in an open field

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Billy
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in an open field

#1 Post by Billy » 18 Mar 2014, 02:26

in an open field

not knowing that soil
still clings to them
that their bones
yearn to be found
before they turn to dust

that the wind sings
through them
the endless song
of their former lives

that worms weave
a space for souls
the dead are convinced
will come to them
on a grey winter day

as sparrows foraging
in snowless patches
of last year's stubble

Michael (MV)
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Re: in an open field

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 20 Mar 2014, 20:04

Hi Billy,

a gradual, inevitable resurrection


that worms weave
a space for souls
the dead are convinced
will come to them
on a grey day

as sparrows foraging
in snowless patches
of last winter's stubble



Here @ the vernal equinox, I quote this miraculous trinity:

Hope   Springs   Eternal


and music-video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=98LaApCB4l8


8)

Michael (MV)

 
 
 
 
 

SivaRamanathan
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Re: in an open field

#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 22 Mar 2014, 07:30

Billy

I have been reading this poem,almost every day.It is just right,nothing you can add or take away.

Siva

mojave
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Re: in an open field

#4 Post by mojave » 22 Mar 2014, 14:21

hello Billy---


i agree with Siva.

love that last image.


bernie

meenas17
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Re: in an open field

#5 Post by meenas17 » 27 Mar 2014, 22:34

A short and fulfilling poem .
meena
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