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#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 27 Jul 2012, 05:48

Is there a time gap between all three stanzas?What does the second stanza seek to do ?The word 'honey' spoils it for me.Anyway honey does not drip invitingly from the comb.
The third stanza makes sense.It can be condensed into a minimalistic poem with the title.'the passenger seat'.

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