Holding Up My Pants

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Billy
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Holding Up My Pants

#1 Post by Billy » 22 Apr 2013, 05:37

Holding Up My Pants

I hold the light
between my thumb
and index finger
like holding up
my pants
that day in the woods.
You had a wildflower
between your teeth,
kept looking up
into the trees
and smiling.

Michael (MV)
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Re: Holding Up My Pants

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 22 Apr 2013, 06:08

kept looking up
into the trees
and buzzing with a grin.

or

kept looking up
into the trees
and buzzing with a broad smile.



back to the top half:

The light
between my thumb
and index finger,
like holding up
my pants
that day in the woods.



8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
  
 
 
 

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