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SivaRamanathan
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Vastu

#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 12 Feb 2018, 22:34

in lotus position
a Buddha absorbs
all positive ions




A serene Buddha
absorbs all
positive ions.

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Re: Vastu

#2 Post by Bernie01 » 13 Feb 2018, 02:04

S---

a few tricks to convert the water into poetic wine...

use color
use an animal
find a physical metaphor


A serene Buddha,
a dancing peacock
in red thought.


otherwise, the buddha image remains passive and stereotypical for most readers. give us something to jolt our preconceptions, nes pas?

bernie

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#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 13 Feb 2018, 05:21

 
Hi Siva,

it was the image/metaphor of "ions" that *captivated* me - I found that your image makes the scientific harmonious with the meditative -

and I find that Admirable


I suggest "absorbs" b/c "captures" is not a freed & peaceful status.

"absorbs" connotes a warm reception - like a caress or embrace.


I share with you now what I heard earlier upon finding & reading the excerpted cameo in its own post as a micro-poem:

in lotus position
a Buddha absorbs
all positive ions


^^ calmly & quietly charged

8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: Vastu

#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 13 Feb 2018, 10:55

Michael

I have my doubts now. Should it be 'absorbs' or 'emits' ?

S

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#5 Post by FranktheFrank » 13 Feb 2018, 11:00

Absorb is to take in, soak up

Emit is to radiate out

or consult a dictionary, Collins or Oxford both good.

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#6 Post by SivaRamanathan » 13 Feb 2018, 12:41

Frank

I know that.But what should a 'Buddha' do? Absorb or emit positivity?

S

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#7 Post by FranktheFrank » 13 Feb 2018, 18:56

And through Budda's teachings he emits
goodness long after his death.

So both.

Hope that helps.

I am not a Buddist but I can see that he
was a good man and teacher.

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#8 Post by SivaRamanathan » 13 Feb 2018, 19:11

Frank

Maybe only a Buddhist can answer that.I met an English poet John Drew who wrote many Buddha poems.

S

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#9 Post by Bernie01 » 13 Feb 2018, 22:49

example from the Russian poet:



by Anna Akhmatova

The evening light is broad and yellow,
Tender, the April chill.
You are many years late,
Yet I'm glad you are here.

Sit down now, close to me,
And look with joyful eyes:
Here it is, the blue notebook -
Filled with my childhood poems.

Forgive me that I lived in sorrow,
Rejoiced too little in the sun.
Forgive, forgive, that I mistook
Too many others for you.


the surprise, bitter sweet conclusion from a woman who survived the Stalinist era..


bernie

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#10 Post by Bernie01 » 13 Feb 2018, 23:13

...what should a 'Buddha' do? Absorb or emit positivity?


the Buddha is absorption, the Buddha is positivity. YES/NO

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Re: Vastu

#11 Post by SivaRamanathan » 14 Feb 2018, 05:27

B

Right. The operative word is 'is'.

S

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Re: Vastu

#12 Post by Michael (MV) » 14 Feb 2018, 08:21

 
Buddha in lotus position
& pleasantly plump
from absorbing all
those positive ions

breathe in breathe out
absorb reflect


Buddha is plump from the absorption
spiritually sated
full-filled

what's up next - Nirvana

8)

Michael (MV) on a mardi gras high - le Buddha gras

 

 
 
 

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Re: Vastu

#13 Post by SivaRamanathan » 14 Feb 2018, 09:11

After 'Nirvana' only Siddhartha or Gautama becomes 'Buddha' 'the Enlightened One.'

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#14 Post by Michael (MV) » 16 Feb 2018, 02:11

 
Parinirvana Day, or Nirvana Day February 15th: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parinirvana_Day

^^ interesting - serendipitous - about the time of Valentine's -

for isn't dying the ultimate, absolute ecstasy - Nirvana


is la petite mort the promise to Eternity
the promise kept & fulfilled
It is done

Ex
o
dust

8)

Michael (MV) mingling the Oriental & Occidental
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: Vastu

#15 Post by SivaRamanathan » 16 Feb 2018, 09:11

Michael
You must post this as your poem.

S

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