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- 16 Dec 2018, 23:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Renaming Constellations
- Replies: 9
- Views: 18462
Renaming Constellations
Renaming Constellations Six years ago I almost died. I don't worry about small things. So when my plumbing starts to tremble like a small child under a cold shower, the bones of the house knocking, I shrug. A week ago the lights went out. Now I don't spend my nights in the narcotic stare of the TV. ...
- 16 Dec 2018, 22:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: celebrating a 53rd anniversary
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14333
Re: celebrating a 53rd anniversary
I like this sweet, warm holiday piece.....Dodging the Rain is looking for holiday and new year pieces...send them this one
- 16 Dec 2018, 02:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels
- Replies: 4
- Views: 11140
Re: Whiskey for Buffalo Nickels
Really love the ending
- 15 Dec 2018, 00:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cuddles And Giggles
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14205
Re: Cuddles And Giggles
Maybe just trimming would help... The little one my grand daughter ever affectionate looks at me with no sign of recognition. The day before we played hide and seek, leaving no corner of the house unexplored. Now I go close to her she runs away terrified... This being a wedding, relatives and friend...
- 14 Dec 2018, 23:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Koodangkulam Power Plant
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11197
Re: The Koodangkulam Power Plant
Diva, I like this... but it can be better... the first 2 stanzas are not as clear as the last. I like the clarity and conversational tone of the last stanza...my only suggestion for the close would be to replace the “man made miracles” with something specific. Just a thought... since we’re all famil...
- 14 Dec 2018, 21:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Baudelaire
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12252
Re: Baudelaire
Thx, Siva, for liking the closing
- 14 Dec 2018, 10:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Baudelaire
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12252
Re: Baudelaire
Thanks, Michael.....appreciate the feedback..Bob
- 11 Dec 2018, 22:15
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Baudelaire
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12252
Re: Baudelaire
revised...let me know what you think...Bob
- 11 Dec 2018, 21:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Creature from the Black Lagoon - revised
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6418
Re: Creature from the Black Lagoon - revised
Thanks, Michael...I like your suggestion...I will apply it
- 10 Dec 2018, 22:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Miracle of Flight
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13195
Re: The Miracle of Flight
The more I read this poem, the more I like it....
- 10 Dec 2018, 21:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Creature from the Black Lagoon - revised
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6418
Creature from the Black Lagoon - revised
v2: Creature from the Black Lagoon My mother had warned me about older boys who hung out with my big brother. Especially Jamie, a thirteen year old with bubble eyes, his gaze always drifting across my chest. He was obsessed with the film Creature from the Black Lagoon , and like that half-fish monst...
- 10 Dec 2018, 21:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Baudelaire
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12252
Re: Baudelaire
Thanks, Michael...I will keep your thoughts in mind...enjoy the holidays!
- 08 Dec 2018, 23:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Baudelaire
- Replies: 7
- Views: 12252
Baudelaire
v2: Baudelaire Loud cries of his creditors warped the air as he dodged them everyday just outside his cheap hotel. New loans were harder to secure than a kind review. Weren’t horse droppings in the streets more popular than his poems? Convicted of obscenity, even his mother avoided him. Disgust-- gr...
- 07 Dec 2018, 21:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cuddles And Giggles
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14205
Re: Cuddles And Giggles
Meena, I really relate and like the opening....it grabs me....too much telling follows, but these lines are excellent: The little one my grand daughter ever affectionate looks at me with no sign of recognition. The day before we played together she hiding, I seeking, leaving no corner of the house e...
- 07 Dec 2018, 05:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Removed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7010
Re: Christmas in Wales
I love the lush details...I could quote anywhere...
When Simoom blew,
from the west, from beyond the Alboran Sea,
the town awoke to a covering of fine red dust
from the Sahara and brought thousands of swallows
and swifts piping, feeding on the wind.
When Simoom blew,
from the west, from beyond the Alboran Sea,
the town awoke to a covering of fine red dust
from the Sahara and brought thousands of swallows
and swifts piping, feeding on the wind.
- 30 Nov 2018, 21:35
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming December IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 9
- Views: 23087
Re: Upcoming December IBPC 2018:
I am not eligible this month, but I nominate “Indian Summer”, “From the wooden hut” and “the miracle of flight”.
- 27 Nov 2018, 05:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Miracle of Flight
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13195
Re: The Miracle of Flight
I think everyone who has been ina long term relationship can identity with this poem, the fight, the walking away, needing some space... enjoyed
- 22 Nov 2018, 06:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11392
Re: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
Thx everyone for sharing! I appreciate it
- 19 Nov 2018, 06:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11392
Re: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
Thx, Ken, for the suggestion...will do
- 18 Nov 2018, 00:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11392
Nannerl on Wolfi’s Tour Through Italy
Nannerl on Wolfi's Tour through Italy For audiences it was the wonder of it. Wolfi, who could believe children could play so beautifully, five and eleven year olds playing harpsichord and violin as well as anyone? We created a language for our imaginary Kingdom of Back, our words as mysterious to ad...
- 17 Nov 2018, 04:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Indian Summer -revision
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11062
Re: Indian Summer
I like this a lot...you capture the landscape well, and imaginatively
Love the close:
We waltz in a whirlwind
of copper and lime
foliage flurrying across
baked terrain.
East wind blasts
a spangled rime -
vaporizing into brume.
Love the close:
We waltz in a whirlwind
of copper and lime
foliage flurrying across
baked terrain.
East wind blasts
a spangled rime -
vaporizing into brume.
- 06 Nov 2018, 10:07
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Wooden Hut - removed for Publication
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13325
Re: Tribute of a Wooden Hut
I like the style you're developing, mixing in local slang....love the cockney her-indoors...the stanza is hilarious. I would move the third stanza up as the second stanza...the flow of the Vernon theme would improve. I especially like the next to last stanza...the writing is so good....I think you n...
- 05 Nov 2018, 04:44
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 17
- Views: 35379
Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
I accept for “Verlaine’s Young Wife Boards a Train” if picked. Bob Bradshaw Email bobbybradshw@yahoo.com The poem is original and mine. I am not representing any other forum. Verlaine's Young Wife Boards A Train Paul cupped my face in his hands and swore he wouldn't let his life be controlled by a ...
- 05 Nov 2018, 02:56
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 17
- Views: 35379
Re: Upcoming November IBPC 2018:
I accept for “Verlaine’s Young Wife Boards a Train” if picked.
- 03 Nov 2018, 07:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ghost
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14264
Re: Ghost
good one, Michael