30 May 2013, 07:14
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Our past present and futureS ARE written on palm many thosan
- Replies: 3
- Views: 12604
Our past present and futureS ARE written on palm many thosan
1980 The Black–MarieAmman Temple Devotees struggle to the ant hill temple and the undisturbed snakes inside---they lug in offerings of milk and eggs, fangs puncture holes in these eggs until the yellow and white stream down; you picked up a small kernel of muck and swallowed but I could not even go ...
- 22 May 2013, 22:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17687
Re: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
Michael
I am not able to edit this immediately.Maybe early next week. I would like to keep your lines
lethargic as a photo shoot
put to rest on a living room table
I am not able to edit this immediately.Maybe early next week. I would like to keep your lines
lethargic as a photo shoot
put to rest on a living room table
- 22 May 2013, 20:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17687
Re: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
Thank you Michael for the coaching.I agree with you.It is too wordy.I have seen your poem and read it many times previously.
- 21 May 2013, 09:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17687
Re: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
Billy I wrote this after reading a news paper cutting. See this link https://www.google.co.in/url?sa=t&rct=j&q=&esrc=s&source=web&cd=10&cad=rja&ved=0CHgQtwIwCQ&url=http%3A%2F%2Fibnlive.in.com%2Fnews%2Ffarmer-suicides-increase-at-an-alarming-rate%2F140746-3.html&ei=VAGbUdOxLcaMrQfx5YCABg&usg=AFQjCNGl...
- 21 May 2013, 06:18
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Congrats Billy! 1st Place!
- Replies: 2
- Views: 9045
Re: Congrats Billy! 1st Place!
Congrats Billy !
You deserve the first, and you are one among us and that makes me happy.
You deserve the first, and you are one among us and that makes me happy.
- 20 May 2013, 06:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit
- Replies: 4
- Views: 14230
Re: started as a semi-sonnet, but extended via the conceit
Michael
I have read this so many times.It sounds pristine.I have nothing more intelligent to say.
I have read this so many times.It sounds pristine.I have nothing more intelligent to say.
- 19 May 2013, 20:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: [size=150]Purana Quila[/size]
- Replies: 6
- Views: 18826
Re: [size=150]Purana Quila[/size]
Billy You are right. There should be no quotation mark after treasure. ''A fort,'' he said, ''a great treasure of India.'' Daddy's history also a great treasure; Frank Thanks.This is one of my travelogue poems.When I visit a place I write something to help me remember. Woetrame Thank you.I must try ...
- 19 May 2013, 08:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: [i]Facera---To Do [/i]
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17687
[i]Facera---To Do [/i]
This photo-file--- many times removed from reality, hot-hot throw up of golden orange fire-stuff ethereal and looming like Popocatapetl at work. Turnaround here, as static as the Diu Fort there are scenes of farmers enacting suicides and que vive? We are 'au courant,' feckless of this friction, leth...
- 12 May 2013, 21:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Black Power in Sioux City 1968
- Replies: 1
- Views: 7471
Re: Black Power in Sioux City 1968
Billy
Read several times.Like what I read.It will take me a couple of days to say anything sensible.
Read several times.Like what I read.It will take me a couple of days to say anything sensible.
- 11 May 2013, 21:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17004
Re: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
Thank you Billy.Michael did everything.I am glad to represent the board with both of you.
- 06 May 2013, 06:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "Go ask Hamlet, I know he'll know"
- Replies: 3
- Views: 12351
Re: "Go ask Hamlet, I know he'll know"
Michael
I am sorry I have been away from the group for some time.This is ,'just an ounce of poetry".Please send this poem and represent the board.
Wishing well.
Siva
I am sorry I have been away from the group for some time.This is ,'just an ounce of poetry".Please send this poem and represent the board.
Wishing well.
Siva
- 04 May 2013, 22:13
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming IBPC for May 2013:
- Replies: 5
- Views: 16221
Re: Upcoming IBPC for May 2013:
Thank you Michael for suggesting my poem. This is my unpublished poem and I am not representing any other group.My e-mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com "My First Smocked Chemise" In the cloister, the sisters stitched their secret; through pigeon-holes we watched their thimbles wondering if it ...
- 02 May 2013, 22:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17004
Re: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
Michael
I will look into this in the morning.I am too tired now.
Thank you.
I will look into this in the morning.I am too tired now.
Thank you.
- 02 May 2013, 07:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17004
Re: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
Michael
Thank you.I wish you would tell me in a more direct way what I should do. Streamline the earlier stanzas.I will try.I know you will make more suggestions,once I have tried.
Thank you.I wish you would tell me in a more direct way what I should do. Streamline the earlier stanzas.I will try.I know you will make more suggestions,once I have tried.
- 30 Apr 2013, 23:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
- Replies: 6
- Views: 17004
Remembering My First Smocked Chemise
Edited "My First Smocked Chemise" In the cloister, the sisters stitched their secret; through pigeon-holes we watched their thimbles wondering if it was a pear, peacock or push-cart. Pastel shades of nylon baby gowns with smocked busts and baby frills alternated with coloured embroidery. Each stitch...