u
lifting
out of mo rning
sees sun
She arise
a lang-ku
Re: a lang-ku
Not sure what to say about this one, Michael. I'm not real good with these short, coded ones, if it is coded. I'm trying to feel an image here, of course, the morning and sunrise and She. Will reread a few times aloud and maybe get back if I can think of anything to say to help.
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Michael (MV)
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Re: a lang-ku
Hi Billy,
"lang-ku" a combo of genre "language poetry" and "haiku."
lifting u (you)
out of mourning (morning)
Sunrise
^^ Haiku-like; yet it pivots on the linguistic more than the imagistic
In the early drafting, the 3rd line was a traditional haiku reference: "Sunrise."
In the current appearance, I play with typography to make the reading/viewing lively - the visual projects the sense.
And the 3rd line is a cube:
sees sun
She arise
the order of the words is open for the reader to juggle, to rotate.
^^ Hopefully, an enriching experience - not just the expected haiku experience - more interactive.
These techniques are akin to Language Poetry (Langpo), at least as I understand it, and in service to the haiku aesthetic:
I discovered the early draft had evolved into what I describe as a "lang-ku"
Michael (MV)
"lang-ku" a combo of genre "language poetry" and "haiku."
lifting u (you)
out of mourning (morning)
Sunrise
^^ Haiku-like; yet it pivots on the linguistic more than the imagistic
In the early drafting, the 3rd line was a traditional haiku reference: "Sunrise."
In the current appearance, I play with typography to make the reading/viewing lively - the visual projects the sense.
And the 3rd line is a cube:
sees sun
She arise
the order of the words is open for the reader to juggle, to rotate.
^^ Hopefully, an enriching experience - not just the expected haiku experience - more interactive.
These techniques are akin to Language Poetry (Langpo), at least as I understand it, and in service to the haiku aesthetic:
I discovered the early draft had evolved into what I describe as a "lang-ku"
Michael (MV)
Billy wrote:Not sure what to say about this one, Michael. I'm not real good with these short, coded ones, if it is coded. I'm trying to feel an image here, of course, the morning and sunrise and She. Will reread a few times aloud and maybe get back if I can think of anything to say to help.
Re: a lang-ku
Thanks, Michael, I like it very much and now see what you're doing.