The mango tree is fluttering cheerfully in the garden.
The guava tree stands solemnly grim with a heavy burden.
A whiff of air blows all of a sudden.
The trees dangle vigorously with fruits heavily laden.
The fall of little mangoes makes the heart sadden.
The ripe yellow guavas come down in dozens.
The mango and guava are a subtle reference
indicating the world's impermanence .
Mango and Guava
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Re: Mango and Guava
Hi meenas17
w/out the last 2 lines; and workshop illustrated for your persusal & consideration Michael (MV)
The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden..
The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden.
A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle
vigorously heavily laden with produce.
The fall of little mangoes sags the heart.
The ripe yellow guavas come down in groves.
w/out the last 2 lines; and workshop illustrated for your persusal & consideration Michael (MV)
The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden..
The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden.
A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle
vigorously heavily laden with produce.
The fall of little mangoes sags the heart.
The ripe yellow guavas come down in groves.
Re: Mango and Guava
To me your poem brought back to my memory our life in the tropics, living on the equator and our garden full of mango and quava trees and I remember the thuds that seems to go on all night long. So your poem worked it elicitated a response in me. I thak you for that, the poem needs a lot of work, over-telling is a problem for you.
Re: Mango and Guava
Michael and dyerfrank
The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden..
The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden.
A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle
vigorously heavily laden with produce.
The fall of little mangoes sags the heart.
The ripe yellow guavas come down in groves.
I have adopted what Michael has done it for me.
The mango tree flutters cheerfully in the garden..
The guava tree stands grim with a heavy burden.
A whiff of air, and the limbs dangle
vigorously heavily laden with produce.
The fall of little mangoes sags the heart.
The ripe yellow guavas come down in groves.
I have adopted what Michael has done it for me.
meenas17