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Posted: 28 May 2012, 00:47
by Billy
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Re: I Must Do This Myself

Posted: 30 May 2012, 01:13
by penumbra
Billy,

This one seems a bit rushed, jumping from one image to another to another in a whisk. It also 'sounds' too much like many other poems I read around diverse poetry groups.

The imagery is good, as yours usually are.

pen