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Love lingers long harbours in dark corners Thoughts return relive and love again Years after you left your scent remains an indentation on your pillow. In time it fades memories brought it back to haunt Working in the garden I heard your laughter shake the withered leaves I hear you open the gate se...

It's based on some of your poms Bernie
maybe you didn't get it

Version III .............................Juncker at Bertram's .............. .......... ........... ......... the Duchy of Cagliostro never could .......... be the council ............ broadens .... horizons ....................... I met Rachael ............... lush in her Princess Soraya dress, fro...

Bernie is Bogart
isn't he.

Thanks Eira so nice to see you posting here and well done, very well done on your first at the IBPC how grand two Welsh persons on this one forum we might outnumber the Yankees one day. I suppose this will never be finished, I'm aware of the awkward sentence, might even be bad grammar but somehow I ...

Bernie
It was just a doodle of mine
but your critique
marvellous really
what fun
Yes, I am lazy I could do better
and should
and I will, as long as you keep writing these marvellous critiques.

Fun

best

In the winter of '46 I often sat in the bay to look at the crazy-paving and moss-covered birdbath. Sparrows clustered for a drink, in summer showered. Mam supplemented them with bread crusts to get them through the colder days. Few birds were able to endure toxic air, our homes spewed fumes, smoke a...

Just a bit of fun from serious stuff Gracy,
if they do take over they may leave Patagonia alone
not enough people there and too much dust for their sensitive joints.
Thanks.

It's a good topic Meena and could become a good poem and as you say yourself needs much polishing. Getting rid of the basic errors of typos and grammar would help. L4 legs ache,t he hip pleads. [can you see the typo] L5 I stand, pause, sit [should be and shift other wise comma after sit or a dash] L...

Well done Eira for 1st place
so pleased to see you receive recognition for Penshells.

Hope to see you posting here soon.

Best wishes

Ieuan

Thanks Ken
I sent it out to Rat's Ass Review today 1300 hours.

Thanks Ken

this is all good stuff
I think I will change S6 to read:

He unveiled his interest and it came
like a gust from the peaks
ice-pure . . .

many thanks

Thanks Gracy
How could you start a revolution, impossible,
you are just writing your thoughts honestly and helpfully,
who could take exception to that.

I will adjust and thanks again.

Best wishes

I'm bumping up this final version
in the hope it will be considered
in October.

Since two have already been chosen to represent the board it narrows it down to just one, and out of the batch of very good poems I must say one stands out. Any of Bernie's poms could go this month, but I especially like: Not Illegal in Mississippi posted on the 12th September. ***** Thanks to those...

Churchill called it his Black Dog

it's a terrible low place to be Bernie

It's no use anyone telling one to buck up or get out of it

It will get better, but when I don't know

Been there and I hope never again.

God bless.

From the British Institute for the Design of Robot Technology A paper on the design of safety features considered core to the Development of advanced robotics with the capacity of independent analysis and action. LEGAL: Highly recommended and necessary action by parliament, to make law the following...

Dang, and I though some might be pleased i'd cut to the core. Maudlin is a shaker, but if you say so. Yes, a tear jerker. I'll change howls, i see it now, hackneyed. Maybe roars, slashes. This is a tidy up of last month or the month before. Bereft has to go, okay, archaic. A crowd pleaser, well at l...

Gracy You have had some wonderful critiques, the last one from Bernie is a masterclass on action writing. As soon as Steinbeck starts his passage one is wrapped in the language, even though prose, it is spellbinding. It's better to start with action: Pitched through the door by a blast of wind from ...

N.B. Revised words in bold. The black capped peaks tower over the valley clear of snow, so fierce the gales there. The wind soughs down the valley it chitters the roof slates, shakes the chimney pots and rattles the latch like a poltergeist. A crab apple sprig brushes the kitchen window pane, beggar...

Deep Bernie
Did not think of it like that
but you are right
it could be a poem on its own.

Thanks for reading and commenting
Hope the blues recede.

How to do it though, that's the rub.

Best wishes

This is by far the best month long efforts of Writer's block

Maybe it's better not to explain poems.

Thanks for all the comments.

I accept Ken's nomination for my poem: The Hallstand Photograph (1914) originally posted 31 August 2017 and revised this September. I also accept the hint of a nomination from Bob for Rust Red posted 7 September and revised since. If any of these two were seconded I would be pleased to represent the...